Yay or Nay? . . . Novella Idea . . .

I go hot and cold on this idea I have for a novella, so I thought I'd put the idea out there and see what the response is . . .

Here's a rough opening . . . see if you can guess where the story is heading. Meet you at the bottom . . .

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The Candlestick Maker

I’D BEEN WAITING for my perfect man to come back to me all summer, ever since he’d melted in the year’s first heat wave. That was back in June—a whole three months ago. Though it felt closer to a year, if you ask me.

Days were longer without him sitting across the dye-splattered table as I molded candles in all shapes and sizes, like horses, and dogs, and cupcakes, and dildos, and butt-cheeks, and whatever else Berliners wanted that season.

My perfect man—Vincent, I named him, ‘V’ for the way his stomach tapered, the way I wished mine would too, but never quite did—my Vincent would never judge. He’d smile, ‘beautiful,’ he’d say, ‘how could it not be? Your hands are magic. Everything you touch comes to life.’

I was glad the latter wasn’t entirely true, or my workshop, my not more than thirty square feet, would smell badly of horse and dog, the cupcakes would all have been eaten—by myself most likely—and, well, that would be just too many cocks, even for my liking.

Still, just to hear him say it again would be bliss.

Lunch-break walks through Treptower Park were impossible to bear without his arm slipping into the crook of mine, and his deep voice as we bellowed out a cheery song or two.

Worst, though, worst were the nights without his arms embracing me. Without his soft kisses trailing down my throat before we made love.

So, when a yellowed chestnut leaf danced over my worn, brown boots, I knew the wait for my perfect man was over.
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So yeah, the story idea is a sweet and lonely man makes his perfect other half from wax every autumn and lives his "perfect" life until the end of spring. But alas, every summer his man melts and he must wait until the next autumn to remake him.

The story plays five years into this cycle and would cover one year--the year he tries to make a second "perfect man" for his songwriter friend.

I guess the story--meant to be light-hearted and quirky--would challenge the idea of what the "perfect man" is.

It would have a romance in it and I think an HEA. Hmmmm.

But maybe this is too weird?
If so, I have a couple of other ideas lurking about, so . . . :)
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Published on October 09, 2012 12:52
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message 1: by Emma Sea (new)

Emma Sea I really like this idea, and to me it feels like a tear-jerker, rather than light-hearted


message 2: by Leanne (new)

Leanne Yes, it has more of a melancholic feel to me...love the idea though.


message 3: by Anyta (new)

Anyta Sunday Melancholic, eh . . . hmm . . . I'd want it on the sweeter side of that, but I can see where you're coming from. Will mull it over. :) Thanks for the thoughts.


message 4: by Fehu (new)

Fehu I think I've read the same plot idea and the finished story, just with a snowman by Qui and there was a happy end there.


message 5: by Emma Sea (last edited Oct 21, 2012 01:04PM) (new)

Emma Sea Fehu wrote: "I think I've read the same plot idea and the finished story, just with a snowman by Qui and there was a happy end there."

Yeah but all m/m has the same plot! . . . the same but with paramedics; the same but one's a vampire; the same but it's set in space . . . It's all about how it's written and the details.


message 6: by Anyta (last edited Oct 22, 2012 12:26AM) (new)

Anyta Sunday Well, I'd been thinking on the idea some more over the last week, and I decided I didn't really want to write anything too sad, so I came up with another idea. It still has a guy who makes things from wax, but nothing paranormal in it. . . .

Once my flat is finally renovated, I hope to get started on this as an evening project. :)

Ohh, the snowman story sounds interesting. :) Yes, perhaps it might be similar to what I envisioned, but Emma is correct--there aren't that many different plots out there--only the characters and the way it is written can be unique.

Cheers for all the feedback, peeps!


message 7: by Sunne (new)

Sunne Hm...I'm a bit late ot comment?

I think the idea could work - but it seriously needs a HEA and a very positive attitude - which is difficult to obtain under the circumstances.

You managaged that in "Invisible" so I have faith in you.


message 8: by Anyta (new)

Anyta Sunday Sunne wrote: "Hm...I'm a bit late ot comment?

I think the idea could work - but it seriously needs a HEA and a very positive attitude


Not late to comment, but I've sidelined this idea for the moment and am working on a Berlin novella series. I am definitely in the mood for sweet HEA's at the moment. :D


message 9: by Sunne (new)

Sunne Well...I love sweet HEA's.

So, your next novellas are taking place in Berlin? If you need any help with German - tell me.

I admit, it's one of my personal pet peeves when an author uses German and gets it wrong (and unfortunately it happens more often than you imagine) So..I offer help - I'm German.


message 10: by Anyta (new)

Anyta Sunday Sunne wrote: "Well...I love sweet HEA's.

So, your next novellas are taking place in Berlin? If you need any help with German - tell me.

I admit, it's one of my personal pet peeves when an author uses German a..."


Well thank you very much! I am lucky my husband is German and most of my friends too (I live in Berlin and speak it okay--though my written German is shocking, lol). Still, sometimes even the hubby is stumped. Like, tonight I wanted a light-hearted swearword in German that one character mutters about his best friend. Sort of in an annoyed but still friendly way. We went through heaps of options together and settled for Kasper, but if you have a better idea I'm all ears. :)

Oh, I had another query, though, I'm writing 99% in English and using the occasional German word, but I really want to use the word "Oma" instead of grandma, and I think this wouldn't be too hard for non-German speakers to understand, but does anyone have a differing opinion on that?

Of course I could have it all just in English, but I feel it needs the taste of Germany in it . . . :D


message 11: by Anyta (new)

Anyta Sunday Er . . . speak German okay, not Berlin, Lol--unless you count Pfannkuchen?

:P


message 12: by Sunne (new)

Sunne *relieved sigh* Good. So you want a word that is affectionate but shows that the other one is kind of a clown?

My suggestions:
Quatschkopf
Löli
Chaot
Idiot (well, common but often used - let's say..the classic)
Depp
Knalltüte
Pappnase

I like "Kasper" but I wouldn't classify it as a swearword, I say it sometimes to my kids if they behave funny. For me it's more an affectionate nickname. But...come to think of it...some of the above are that, too.

A bit less nice would be:
Döskopf
Dummbatz
Troll

And if the one behaved clumsy - no matter physically or emotionally:
Tölpel
Trampel
Riesenrind
Volltrottel
Walross


message 13: by Naph (new)

Naph i like it cause it made me laugh the first 60 seconds into it,but i wouldn't read it i think cause it's kinda sad if you really think about. (but i can always change my mind)


message 14: by Anyta (new)

Anyta Sunday Sunne: Wow. Extensive list there. That's great. :)

Naph: Thanks for liking it. This story is on hold. I started writing, and I decided I wanted to write something different--and now I'm writing a gay paranormal mystery -- it took me by surprise, but I'm enjoying the process.

And so much for writing a novella . . . this books heading into novel territory, lol. :P


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