It's been years since I've read Hawksong, and I never wanted to read this because I thought it was in their kid's perspective.
Their history was surprisingly confusing, with a lot of names to remember.
Idr it being in Zane's perspective, but maybe the author decided to do it for the 2nd bk. She didn't capture a guy's voice. At first I thought it was a girls, in Danica's POV.
I did not remember Zane's oldest brother killed Danica's mom. And he went to attack them, and saw her sleeping and fell in love, wanted peace. If he fell in love upon sight, then why did he cheat after they were together?
Her sister died, allowing her to become heir to the throne, same as Zane with his brother.
It's weird to say 'the serpiente dress rippled around the hawk's long legs' when she's in human form.
When he said Andreios had known and loved Danica all her life and was too much the gentleman to speak of his love for another man's mate I couldn't believe it.
I thought they found the pregnancy out at the end of the last book. Because it says it in the description. They gave it away in the synopsis when the characters didn't even know.
When the dance teacher tells Zane to get her some raspberry ginger tea he realizes she's pregnant and she doesn't even know! The dance teacher then sends them off saying women have babies for forever and Danica didn't even comment. This led me to believe Danica isn't very bright.
Talking about his child being able to spread a cobra's hood was weird. What does that even look like? And a woman's feathers on her neck while in human form. It's just weird. Why would they have any animal traits while they're in human form?
Talking of a snakes egg growing too quickly. They're in human form! The serpient child growing in her avian body was so very twilight.
'I wrapped my arms around milady.' That isn't how the word milday should be used.
Rooms are called nests, and idk why a snake's room would be called a nest.
Diente and Naga are serpiente king and queen. Tuuli Thea and alistair are avian king and Queen.
They weren't sure the criminal Syfka was after was a guy, but Zane kept saying 'he'.
'Our child would be born in peace, but would she live in war?' Here again, why use he or she when you don't know the gender?
Him and his brothers were Arami and Diente. If a girl takes the throne as Diente her husband would be called Nag.
I didn't like that Zane put down the avians, how they aren't raised with dance and a passion to live, but with chaste sense of duty and modesty. There's nothing wrong with that.
A'isha is annoying, being seductive around Rei when she knows he likes someone else.
It's interesting to hear of their dances, how some dances men don't perform without their mates.
There's unique names and then there's a Betsy and a Seth, which didn't fit at all.
Danica isn't strong. She falls from the horse on the 'soft ground' and has bruises and scrapes, gets knocked unconscious. She's missing the meetings with the falcon. She's passed out twice already.
Earlier Zane said he didn't know if it was a boy or girl but when Erica heals Danica he asks about his daughter and Erica says his daughter will be fine. When did the knowledge of the birth became known?
The magic is very sketchy. Even the character says "idk how I can explain it. I...put the hurt pieces together again." That sounds like a 5 year old's explanation. Of course falcon magic isn't always best for the mom, didn't hurt the baby at all,& now she won't be able to have another child. Just to complicate matters further. All that was was a major plot device, that I hated.
Without the magic Danica might have lived but not the baby.
It was very like twilight how they only had one kid.
There's too ellipsis in here, and dashes where they don't belong.
"I haven't had it in...months."
"It happened when I was...8."
"I found Rei..."
"But a hawk..."
"I remember seeing a viper sink its fangs into Rei's side, but...not much more."
"I felt as if I had to keep going back to the field...to try to help."
Those were all from one page. One page.
And--
"Betsy is worried the child was--hurt."
"I am sure she will want to know that you are--recovered."
Zane tells Danica that Erica said it will be a girl,& I was thinking no she didn't. I had to flip back and see. He asks after the child and she says she'll be fine, but that didn't tell me it was a girl because Zane has been using the term 'she', so I thought it was another guess at the gender.
And it's a girl, just like twilight.
I found Danica old-sounding, not young at all. She was 15 I think it said in here in the first bk, or at least when the attack happened on her family by Zane's brother, where her alistair was killed.
I can't connect with her at all,& I find it unrelatable that YA would relate to the kid part either. It stands out when she says "I want to talk to the monster who tried to prevent her from having one," all mother bear. I just don't think teens would relate to this.
There's no emotion from the characters. They grab each other's hands, hold each other close but there's no emotion behind it. No adjectives on how they feel.
Danica is also slow up on the uptake. The woman who fired the bow at them said a tall, fair, foreign avian convinced them of the plan to kill them,& Danica's like "Syfka wasn't even there." Wow, that was dumb.
More sketchy magic when Erica said Syfka would see the magic on her,& that "there was falcon magic all over that group." How can you see magic? What does it look like?
Kel looks at Rei with a cool, sad gaze which isn't really possible to do. Can you be cool and sad at the same time?
Kel calls Syfka Lady aplomado, and it seemed like it should be capitalized.
The white lady sounds like narnia and the white city sounds like gondor.
Children of the falcons are rare, because Ahnmik's magic is based on stillness and death.
So if someone in the upper ranks has a child it's a miracle. Mixed blood children are easier to have but more dangerous. Their magic gets warped and they go mad.
I thought it was cool how traditionally a member of the Royal Flight must get permission to court a lady, since he can't swear to guard and protect his pair bond and his queen with his life.
Idk what time period this was in. It feels medieval, what with the Keep, but it would have been nice to have a year of when this was set in.
It's weird that the snake's dance hall is called nest and maybe their bedroom too, while the bird's place is called Keep. It should be the opposite.
This sounds medieval, yet the word brat is used.
Zane wonders what would have happened if Kiesha and the other 8 servants from the Dasi had survived as the royal falcons had. Or Queen Alasdair and her first avian kin. And what magic their people might have had if they hadn't wasted thousands of years in war. I wish this book had been about that, with them having full powers like the falcons, who stayed out of the war. It would probably be more interesting that way.
The 'heir to the kingdom of moon and mountain' sounded like the hobbit.
I didn't like that Rei was the missing falcon, and an heir to boot.
The cool Andreios wasn't even like the blushing guy with A'isha the dance teacher.
He said Araceli sent him there as a child. And his real name is Sebastian. And Araceli is his mom.
They didn't say she was old enough to have kids.
I like that the word used for the necklace, shakecharm was used for the title. I like when titles are used in the book.
I didn't like that for the falcons to have to take someone's form the person has to have died. Like Erica really being Kel, a falcon who tried to save her. And Andreios really being Sebastian.
Zane wonders if when Danica survived a serpent's attack when Rei was poisoned and she was unconscious if he had tried to save Andreios from the serpent's poison by force-changing him and then earned a crow's form in the process. Syfka ordered Sebastian to return home when Rei was hurt so no one questioned his absence when the substitution was made. That explained his sudden behavior of wanting to quit the guard. Because that wasn't really Rei. So Rei has been dead since that day.
I hated that even more.
I thought this was what happened until Danica said that Rei was someone else all these years. I wondered why Zane even presented that one possibility if it didn't turn out to be true.
Her mom Nacola said Danica hasn't been that upset since her alistair died at 15, and Andreious(or Sebastian) drew her out of it. I didn't know she loved her alistair, and didn't even remember her having an alistair.
I was surprised when he said there's been jealousy between him and Rei cause I don't remember that.
I assumed Gerard was young, wanting permission to court a young lady. When it turns out he's courting Danica's mom, I couldn't believe it. You have to say peoples age and appearance. That is very lacking in here.
Zane helped in the training of the new guards after the falcons were taken, then it says as evening fell Danica drifted to his side, making it sound like she was watching the training, but all of a sudden they were on their balcony.
So the real Rei died protecting her, and his father died too when Danica was 12.
I didn't think it made sense for A'isha to say that falcon or not, heir or not, he's one of theirs. 'The Cobriana learned years ago that you don't hold a dancer against the ruling of the best. The shm'Ahnmik might as well learn the same."
Danica gives a speech about Kel and Rei, saying "a young woman who used to dance in her homeland, and who teasingly challenged the man she fancied to learn" but she never knew about that. Zane did. Because Zane's been where all the action is, while Danica is off in some room recovering. How did she learn of Kel challenging Rei to dance?
"Even if we can't find a way to bring our dancers home, we may find something helpful for the future." It doesn't seem like dancers would be that important, definitely not above heirs and royalty.
A'isha says she should be able to protect Rei. "Like I said yesterday, the guild has always dealt with its own. Nest justice always comes before outside rule." That's ridiculous.
Idl that they're calling him ours and one of our own. He was just learning to dance, it wasn't like he was sworn in.
Out of nowhere comes an idea of having a new world with their blended ppl,& it gets built up into an actual plan in a couple of lines. With no planning, just throwing it out suddenly.
When A'isha says she'd join a dragons nest I thought it was supposed to be funny, and when that's passed up she says wyvern's nest. Then Wyvern's Court, so now they've come up with a name with no planning.
The cute moments are brushed over. She says her first mad scheme was when she announced him as her alistair. And then it goes to the next chapter without his response. We could use some more connection between them, teasing and romance. Don't just brush over it.
Without talking it over and hashing it out, they start looking for the approval of their courts and talking of spreading the news in the markets. The whole thing was so sudden, it was insane.
Valence goes alone to Ahnmik to petition the falcon empress to get Andreios back based on a very convenient loophole in some ancient texts. I couldn't believe they didn't go with her. Right when the book would be getting interesting, it just drops it,& leaves it. Why wouldn't the royals--Zane and Danica--go to another royal to petition to get one of their own back? Why send some third party completely alone? That made zero sense. I guess because Zane can't--cough *wont'*--fly, the author skipped over the hassle of figuring out how to get him to a faraway land.
Again they use gender when they don't know it: Nacola says if she had another child she would raise her to be loyal to her king or Queen and their heir. Are you banking on having another girl? Are they fortune tellers here? I know avians are more likely to have girls--idk why. neither does the author--but you could have a boy.
I found it weird how the dancers stretched and danced in the morning and the end of the day. And just sleep in the nest all together. It was too cult-like for my tastes, and I didn't care for the dancers guild, tribe, organization, whatever you wanna call it.
On pg 156 Zane says “Compromise may also mean letting unattached ladies and gentlemen make their own decision and mistakes.” I looked at Danica , remembering the first uneasy months after she had agreed to become my mate. She smiled encouragingly.’
Ugh, are you thinking of your affair, you sleezeball? And you claimed to fall in love with her the night you saw her. Why the heck would she be smiling then?
He said it was only a few days ago when Rei and Valene were accepted as dancers, and now anyone who wanted to help their project was welcome. That is way too sudden. I couldn't believe the whole book took place over a few days. And I've never seen a project come together so fast. Imagine coming up with a whole community in a few minutes, and planning for it in a few days!
Syfka showed up, acting completely different. I couldn't believe it, and it actually confused me, because she seemed to have been helping Kel and Rei the whole time, but she was evil, so I didn't even understand her motives. Yes, she didn't think they were fit to live as falcons, but why help them?
The saying 'feathered Hades' was used, and it didn't make sense to have a Greek god in here, when these are descendants of Egyptian gods.
It took them years to come searching for Rei because it took that long for Araceli to convince the Empress he was still falcon. That was pretty dubious reasoning there. It took you years to convince the Empress that Rei was still a falcon. Hmm.
This didn't have a conclusive ending. The whole book was about the birth of their child, and then it doesn't even include it. We also don't know if/when they build their new kingdom, and if it will be successful, and their people will accept it. Also, how will a seperate kingdom of avians and serpents solve the problem of their two species when you're still leaving the serpent kingdom separate and the avian kingdom separate. That would still keep the two cultures apart.
Looking back on the book getting quotes, I reread where Zane and Danica were supposed to have a dance together 4 months later, an ancient ritualistic dance of this people. The author didn't include it, because this book only covered a few days, but that would have been nice to read about.
I reread & didn't remember pg 16 at all, where Sebastian came to them at age 12 as ambassador of the falcons. He didn’t know kid’s games. When Syfka arrived to check on him, he said he was staying and would be Danica’s alistair. Rei’s father was killed right after Sebastian left. I’m really confused now. How did Sebastian go from being Danica's alistair to going back to his people? Then how did Sebastian turn into Rei if he had left for his home?!
The Sebastian/Rei thing was too confusing, and wasn't explained properly. I still don't understand it.
I also reread this on pg38:’Remembering so many years of war when this beautiful woman had been my enemy, so hated that when fate crossed our paths there had been no choice but for me to love her.’ That didn't make any sense. She was so hated that you then had no choice but to love her...(??)
I found Zane to be hypocritical. He wanted Danica to accept his culture, but he did nothing to accept hers. Unless you count tolerating his mother-in-law as acceptance. She’s danced and learned to sleep beside him, but he hasn’t flown or done anything from her culture. Then he spent the whole book bashing the avians, how they raise their children, leaving them alone, how they don't accept themselves or live with passion, and how they're modest. What if Danica just put down your culture the whole time?
This was ok-ish. It lacked world building, and explanations of how magic worked, and had very little detail on characters' appearances, age. I wish this had been the last one, but there's like 5 in this series. So now I feel sort of obligated to read them, but I don't really want to.