This has to be one of the worst books I’ve read, the worst! I don’t even know where to begin.
The writing style is horrible and extremely boring; the repetition gets to a point where I know what to expect before I even read it.
I will try to state few things that I hated most in a neutral way or it will be just an angry review, even though I am angry I have wasted my time on this book that I had to finish just because I started.
-One of many things I hated about this story is how the writer describes the characters, and repeat the same description over and over as if it was the first time she tackle this particular subject. For example she described Aidan eyes the first time and that was an ok description, then later she repeats the same description using the same WORDS again and again almost in every paragraph.
-His voice is black velvet OK WE GOT IT it’s a A BLACK VELVET for god’s sake stop saying it in each paragraph and after each sentence said by the male charachter! BLACK DAMNED VELVETTTT. Later on we will encounter yet another velvet other than Aidan’s voice and I will leave that to those who will read the book.
-And what with the disturbing breast feeding image you are creating here Ms. Writer? You want to be creative, bring a new idea different than drinking blood from the neck. Well let me tell you this. With vampires, no one can be creative anymore the topic had been tackled from all sides and it’s just silly trying to be creative with it. But feeding from the breast area and creating this disturbing image like a mother is feeding her baby. I have no words to say to that but the writer own words
"Shh, Aidan." She put a finger over his mouth. "You have no need to blame yourself. Come to me. Take what you need to do this thing, to get Joshua back." She was slowly pushing aside the silk shirt she wore, her slender arm circling his neck, bringing his head down to her breast.
"I will hunt. You have need yourself." He clenched his teeth against the hunger beating at him.
WHAT?! Really? Seriously what?! Why would you create such scenes and when he feed “FEED” her also from the beast area!!!
Sometimes going classic is the way to go. If you don’t have creativity don’t try to create.
-I could have skipped chapters and chapters without missing a thing as the plot did not progress an inch since the main male character “Aidan” was thinking and rethinking how he couldn’t believe he finally has his own family and how he could finally feel and see colors.
-and then there is the Alexandria and her trauma and her repeated action. She can’t accept this, she needs to return to her normal life, which was horrible by the way, she can’t breath, she needs to stop these feelings for Aidan. All this was repeated in the same way everything else was repeated, consuming most of the book’s pages.
- “SO” this dreadful little word at the beginning of almost every adjective, not that there were a variety since the vocabulary were limited to velvet, liquid heat, creamy heat, velvet, velvet, VELVET. add the “SO” before them and you got yourself a so, so velvety heated scene. I promise, the use of the word SO, so many times, so very much, shows a lack of vocabulary so much that you can’t describe something so beautiful or create a scene so intense without using the so. I so hate this so much it can kill me!
-Aidan’s muscles, rippling, solid, hard, taut… etc it felt like the writer was writing an adjective, right click, choose a synonym and add the word muscle after.
Once or twice you remind us that he is strong and handsome with muscles were more than enough.
- predator, say it once describing Aidan’s character it will be cool but repeating it the way it had been repeated in this story shows the writer is disparately trying to tell us her main character is SO cool, SO big with muscles, his eyes are SO golden, and his voice is SO SO SO velvety and he is So scary the predator in him is just beneath the surface.
- Oh, let’s not forget the way Aidan walk and talk. He never once in the book walked he ether glide easily towards the kitchen or floated up the stairs. What kind of image can I form with a character that moves like a ghost!
- another thing, one of the things I like about reading is that sometimes you can almost hear the character speak, that every character has their own style, their own voice while in this book every one speaks in the exact same way the 800 years old Carpathian Aidan and the young American Alex. They all talk using the same structure, where they not?!
Do you not agree?
You are not afraid, are you?
You caught up with the vampire, didn't you?
You’re very dangerous, aren't you?
I think I have made my point; all the questions are the same exact structure. All the sentences in conversation could’ve been said by one person.
-For some reason this book screamed quantity over quality, as if the writer was trying to reach a certain number of pages regardless what she fills them with. Why? Because one, the repetition mentioned above. And two there weren’t any contractions in that book at all. Every not was spelled, every had been, have been, is not, do not… etc
Why would you do that even in a conversation? No one speaks like that. You were trying to write more words, were you not? “Winks”
At last if not for spoiling the story I could write it all without missing a thing in one page if I eliminated the repetition and if I used contraction.
And I will never buy or read another book by this writer, shame I bought dark magic along with dark gold I thought the idea and concept were good. But with this bad writing I can never read another book like this one.
This was my opinion and maybe others won’t feel they were repelled and disturbed by the things I mentioned, and they will enjoy the story.