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Derelict
In the dark heart of space, a derelict freighter drifts empty and lifeless. But in the shadows...something waits.
33 pages, Kindle Edition
First published October 28, 2010
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August 3, 2016
-Tratando de trabajar una idea.-
Género. Relato.
Lo que nos cuenta. La nave Persephone, de carga y pasajeros, entra en el tráfico orbital de Marte sin contestar a ninguna comunicación. Tras unos días, el Departamento de Aduanas decide mandar personal a bordo para comprobar la situación. Y la nave está vacía, sin personas ni carga, y sus sistemas están apagados. Pero hay algo extraño.
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Género. Relato.
Lo que nos cuenta. La nave Persephone, de carga y pasajeros, entra en el tráfico orbital de Marte sin contestar a ninguna comunicación. Tras unos días, el Departamento de Aduanas decide mandar personal a bordo para comprobar la situación. Y la nave está vacía, sin personas ni carga, y sus sistemas están apagados. Pero hay algo extraño.
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February 26, 2019
That is an extremely uncanny story set in outer space. Normally I don't like science fiction combined with horror but this story got me hooked from the first page on. A team of three men try to find out what led to a derelict spacecraft named Persephone (what an apt name). They move through the labyrinth like ship, Mary Celeste, the legendary ghost ship is mentioned by the captain. What is going on here? Where is the door that appears all of a sudden leading to? What does the oozing blackness on the floor consist of? There is nailbiting tension in this story full of hair raising horror. Absolutely recommended!
November 30, 2011
Not a bad story or storytelling, but not my cup of tea either. At first I couldn't stop turning the pages but in the end I simply lost interest and when it's a short story, that's not a good thing.
December 30, 2011
This was an interesting short story. A 3 man crew is sent to investigate an abandoned space ship. The premise is intriguing and the story is too. There are a few grammar/typo issues but they didn't interfere too much with my enjoyment of the story.
October 27, 2017
A ship arrives at Mars with no crew, passengers or cargo. According to Earth it should have all 3. 3 men are sent to investigate and as they do so, they find out something isn’t quite right. When they enter the ship, nothing is as it should be. No signs of life, or even having had life on board during the cruise.
Needless to say this is a pretty good little spooky story similar to any other missing crew type ship/space ship story. But I enjoyed it for what it was, a fun little romp in spookytown. It has some serious writing issues though. There was a time where the author confused two of the characters and swapped their names, so that took me a few minutes to re-read and figure out what was going on. It also had a few grammatical errors as well.
Needless to say, I would read this author again.
Needless to say this is a pretty good little spooky story similar to any other missing crew type ship/space ship story. But I enjoyed it for what it was, a fun little romp in spookytown. It has some serious writing issues though. There was a time where the author confused two of the characters and swapped their names, so that took me a few minutes to re-read and figure out what was going on. It also had a few grammatical errors as well.
Needless to say, I would read this author again.
October 12, 2017
There's an creepy eerieness about the dead silence of space. "Alien" did it best. Albert Berg takes that creepiness and adds twisting rooms and corridors that loop back upon themselves, almost like the move "Cube." Except, of course, there's a neat little hat trick ending. A lovely short story for fans of sci fi and horror.
November 24, 2024
Unnerving SF Horror
… and entertaining as well.
Three men enter a derelict space craft in orbit around Mars and enter sheer madness, corridors without end, doors leading into Voids, and impossible schematics.
It all leads to a twist ending.
All in all, an entertaining short story.
… and entertaining as well.
Three men enter a derelict space craft in orbit around Mars and enter sheer madness, corridors without end, doors leading into Voids, and impossible schematics.
It all leads to a twist ending.
All in all, an entertaining short story.
July 14, 2020
Sci fi horror.
A freebie. A brief repetitive story about finding a lost ship. This only works as a short story. Might work in a fantasy world.
A freebie. A brief repetitive story about finding a lost ship. This only works as a short story. Might work in a fantasy world.
June 4, 2022
Quick read
An eldritch story in desperate need of a good editing, but a decent story. That's all I have to say but for some reason I'm required to write more words for it to post
An eldritch story in desperate need of a good editing, but a decent story. That's all I have to say but for some reason I'm required to write more words for it to post
March 14, 2023
Trippy
I enjoyed this haunted house in space story. It kept me on the edge of my seat the whole time.
I enjoyed this haunted house in space story. It kept me on the edge of my seat the whole time.
January 13, 2024
More of a short story than anything, but decent nonetheless. In need of serious editing though.
April 6, 2024
Interesting short sci fi “horror” story.
November 23, 2025
Repeated horror
It's an okay repeated horror tale with subtle changes to keep the reader interested. Don't expect much if you want an actual explanation.
It's an okay repeated horror tale with subtle changes to keep the reader interested. Don't expect much if you want an actual explanation.
July 29, 2014
When an E-class space ship docks at an orbital station without heeding to or sending any response, a team is assembled to enter and investigate.
Available information says the ship was the Persephone and it was supposed to have a full passenger roster and a cargo load. But when the team of three men begin to search the ship, they quickly realize something is very wrong. There is no evidence people or cargo were ever aboard the ship.
As they explore further, things begin to go weird. Doors are there, then not there. Corridors stretch on to impossible lengths and become dead ends where they shouldn’t.
The team fears they may never find their way out. They believe the ship will never let them go.
This is a quick read at around 33 pages, so I zipped right through it. I was reminded of the movie Sphere, except this takes place in space, not under water.
I still felt the claustrophobic effect of being trapped with no help close by. Of the possibility their minds might be playing tricks on them. Or maybe something else was there with them. Something malignant, evil. Toying with them.
Eerie with a twisted ending.
Available information says the ship was the Persephone and it was supposed to have a full passenger roster and a cargo load. But when the team of three men begin to search the ship, they quickly realize something is very wrong. There is no evidence people or cargo were ever aboard the ship.
As they explore further, things begin to go weird. Doors are there, then not there. Corridors stretch on to impossible lengths and become dead ends where they shouldn’t.
The team fears they may never find their way out. They believe the ship will never let them go.
This is a quick read at around 33 pages, so I zipped right through it. I was reminded of the movie Sphere, except this takes place in space, not under water.
I still felt the claustrophobic effect of being trapped with no help close by. Of the possibility their minds might be playing tricks on them. Or maybe something else was there with them. Something malignant, evil. Toying with them.
Eerie with a twisted ending.
May 9, 2013
This is a fairly decent sci-fi / horror short.
The author does a good job capturing the atmosphere of the derelict ship and does put together a scary scenario.
I don't usually comment on grammatical or spelling errors unless they impact the overall story. But, as they have been addressed by others, I thought I would point out that errors were not as damaging as I originally thought they would be based on earlier reviews. Interestingly, most of the errors are clumped into a couple of paragraphs that are back-to-back, as if whoever did the editing just skipped a page or two.
I am rating this one 3 STARS with a bias towards 3 1/2.
The author does a good job capturing the atmosphere of the derelict ship and does put together a scary scenario.
I don't usually comment on grammatical or spelling errors unless they impact the overall story. But, as they have been addressed by others, I thought I would point out that errors were not as damaging as I originally thought they would be based on earlier reviews. Interestingly, most of the errors are clumped into a couple of paragraphs that are back-to-back, as if whoever did the editing just skipped a page or two.
I am rating this one 3 STARS with a bias towards 3 1/2.
October 29, 2014
An incredibly short read with a somewhat familiar plot line, that's not really a bad thing in this case. A large ghost ship ends up entering orbit around Mars, no communications, no acknowledgements, nothing but static. A team is sent up to investigate the ship and find out where it came from, where the crew is, and what's doing... It's about a ten minute read.
There were a few typos in it, I sort of get the feeling that it was a project - something the author had to write. However, it is a good short story, it is a free eBook, and it's an interesting take on creepy science fiction.
There were a few typos in it, I sort of get the feeling that it was a project - something the author had to write. However, it is a good short story, it is a free eBook, and it's an interesting take on creepy science fiction.
September 6, 2011
The story was good, very atmospheric and dark and thrilling. I couldn't stop turning pages.
But I was sometimes confused at strange wording that seemd to be caused by simple typos, like "when" where "went" would possibly be expected. I even felt for a couple of times that the character's name was likely to be misexchanged. If there wasn't such confusion, I'd add one more star.
But I was sometimes confused at strange wording that seemd to be caused by simple typos, like "when" where "went" would possibly be expected. I even felt for a couple of times that the character's name was likely to be misexchanged. If there wasn't such confusion, I'd add one more star.
June 2, 2014
An intriguing story that certainly achieved a high level of suspense. I am uncertain about the editing, as it seems that nobody really ever read it carefully beyond using a simple spell check--there were many wrong words inserted, homophones, etc. Nonetheless, I enjoyed the fast story and the unusual setting.
March 17, 2014
I think I've been here before...
I think I've been here before...
well written and imagined, but not an original concept. But an original point of view and an original venue.
I think horror in space adds a new dimension to the genre.
I think I've been here before...
well written and imagined, but not an original concept. But an original point of view and an original venue.
I think horror in space adds a new dimension to the genre.
April 9, 2015
Standard short story fiction with a predictable plot. The execution, however, did give me shivers, and I was pleased. It was free on Amazon Kindle, but I would have paid a small price for it. Definitely worth the hour that I spent reading and then rereading.
April 13, 2015
An enjoyable little tale, and, although the concept was not a new one, it was done well. The cyclic nature of the story being my favourite part. A few grammar and spelling mistakes, but nothing too terrible.
August 15, 2011
Interesting short story about a spaceship. Not too bad. Interesting twist at the end, but I saw it coming.
October 13, 2011
Not bad until the cliched ending
January 29, 2013
Fun enough storytelling for a short story, but needs an editor. Someone should have really looked it over before publishing, there are a lot of errors.
April 25, 2013
An okay short story. Reminded me of the movie Triangle.
August 21, 2013
This is a crazy, hair raising short horror story. The horror element is so subtle at first that you don't start to feel it until you are invested with the main character. Bravo.
June 5, 2015
Nice short read
This story reminded me of one of my all time favorite space/horror movies, Event Horizon. "Where we are going........ you won't need eyes to see." *shudders*
This story reminded me of one of my all time favorite space/horror movies, Event Horizon. "Where we are going........ you won't need eyes to see." *shudders*
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