This was bad writing, plain and simple. When I first started reading it I could tell it wasn’t well written, it doesn’t take any time at all to decide whether you like the way something is written. The prologue was confusing and the characters were hard to keep up with, so following along was a task. Then she jumps into modern times with a psychologist who I think is just that. But as the novel progresses the author drops these huge bombs right into the story with no warning whatsoever. All of a sudden the male student accuses Jessica of knowing more than she’s letting on, and she just up and spews out all of these facts about vampires, after saying she didn’t believe in vampires, after she had said so much psycho babble to explain what happened, there she sits and suggests crosses, garlic and holy water. Out of freaking nowhere this happens and I am thrown for a loop! It’s stated that Jessica is the dominatrix that appeared in the beginning of the story with the students in Transylvania, just up and mentioned with no warning whatsoever. Um, okay. I’ll just swallow that one down too. Then the third bomb is dropped that Jessica is a vampire. And then it just goes on and on. She goes to her friend’s house, Maggie, who just starts talking about Jessica being alive for centuries and being a vampire and that the Master is after her, and I am just wondering who are these people and where did they come from?! All of a sudden Jessica is the being she claimed not to believe in, she was the woman we read about in the beginning and had no idea it was her, her friends all know what she is and have known for years. And Maggie suggests Bryan is Ioin, the knight from the prologue who loved the king’s daughter, Igrainia, and Jessica is Igrainia.
I picked this book up for a dollar and I wish I wouldn’t have come across it at all, but there was no indication whatsoever that this was a series, and I hate it when authors can’t let readers know by the cover of a book that it’s a part of a series and not a stand-alone novel. I had no idea I was jumping into #7 in a series, and the author didn’t seem to think she needed to let people know that. Thanks for Goodreads numbering the books in the titles, I saw it was #7 and maybe that’s why I was so lost, but I’ve seen for myself what kind of writing is produced and I won’t waste time on any more books by this author, especially not this series.
I couldn’t wait for the moment where Bryan learned the truth, that Jessica was the woman he loved, but when Sean, Maggie’s cop husband, says her name in front of Bryan the following moments were so anticlimactic it was yet another letdown in this already disappointing waste of time. Nothing happened, they didn’t talk about anything and hanging over them was the threat that he would kill her, because Bryan had said he looked for her to kill her because he believes all vampires are evil. Very romantic.
It’s like not a whole lot of thought was put into it. It lacked substance in every department. I can’t believe someone didn’t catch all of the errors in this book. It was littered with run-on sentences, improper punctuation, no punctuation at all, words where there shouldn’t be words. It was like a kindergartener read this thing with no grammar teaching at all and sent it to publishing. I can’t believe no one noticed the dozens of mistakes all throughout this novel. It’s absolutely unacceptable to sell a book in this condition in which readers are stumbling over mistake after mistake. I don’t know who edited this thing and didn’t catch the million mistakes left, but they’re obviously not good at their job. There for a while it seemed like every page had some kind of error that would jolt me away from the reading as I tried to piece together what it was supposed to say.
The story was so monotonous. Literally the same thing would happen over and over and over. Jessica would see the students at the hospital, and then go back to her house. Bryan would see the students at the hospital, and then go back to her house. Finally they left the hospital, only to have Jessica send them to her office. She’d see them in her office, then leave. Bryan would go to her office, then leave. And you could bet that if she sent them to the office, she would go home and an attack would happen at her office. If she sent them to her house she would be somewhere else and the attack would happen at her house. Wherever they weren’t at, that was where the attack took place and you could literally bet that they would be in the wrong place at the wrong time. So infuriating having the characters be late for every attack.
She spent as much time with the side characters as she did with the main characters, which annoys the crap out of me. I was so fed up, sick and tired of the boring students, Mary the newly turned vampire, Jeremy and Nancy who I couldn’t care less about, the criminals in the police station, the boy from the morgue who was hurt by Mary, it was just all too much. The author kept switching back and forth to them and chopping off scenes. I just wanted a full conclusion with Jessica and Bryan before we whisked off to people I didn’t care about. The main characters are supposed to take center stage, not get bombarded by all the side crap. Jessica and Bryan barely had the spotlight, and their romance, and that is a major stretch of this word, was so underdeveloped it isn’t even funny. I kept waiting for them to have a moment alone and actually express some feelings, to think on the past, how far they’d come, how they missed each other, what they’d been doing, there was literally so much for them to say and they said nothing. Absolutely nothing. What a waste.
They didn’t even say they loved each other. They slept together two or three times, and it was the worst kind of romance scenes for me because it was brushed over with that truly awful flowery speech that gives no details or feelings, just the barest minimum, enough to give you the vaguest notion of what’s happening. I HATE romance novels where the authors can't handle writing the romance. It was lukewarm at best. This novel was one mechanism where the author played her card the entire time, just milked it for all it was worth. The Master was the villain and she teased readers with tiny skirmishes here and there where the characters would break apart, sleep, and then go out looking. It was all very passive. For someone with a task to kill the most evil being on the planet, they sure took a lot of breaks. So very boring. I have to say it again, it was such bad writing.