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The Present in Room Four
Dear Author,
My friends have organized a surprise birthday present for me, who happened to be a very lovely boy. He begged me to gag him and spank him, and took everything with ease. He was so adorable that I don't think one night would be enough for me. He has even refused the tips I gave him and wanted to see me again. What should I do?
Photo Description: A young man in a business suit, shirt and jacket open, is pushed back into a chair by the lunge of another nearly-naked guy against his knees. The businessman looks startled, arms akimbo, not touching. But he stares at the naked man's face with interest. The kneeling stripper stares back as he shoves his briefs down off his ass.
This story was written as a part of the M/M Romance Group's "Hot Summer Days" event. Group members were asked to write a story prompt inspired by a photo of their choice. Authors of the group selected a photo and prompt that spoke to them and wrote a short story.
Read the story here or find it in Don't Read in the Closet, Volume 2.
__________
Genre: contemporary
Tags: gay m/m, profession-rent-boys, profession-businessmen-lawyers, sex-content-bdsm, theme-reunited, theme-hurt-comfort
Word Count: 5,361
My friends have organized a surprise birthday present for me, who happened to be a very lovely boy. He begged me to gag him and spank him, and took everything with ease. He was so adorable that I don't think one night would be enough for me. He has even refused the tips I gave him and wanted to see me again. What should I do?
Photo Description: A young man in a business suit, shirt and jacket open, is pushed back into a chair by the lunge of another nearly-naked guy against his knees. The businessman looks startled, arms akimbo, not touching. But he stares at the naked man's face with interest. The kneeling stripper stares back as he shoves his briefs down off his ass.
This story was written as a part of the M/M Romance Group's "Hot Summer Days" event. Group members were asked to write a story prompt inspired by a photo of their choice. Authors of the group selected a photo and prompt that spoke to them and wrote a short story.
Read the story here or find it in Don't Read in the Closet, Volume 2.
__________
Genre: contemporary
Tags: gay m/m, profession-rent-boys, profession-businessmen-lawyers, sex-content-bdsm, theme-reunited, theme-hurt-comfort
Word Count: 5,361
14 pages, ebook
First published July 16, 2011
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May 15, 2015
This is practically a manual of What NOT to Do When Writing Erotic Romance.
Painful, embarrassing, trite.
Fuckery funtage:
1. Nicholas is a quiet, withdrawn, commanding boss and a LAWYER. So his team gets him a HOOKER for his birthday. Cause that's not unprofessional. Or illegal.
2. After spanking and fucking TJ, the prostitute, Nicholas suddenly discovers that he knows TJ, who used to be his 12-year-old neighbor. Go figure.
3. TJ, who is of legal age, is being pimped out by his stepfather, who was courteous enough to wait until TJ turned 18 to use his ass for pay.
PIMPS. They have standards, y'all.
4. After knowing TJ for a few hours, Nicholas decides he wants TJ FOREVER. That 12-year-old boy always called to him.
NOPE, not creepy. At. All.
5. A rescue follows. It takes the pimp exactly two minutes to back down. Just. What?
Painful, embarrassing, trite.
Fuckery funtage:
1. Nicholas is a quiet, withdrawn, commanding boss and a LAWYER. So his team gets him a HOOKER for his birthday. Cause that's not unprofessional. Or illegal.
2. After spanking and fucking TJ, the prostitute, Nicholas suddenly discovers that he knows TJ, who used to be his 12-year-old neighbor. Go figure.
3. TJ, who is of legal age, is being pimped out by his stepfather, who was courteous enough to wait until TJ turned 18 to use his ass for pay.
PIMPS. They have standards, y'all.
4. After knowing TJ for a few hours, Nicholas decides he wants TJ FOREVER. That 12-year-old boy always called to him.
NOPE, not creepy. At. All.
5. A rescue follows. It takes the pimp exactly two minutes to back down. Just. What?
February 8, 2015
* 1 bad bdsm star *
This story is a perfect example of everthing I hate about a badly written bdsm story.
Gah, terrible!
Skimmed.
Not recommended.
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A short story in the collection "Don't Read in the Closet, Volume Two" from the MM Romance Group Hot Summer Event 2011.
Click HERE for the story online or HERE to download the whole collection for your reading device.
Picture and prompt:
This story is a perfect example of everthing I hate about a badly written bdsm story.
Gah, terrible!
Skimmed.
Not recommended.
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A short story in the collection "Don't Read in the Closet, Volume Two" from the MM Romance Group Hot Summer Event 2011.
Click HERE for the story online or HERE to download the whole collection for your reading device.
Picture and prompt:
November 13, 2011
I don’t really like BDSM so don’t look for my review as a reliable since I only read this because I am reading all the free HSD stories. That said the writing was good and BDSM fans would probably like it.
I didn’t like
I didn’t like
January 6, 2016
***Read as part of the free Don't Read in the Closet: Volume Two anthology. Story #2***
I don't know...
It started out... OK. Not the best BDSM-PWP I've ever read but acceptable.
But then around the middle the author seemed to decide to add some depth. And it went downhill.
It all was too much a coincidence and the "plot" (though surprising) was solved too easy.
And on a side note: the prompt wasn't hit on the spot.
August 3, 2011
Who doesn't love a great hero rescue story (especially mixed with some BDSM)?! I didn't expect the plot twist - that was great. I really connected with both characters, and Greeves gave me the creeps. It was hot and sweet both, and I thoroughly enjoyed it! Excellent job, Mandy!!! Now, if I could only figure out how to get my employees to think up a birthday gift like this...;)
January 30, 2012
The backstory info dump seemed a bit contrived. Didn't feel it. Didn't finish.
November 22, 2012
It was good-ish, but then it got really cut-and-dry, really rote. Part of it, I think, was the brevity. It could have been expanded upon and explicated further. I think I'd like to know why exactly Greeves was such a bastard because he was painted into the really black-and-white role of the villain. I think I want more of the moral ambiguity that was sort of maybe hinted at towards the beginning-ish of the story.
ETA (originally posted as a comment)
A lot was heavily implied and skirted over. It was like the author wanted to only focus on the present interactions and nominally inserted a bunch of stuff. Personally, my impression of Nicholas was that he was a complete shut-in and incredibly socially awkward. The rest of it was all nominal stuff that ultimately didn't work with the impression the author had created. Actually, I think either the author was trying too hard to make it pseudo-mysterious by withholding information or the author took the "short" in short story to heart and cut out anything that would have been developmentally significant. Either way, it was so abbreviated in such an awkward fashion that, now that I think of it, nothing really came together. I mean, it was a sweet story if you just take it at the basest face value, but if you actually look at it, not many parts seem feasible and the individual elements didn't quite weave together well.
(Hence why I changed it to a 2)
January 11, 2012
Wow, hot quick read. This is more like 3.5 stars, but things wrapped up way too quickly and easily in too short a time for me. I would love to read a more detailed story about TJ and Nicholas, perhaps showing their lives after they get away from Greeves.
December 17, 2014
The story started as expected and was good. Even the BDSM part was well done. They spoke about safe words, boundaries and condoms. But then the story took a turn... The background story of TJ being forced to work as a prostitute was confusing and seriously not believable.
July 17, 2011
Short, hot, bdsm story. I like the setup of it being a birthday, and I thought that the photo went with the story very well.
July 20, 2011
Awesome story, a very surprising and heartwarming turn of events.
I would love to read more about the life Nicholas & TJ will share. :)
Thanks Mandy.
I would love to read more about the life Nicholas & TJ will share. :)
Thanks Mandy.
July 24, 2011
Really engaging short story about a Dom who needs a sub with a very surprising twist.
July 30, 2011
Thank you for writing this story Mandy! I adored how Nicholas's strength and protective instincts allowed to both rescue Tommy and demoralize Greaves.
November 8, 2017
Wish it was a little longer of a book. There could be so much more added to it but it was good
January 22, 2012
hmmm...OK, it was very sweet at the end. I'm not a big fan of BDSM so I can't comment on that piece of it. I thought it was a weird reveal about . I would have preferred a little more description of the .
May 30, 2012
I'm not that big on BDSM stories. I usually stay far, far away from them. Just not my thing. This one was pretty good though. I actually did like it though I wish there would have been more at the end. I would love to see where TJ and Nicholas go from here.
April 27, 2016
Don't Read in the Closet: Volume Two
My Rating System:
* couldn't finish, ** wouldn't recommend, *** would recommend, **** would read again, ***** have read again
My Rating System:
* couldn't finish, ** wouldn't recommend, *** would recommend, **** would read again, ***** have read again
September 10, 2016
2.75 to 3 stars
April 28, 2013
I'm not really into BDSM so I probably shouldn't reveiw this story but even thought I don't lite the sex I like a traumatized MC and therefore I found the story okey.
August 9, 2014
The twist was unexpected... and confusing. Sure, it's important to be aware of issues like that, but I don't think it fits into this story particularly well.
June 6, 2014
A really nice turn of events. A fresh approach to Bdsm.
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