I promise I tried but this was not very good.
OVERALL CRAFT (Characterization, Dialogue, Writing)
There’s a lot of voice behind this story, I can say that with certainty. Every description revealed something about our main character, Adina, which I really liked because it got me into her mind very fast. (Was Adina a character I particularly enjoyed reading through though? We’ll get into that later).
But that aside, I had an extremely hard time connecting with this story. The tone was all over the place, and I went into this heeding the author’s warning — that this is, supposedly, a satire — but that only made it worse. What part was exactly the satire? Was it meant to be the evil characters (all of whom are basically everyone but our MC), since their characterization resembled that of cartoonish villains? Was it meant to be the overall plot? Was it meant to be the absurd idea of The Finish?
The story comped Squid Games, which is an ambitious goal, because really, it should've comped Riverdale. I find that claiming this book to be a satire is an easy cop-out for not fixing how un-relatable and beyond disbelief it was. I also have to say that if an author has to clearly state their book is a satire, then it clearly did not accomplish its aims very well. Because I did not understand these characters, nor did I understand the concept of The Finish, nor did I understand the extreme ends of wealth power it was attempting to portray. The themes that this story attempt to explore are so surface-level that I can hardly call it a critique on class.
Esme had dialogue that reminded me of clap-backs from “the mean popular girl” archetype from Wattpad YA and the Remingtons did not even feel like people to me. If this was with the intention of making some commentary on wealthy people, it needed to be done with a lot more nuance because writing a one-sided rich character who only shows the worst behavior doesn’t do anything for me to reflect on their wealth or the power dynamics. It does not count as any commentary.
I also found it super challenging to keep up with what was going at times, because I was constantly swapping between: being bored by long info dumps by Adina and then utterly confused as they talk on the page about things we are supposed to already know about.
Moreover, it would be a disservice to myself if I did not point out the atrocity that was this line:
“I plug my phone in and scroll through my playlists until I land on “pov: you have the aux and you have something to prove.” When I press play, Toni crows loudly.”
There is no context in which I want to see pov mentioned outside of TikTok.
I also don't know how I feel about things like "finstas" and lines like "She looks powerful, like she's walked out of Blade (1998)" - trying to find a balance between YA, as well as something that should read as timeless is tough. Just my opinion, but I'm not a fan of references that feel like it can be extremely dated, or that pulls me out of the story (especially when for a reader who might not understand the references, it serves no purpose).
ADINA, AND HOW NOT TO WRITE UNLIKABLE CHARACTERS
I am definitely one for insufferable main characters (I loved reading through June in Yellowface) but Their Vicious Games made me realize exactly what it is that differentiates a flawed narrator from a narrator that makes you want to put down the book. Everything that Adina had to say about anyone was so deeply rooted in hate and bitterness, that it became almost exhausting after a while to be stuck in her head. She’s completely un-rootable and not in a I-love-womens-wrongs type of way, but in a way that I just could not bring myself to do the mental gymnastics for so I could excuse her actions and thoughts. I was already iffy about the way she got into The Finish and the way she spoke about Pen, but it just became so much worse when she encountered new characters in The Finish and immediately began negative judgement on them.
At times, I found myself wondering... did Adina fall into the whole "I'm not like other girls" trope? Because it felt a little like that, when she would mock the other girls in The Finish. I understand her character set-up, she's desperate and she hates the predicament she's in and she’s angry, but honestly, I didn't feel the empathy I needed to so that I could excuse her narration. Instead, I felt that her character arc only made her more bitter.
Side note: I just have to say that I love how Adina’s parents win the idgaf war, in my head they appear as two generic stock image parents who just exist to exist but play no role in actually parenting (they sent their daughter off?? With 0 qualms???)
Tldr: Premise - interesting; execution - no