Less Pride, Less Prejudice, More Verbosity
This is the second installment of this variation, a most wordy one.
The title seems to be contradictory to what the characters are intended to be…discerning. Both Elizabeth Bennet and Fitzwilliam Darcy are too lovestruck that their romantic exchanges get too sappy most of the time. Its Jane Bennet and the other Bennet family relations who prove to be more discerning. Furthermore, this reader cannot stomach a Mr. Darcy having past affairs with a grasping widow and prostitutes despite him being wordly. This goes against one of the most established truths in P&P Canon: the matter of Fitzwilliam Darcy’s honor and righteousness.
As much as there is enough angst in this story, there are also many loose ends which disappoint. The Collinses, Lucases, de Bourghs, even Caroline Bingley, all loose ends. Although, the story revolves around our beloved couple’s love affair, it is still turnoffish the way the author painstakingly details every small incident or matter, regardless of their insignificance. What could have been a shorter variation stretched out too far, too long; not to mention numerous typographical error, mostly the lack or incorrect use of prepositions. Furthermore, breaking the 4th wall is surprisingly unnerving to read in some parts.
As mentioned in this reader’s review of the first Volume, regardless of the misgivings stated herein, the author ought to be commended for her efforts. As much as she may have to wanted to sound like Edith Wharton with such intricate and thorough decriptions of things mundane, this author seems to just aimed for verbosity more than anything else.