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Tampa Thunder #1
Need Your Number
Fiona Campbell, a recent college graduate, who is starting a social media intern position with her brother’s college hockey team. Fresh from a toxic relationship, will she ditch her anti-athlete dating plan in favor of the hot, grumpy player who seems to only be nice to her?
Zane Miller, college hockey player, working towards his dream of playing pro hockey in Tampa. He falls for his best friend's sister, but will she ditch her anti-athlete dating plan for him? Can he break through her walls and win her heart?
After a road trip and being stuck in the same hotel room with one bed, sparks are flying between them. But after her ex, she has a no-athlete dating policy. Soon Fiona’s ex is playing Zane’s team. The ex comments about her not even wearing her own brother's jersey cause she knows his number is all she should wear. Zane bangs on the boards and asks her to put on his jersey. As he slams the ex against the boards, he nods up to her and says “I gotta say my number looks real good on her don’t you think? Will this be enough to set their sparks aflame?
Read Need Your Number to find out.
Zane Miller, college hockey player, working towards his dream of playing pro hockey in Tampa. He falls for his best friend's sister, but will she ditch her anti-athlete dating plan for him? Can he break through her walls and win her heart?
After a road trip and being stuck in the same hotel room with one bed, sparks are flying between them. But after her ex, she has a no-athlete dating policy. Soon Fiona’s ex is playing Zane’s team. The ex comments about her not even wearing her own brother's jersey cause she knows his number is all she should wear. Zane bangs on the boards and asks her to put on his jersey. As he slams the ex against the boards, he nods up to her and says “I gotta say my number looks real good on her don’t you think? Will this be enough to set their sparks aflame?
Read Need Your Number to find out.
236 pages, Paperback
Published May 5, 2023
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May 18, 2023
Lol my thoughts:
• this author wrote this book from beginning to end without once going back to review
• then never hired an editor
• the character interactions and dialogues were the most awkward and cringiest scenes I’ve ever read. Really hard to picture this author has ever had any sort of romantic interaction lol
• towards the end of the book the author used the brothers name as the boyfriends name FOR AN ENTIRE CHAPTER
• was almost my very first DNF but my brain just can’t handle that
This book could’ve been so cute if it was written and edited by different people :/
Oops I’m sorry
• this author wrote this book from beginning to end without once going back to review
• then never hired an editor
• the character interactions and dialogues were the most awkward and cringiest scenes I’ve ever read. Really hard to picture this author has ever had any sort of romantic interaction lol
• towards the end of the book the author used the brothers name as the boyfriends name FOR AN ENTIRE CHAPTER
• was almost my very first DNF but my brain just can’t handle that
This book could’ve been so cute if it was written and edited by different people :/
Oops I’m sorry
May 5, 2023
I really wanted to like this book, the cover was so cute, but the editing was terrible. I couldn’t make it past the first chapter because I had to keep rereading paragraphs to make sense of it. In one scene she was spinning in her office chair, the MMC walks in and the two of them have a short conversation, and then after he leaves she heads back to her office? Thought she was already in her office?
July 18, 2023
DNF at 25% 😭
this is the first book i could not finish tbh. so many grammar/punctuation errors throughout the book so far. usually i wouldn't mind as i can overlook it but there was just too many that it really bothered me. writing also was just too cringey for me, felt like i was reading a fanfic on tumblr from back in 2012. this type of dialogue just isn't something i want to read in a book imo. also Zane and Fiona got together really fast?? i barley got to page 59 and they had sex 3 times already and we're basically together i guess? what is supposed to happen for the rest of the book since they're together? 😅 i think the plot was nice but fell short due to the writing and lack of editing sadly. i really wanted to push through to finish this book but i just couldn't anymore. also one more thing . . SO MANY EXCLAMATION POINTS !
two stars for this book bc like i said i liked the plot and didn't completely hate it.
this is the first book i could not finish tbh. so many grammar/punctuation errors throughout the book so far. usually i wouldn't mind as i can overlook it but there was just too many that it really bothered me. writing also was just too cringey for me, felt like i was reading a fanfic on tumblr from back in 2012. this type of dialogue just isn't something i want to read in a book imo. also Zane and Fiona got together really fast?? i barley got to page 59 and they had sex 3 times already and we're basically together i guess? what is supposed to happen for the rest of the book since they're together? 😅 i think the plot was nice but fell short due to the writing and lack of editing sadly. i really wanted to push through to finish this book but i just couldn't anymore. also one more thing . . SO MANY EXCLAMATION POINTS !
two stars for this book bc like i said i liked the plot and didn't completely hate it.
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May 27, 2023Dnf first chapter. Don't judge look at this:
This is going to be the best internship ever! My favorite sport, time with my brother, and a chance at my dream job. Nothing will ruin this for me!
Wattpad
Fiona Campbell, Press Intern, is what my door says. My own office! I can’t help but giggle as I sit down and boot up my laptop and iPad sitting on my desk.
Strike two
Luke told me about his best friend’s issues with his ex during one of our sibling dinners recently. Focus, Fiona! Stop thinking of some random hockey player.
Strike three
Do men know what rolled sleeves do to a girl? FOCUS!
Tried to read a little more and...(still chapter one)
I've read better Ao3 fanfics than this. It's 2023. I'm not putting up with shit or shitty books. Tiktok algorithm be damned
This is going to be the best internship ever! My favorite sport, time with my brother, and a chance at my dream job. Nothing will ruin this for me!
Wattpad
Fiona Campbell, Press Intern, is what my door says. My own office! I can’t help but giggle as I sit down and boot up my laptop and iPad sitting on my desk.
Strike two
Luke told me about his best friend’s issues with his ex during one of our sibling dinners recently. Focus, Fiona! Stop thinking of some random hockey player.
Strike three
Do men know what rolled sleeves do to a girl? FOCUS!
Tried to read a little more and...(still chapter one)
I've read better Ao3 fanfics than this. It's 2023. I'm not putting up with shit or shitty books. Tiktok algorithm be damned
May 9, 2023
Low drama, high spice, cute story. I am probably broken because I actually found myself bored at times. However, I did enjoy the story and the team rallying behind Fiona regarding Justin.
May 7, 2023
Normally, I would probably give a book like this 2 stars but not because of the story. The story itself is why I'm giving this 3 stars. If you are looking for a mostly low drama, wholesome book to read for a little awhile with spice thrown in (like literally every chapter after they get together) then this is the book for you. The story itself was good to give that sort of story and the stakes aren't ever too high (i.e. fatal injuries, accidents, deaths and the such).
I picked this up after finding it on TikTok and if I am being fully honest, if it wasn't the author's debut, I might've DNF the book, and you might wonder why? Well, there were serious issues with formatting in the writing that (as a designer and writer myself) was giving me a colossal headache while reading the entire time. No one wants to keep a reading a book that's going to give them a headache because it was poorly formatted. There are entire blocks of dialogue between charters bleeding into each other. Which I was surprised by when I saw there was an editor credited. Like how would that pass the editor? I don't know if the author nor the editor even knew that dialogue is supposed to break every paragraph because it provides that mental break that tells the reader that the person talking has changed.
Besides that note, I would also say the story is insanely dense with 'telling' of stuff that just wasn't needed. It just padded the book to be longer than it really should have been. Readers really don't need a play-by-play of every single day of the week to know the characters' relationship is good or not good. That can be done in a one paragraph recap of sorts when we get back to the character a few days later when something actually important comes up. The only reason I can think the author left so much of the dense 'telling over showing' passages is because they had tiny little interacts between characters that showed they cared for one another. Like he dropped off a McDonald's coke in her office or brought food by even though she was busy working. But I really think that is just as successful if it was rewritten like "Over the past few days, I fell into a rhythm of dropping off her McDonald's coke to her office before heading down to practice." Suddenly, we skipped the unnecessary blocks of every day random stuff and cut straight to the part that was important about those paragraphs.
Ultimately, I ground my teeth out to finish the cozy little book. It was a debut book by an indie author and sometimes these issues happen either because the book was rushed to the platform or because the author simply didn't know better about these issues. That happens when you're basically a one person team to get your book out there. I get it happens and I don't want to discourage the author from continuing the series, but I hope they can also take some insight and make changes to the next one to make it better.
I found it odd that the couple seemed to end up together so quickly at the beginning, but after the book, I realized why. The book was less about the typical, 'how we met and fell in love against our better judgements' story line to a 'how we fell in love by being together and became better people for it' story instead and that kinda made me forgive how quickly both characters ended up letting go of their reasons to not be together over being together. Because I don't think enough romances give into that second story line as often because usually there is more tension with the first. But it made this one stand out for it.
To the author specifically: You made delightful characters. They had voices and feelings. But don't be quick to also pull the trigger for all of it to come out at once. Listen to some dialogue when in a coffee shop or in public spaces. (Trust, I know it feels awkward as hell.) But there's a reason an exercise like this helps writers, though. People naturally speak more close to cuff. They don't realize they are doing. But people just don't want to dive into a monologue when they speak. Its exhausting and it's tedious. People are quick minded and always going to be rushing to the next thing. (Literally, I've seen research studies that show that the average attention span has deceased to less than that of a goldfish, and you don't want to lose a reader because they lost interest with your book.) There were multiple times where it felt the characters were word vomiting on the page. It left nothing to be desired from the interaction and left the interaction stiff.
Also get some alpha readers for the next one, I think that can help you avoid the unnecessary long blocks that I can see most people jumping over and not bothering to read just to skip to the important stuff. They can also help you catch the errors in formatting like the dialogue situation that happens in this one.
You did a great job of putting yourself out there, and I hope you keep this momentum to keep going. And if you ever need a writer friend - well, I'd be happy to help and put my creative writing minor and nine years of creative writing clubs support to use to bounce ideas off of :) (I could use it since I've been out of school and don't have my clubs anymore xP )
Keep going!
I picked this up after finding it on TikTok and if I am being fully honest, if it wasn't the author's debut, I might've DNF the book, and you might wonder why? Well, there were serious issues with formatting in the writing that (as a designer and writer myself) was giving me a colossal headache while reading the entire time. No one wants to keep a reading a book that's going to give them a headache because it was poorly formatted. There are entire blocks of dialogue between charters bleeding into each other. Which I was surprised by when I saw there was an editor credited. Like how would that pass the editor? I don't know if the author nor the editor even knew that dialogue is supposed to break every paragraph because it provides that mental break that tells the reader that the person talking has changed.
Besides that note, I would also say the story is insanely dense with 'telling' of stuff that just wasn't needed. It just padded the book to be longer than it really should have been. Readers really don't need a play-by-play of every single day of the week to know the characters' relationship is good or not good. That can be done in a one paragraph recap of sorts when we get back to the character a few days later when something actually important comes up. The only reason I can think the author left so much of the dense 'telling over showing' passages is because they had tiny little interacts between characters that showed they cared for one another. Like he dropped off a McDonald's coke in her office or brought food by even though she was busy working. But I really think that is just as successful if it was rewritten like "Over the past few days, I fell into a rhythm of dropping off her McDonald's coke to her office before heading down to practice." Suddenly, we skipped the unnecessary blocks of every day random stuff and cut straight to the part that was important about those paragraphs.
Ultimately, I ground my teeth out to finish the cozy little book. It was a debut book by an indie author and sometimes these issues happen either because the book was rushed to the platform or because the author simply didn't know better about these issues. That happens when you're basically a one person team to get your book out there. I get it happens and I don't want to discourage the author from continuing the series, but I hope they can also take some insight and make changes to the next one to make it better.
I found it odd that the couple seemed to end up together so quickly at the beginning, but after the book, I realized why. The book was less about the typical, 'how we met and fell in love against our better judgements' story line to a 'how we fell in love by being together and became better people for it' story instead and that kinda made me forgive how quickly both characters ended up letting go of their reasons to not be together over being together. Because I don't think enough romances give into that second story line as often because usually there is more tension with the first. But it made this one stand out for it.
To the author specifically: You made delightful characters. They had voices and feelings. But don't be quick to also pull the trigger for all of it to come out at once. Listen to some dialogue when in a coffee shop or in public spaces. (Trust, I know it feels awkward as hell.) But there's a reason an exercise like this helps writers, though. People naturally speak more close to cuff. They don't realize they are doing. But people just don't want to dive into a monologue when they speak. Its exhausting and it's tedious. People are quick minded and always going to be rushing to the next thing. (Literally, I've seen research studies that show that the average attention span has deceased to less than that of a goldfish, and you don't want to lose a reader because they lost interest with your book.) There were multiple times where it felt the characters were word vomiting on the page. It left nothing to be desired from the interaction and left the interaction stiff.
Also get some alpha readers for the next one, I think that can help you avoid the unnecessary long blocks that I can see most people jumping over and not bothering to read just to skip to the important stuff. They can also help you catch the errors in formatting like the dialogue situation that happens in this one.
You did a great job of putting yourself out there, and I hope you keep this momentum to keep going. And if you ever need a writer friend - well, I'd be happy to help and put my creative writing minor and nine years of creative writing clubs support to use to bounce ideas off of :) (I could use it since I've been out of school and don't have my clubs anymore xP )
Keep going!
August 29, 2023
I normally do not rate or write reviews of books, but I had to write one for this book. I never read reviews of books before I read them and I definitely should have with this book. The fact that it is so badly edited (if it was edited at all) is glaringly obvious. I hardly, if ever, DNF books, but I just could not get past the first chapter of this book. The sentences were choppy and the punctuation was, at times, nonexistent. There were glaring capitalization errors (for example the pronoun I) and it read like something one of my middle school students would have submitted for a story draft.
I love a good hockey romance but this was not it. The premise was great but the execution was not what I expected. If the author were to edit this book and republish it I would give it another go, but as it stands I just cannot handle all of the glaring errors.
I love a good hockey romance but this was not it. The premise was great but the execution was not what I expected. If the author were to edit this book and republish it I would give it another go, but as it stands I just cannot handle all of the glaring errors.
July 11, 2023
Need Your Number is Mariah's debut novel and it 👏🏻 delivered 👏🏻
😏 tropes 😏
-Grumpy sunshine
-He falls first
-Brother's best friend
-One bed
⚠️ potential sensitive content ⚠️
-Talk of past verbal abuse
Swipe for my reveiw! ➡️
Review: I devoured this book. Between Fiona's bubbly personality and Zane's occasional stick-in-the-mud attitude, there's great balance between the two MCs.
I enjoyed the setting being in Florida. For a hockey read I feel like we don't see that much. Gotta rep all the great places where my favorite sport is played!
Fi's ex is as big a douchebag as suspected. I enjoy the @$$ kicking he so deserved.
😏 tropes 😏
-Grumpy sunshine
-He falls first
-Brother's best friend
-One bed
⚠️ potential sensitive content ⚠️
-Talk of past verbal abuse
Swipe for my reveiw! ➡️
Review: I devoured this book. Between Fiona's bubbly personality and Zane's occasional stick-in-the-mud attitude, there's great balance between the two MCs.
I enjoyed the setting being in Florida. For a hockey read I feel like we don't see that much. Gotta rep all the great places where my favorite sport is played!
Fi's ex is as big a douchebag as suspected. I enjoy the @$$ kicking he so deserved.
June 8, 2024
I enjoyed this book! It flowed good and I truly enjoyed the characters!
January 6, 2024
dnf around 20%
i tried reading the newly edited version of this book that just released but i couldn’t do it 😭
i tried reading the newly edited version of this book that just released but i couldn’t do it 😭
October 27, 2023
This is a high spice, low drama, brothers best friend/teammate, hockey romance.
Fiona just got out of a verbally abusive relationship and has sworn off athletes for the rest of her life. Here comes Zane, who takes one look at Fiona and realize she is worth the work he has to put in to break down her mile high walls around her heart and show her he’s different.
Fiona just got out of a verbally abusive relationship and has sworn off athletes for the rest of her life. Here comes Zane, who takes one look at Fiona and realize she is worth the work he has to put in to break down her mile high walls around her heart and show her he’s different.
May 8, 2023
DNF. Weird writing/editing. It's like a scatterbrained monologue with too many exclamation marks.
August 20, 2023
There is no way this book had an editor
December 17, 2023
ice hockey romance
Okay, so it is three stars currently because I think this has potential and I'm hoping with the updated version will help bring this story, so it's full potential, Mariah has posted on her socials saying that this book is going to get a makeover so it's gonna be edited and slightly rewritten by the sounds of it and I would recommend reading the updated version when it is released because I think this could've been better than what it was.
There's a lot of smut, so for those looking after spicy scenes, there are plenty in here for you, a bit too much for my liking, because once they got together, it was literally every chapter and sometimes it was a few times.
They were very self-aware, so there wasn't miscommunication which is a plus for some readers. Chapters were rushed. In my opinion. There wasn't a lot of detail during the situations they were in like for example if they were out with friends, what they were doing on their own, when he was playing hockey, there was lack of detail and a lot of the situations and circumstances got skimmed over. There was hardly any hockey play. It was very minimal.
There were good parts in it, don't get me wrong. I did enjoy some moments between the two and the friendship groups that they had. I just feel this could've been better and hopefully with the new updated edited version it all flow more and hopefully it's structured better.
I did skim over it, the last 40% give or take 😬
Okay, so it is three stars currently because I think this has potential and I'm hoping with the updated version will help bring this story, so it's full potential, Mariah has posted on her socials saying that this book is going to get a makeover so it's gonna be edited and slightly rewritten by the sounds of it and I would recommend reading the updated version when it is released because I think this could've been better than what it was.
There's a lot of smut, so for those looking after spicy scenes, there are plenty in here for you, a bit too much for my liking, because once they got together, it was literally every chapter and sometimes it was a few times.
They were very self-aware, so there wasn't miscommunication which is a plus for some readers. Chapters were rushed. In my opinion. There wasn't a lot of detail during the situations they were in like for example if they were out with friends, what they were doing on their own, when he was playing hockey, there was lack of detail and a lot of the situations and circumstances got skimmed over. There was hardly any hockey play. It was very minimal.
There were good parts in it, don't get me wrong. I did enjoy some moments between the two and the friendship groups that they had. I just feel this could've been better and hopefully with the new updated edited version it all flow more and hopefully it's structured better.
I did skim over it, the last 40% give or take 😬
April 6, 2023
Zane is such a lovable character. The way we treats Fiona and is patient with her made me swoon. I enjoyed how Zane was able to read Fiona and know that as much as he wants to move forward more quickly that he needs to take his time.
The family dynamic also pulled me in. They way the book incorporates the siblings and parents was great. Love hat family dinners are important.
The family dynamic also pulled me in. They way the book incorporates the siblings and parents was great. Love hat family dinners are important.
This entire review has been hidden because of spoilers.
February 15, 2024
Giiiiiirl! You just haaaad to make Zane the hot one didntcha😂😂
I seriously love Fi. Has to be my favorite out of all the girls so far. Super relatable and easy to connect with.
And did I mention Zane was hot? Because maaaan 🥵😍
I seriously love Fi. Has to be my favorite out of all the girls so far. Super relatable and easy to connect with.
And did I mention Zane was hot? Because maaaan 🥵😍
July 12, 2023
dnf at 35% ☹️☹️
January 20, 2024
1.5 stars
December 4, 2023
There’s no way there was an editor…
So many spelling mistakes it actually hurt my soul, couldn’t even finish the book.😭
So many spelling mistakes it actually hurt my soul, couldn’t even finish the book.😭
July 13, 2023
DNF
So disappointing because the cover was so cute and my hopes were high 😭 Worse than any wattpad book I’ve read, so so cheesy , poorly written/edited and nobody talks like how the MCs do ( at least in my opinion)
These are all quotes from chapter 1 that made me not want to finish 🙃
“This is going to be the best internship ever!” Was the first sentence , should’ve been the first red flag
“Nothing will ruin this for me!” Is the next sentence
“Fiona Campbell, Press Intern, is what my door says. My own office! I can’t help but giggle as I sit down and boot up my laptop and iPad sitting on my desk. “
“Fiona, please come and have a seat. How's your first day going?” Marissa asks as I take a seat. “I’m so excited to be here; this is a dream come true!” I exclaim. “Good, we are glad to have you.”
““Yeah... um, yeah, sorry. I am fine, just lost in my thoughts. Thanks for...um, uh checking on me,” I stammer. Get it together, I tell myself.”
In conclusion, it is regrettable to say that this book falls short of its potential. While every book has its strengths and weaknesses, this one unfortunately leans heavily towards the latter. Overall, it is a disappointing read that fails to deliver the expected impact.
So disappointing because the cover was so cute and my hopes were high 😭 Worse than any wattpad book I’ve read, so so cheesy , poorly written/edited and nobody talks like how the MCs do ( at least in my opinion)
These are all quotes from chapter 1 that made me not want to finish 🙃
“This is going to be the best internship ever!” Was the first sentence , should’ve been the first red flag
“Nothing will ruin this for me!” Is the next sentence
“Fiona Campbell, Press Intern, is what my door says. My own office! I can’t help but giggle as I sit down and boot up my laptop and iPad sitting on my desk. “
“Fiona, please come and have a seat. How's your first day going?” Marissa asks as I take a seat. “I’m so excited to be here; this is a dream come true!” I exclaim. “Good, we are glad to have you.”
““Yeah... um, yeah, sorry. I am fine, just lost in my thoughts. Thanks for...um, uh checking on me,” I stammer. Get it together, I tell myself.”
In conclusion, it is regrettable to say that this book falls short of its potential. While every book has its strengths and weaknesses, this one unfortunately leans heavily towards the latter. Overall, it is a disappointing read that fails to deliver the expected impact.
January 2, 2025
it had a one bed trope so it was okay
The idea was so good but the execution was ugh!!!
I just wanted to throw my phone across the room every time I saw an exclamation point in the middle of the paragraph. everything was too perfect to be real/relatable and even if it was a low drama/stakes romance, I’d did not click with me. I was more into the supporting characters than the main ones, so probably I’ll be back to read the rest of the series.
Best friend’s/teammate’s sister, kinda workplace romance, only one bed, hockey player and social media rep dealing with a verbally abusing ex and a player’s reputation that ends up in a happily ever after.
The idea was so good but the execution was ugh!!!
I just wanted to throw my phone across the room every time I saw an exclamation point in the middle of the paragraph. everything was too perfect to be real/relatable and even if it was a low drama/stakes romance, I’d did not click with me. I was more into the supporting characters than the main ones, so probably I’ll be back to read the rest of the series.
Best friend’s/teammate’s sister, kinda workplace romance, only one bed, hockey player and social media rep dealing with a verbally abusing ex and a player’s reputation that ends up in a happily ever after.
January 11, 2024
I think this book had a lot of potential but overall fell short. My biggest issue with it was that it just felt like every chapter was a description of the characters just doing everyday mundane thing. I found that quite boring. The couple ended up together really quick and there was very little conflict throughout which also made it feel boring to me.
What I did like was Fiona’s relationships with her sister and friends. It was good because it felt realistic and gossipy. Fiona was falling in love and just wanted to share it with her friends.
What I did like was Fiona’s relationships with her sister and friends. It was good because it felt realistic and gossipy. Fiona was falling in love and just wanted to share it with her friends.
June 5, 2023
My biggest issue with this book was the writing and the lack of editing especially in the first half of the book. I don't mind an insta-love romance but when it's page 50 of a 230 page book and they've already hooked up and both had thoughts of this being it for them, where does the plot really go from there? Also didn't need so many chapters about them planning their wedding. Wish it had ended at the draft and had an epilogue of the honeymoon.
May 6, 2023
it's like when a teen writer tries to write smut. the build up doesnt make sense...the way they're attracted to each other felt force instead of "she caught my eye"
January 17, 2024
***May contain spoilers***
***Scroll to the bottom for my rating***
I want to begin this review by saying that I am sorry if my comments and opinions come across as harsh; that is not my intent. I am writing this way to give the author constructive feedback and inform future readers what you can expect if this seems like a story for you. Everyone is entitled to their likes and dislikes and what irks them versus what they can and can’t get past when reading.
Need Your Number by Mariah Goodwin is a fast-paced, spicy hockey romance. This is Mariah’s debut novel, featuring some of my favorite romance tropes like brother’s best friend, grumpy & sunshine, he falls first, and most obviously sports romance.
Follow the relationship of Fiona Campbell and Zane Miller as they fall hard and fall fast while attaching their career goals and journeys into professional sports, and you’ve got yourself a story. The concept was there, shining even, but the execution was unfortunately faulty.
I wanted to like this book so badly, I really did, but I couldn’t get rid of my frustration (and not the good kind with a spicy read like this). I read this on my Kindle, utilizing one of my Kindle Unlimited titles, and expected a clean, polished story. The attached picture explains why. For those who may not be able to see the picture, it says:
Note to Readers
Hi friends!
This is the rereleased version of Need Your Number, and I hope you love it.
There are a few changes from the original version, but mainly, I worked with a new editor to do a complete overhaul of the story, grammar, and formatting.
I hope you enjoy it!
Love,
Mariah
Due to this note from the author, I believed she received feedback from her initial release and decided to tweak the book to enhance it as her series continues to grow. I was seriously disappointed.
For the beginning of the read, I gave the benefit of the doubt, “Maybe the revised edition didn’t upload correctly,” “Maybe Amazon messed something up with her edits,” or “Maybe there’s a glitch.” As I progressed through the story, those thoughts slowly disappeared and turned to annoyance.
When a reader is told to expect an “overhaul,” it is painful to see significant grammatical and formatting errors. It is hard to read paragraphs that jump from one place to the next or put characters in opposing places/positions from where they were two pages before. It’s like in a film or TV show with a continuity error in the wardrobe or props; it’s hard to miss.
That, paired with the overwhelming amount of sex and too fast a pace (for me), turned me off from the story. Because of the pacing, there was little to no tension in key moments, and it seemed like there may have been more sex in the book than actual plot, and even those scenes were too fast. Considering how many there were throughout the story, you would expect more variety. Still, a lot of them started and ended the same exact way. It got boring.
This story did, however, have some redeeming qualities in other elements that Mariah explored. There was a strong presence and importance placed on family, which I enjoyed. The sibling dinners, parent meetings, and revisiting of childhood traditions were endearing. Additionally, Mariah addressed important topics such as consent, roofying, and verbal, emotional, and physical abuse. The way the characters dealt with these concepts was empowering and honestly heartwarming. Mariah deserves praise for the way she handled these serious topics so well. But that is where my praise for this story ends.
Realistically, I should have DNF’d this book due to my intense dislike for it, but I gave it a shot because of how much I hoped for a change in the issues I found early on. Because of these faults and the few redeeming qualities, I am rating Need Your Number 2.5 out of 5 stars, with a 4 for spice due to the sheer amount of it.
If the things I mentioned in my review would not bother you while reading, I suggest you try this title, but I will not be reading the rest of this series.
Stars: ⭐️⭐️.5
Spice: 🌶️🌶️🌶️🌶️
***Scroll to the bottom for my rating***
I want to begin this review by saying that I am sorry if my comments and opinions come across as harsh; that is not my intent. I am writing this way to give the author constructive feedback and inform future readers what you can expect if this seems like a story for you. Everyone is entitled to their likes and dislikes and what irks them versus what they can and can’t get past when reading.
Need Your Number by Mariah Goodwin is a fast-paced, spicy hockey romance. This is Mariah’s debut novel, featuring some of my favorite romance tropes like brother’s best friend, grumpy & sunshine, he falls first, and most obviously sports romance.
Follow the relationship of Fiona Campbell and Zane Miller as they fall hard and fall fast while attaching their career goals and journeys into professional sports, and you’ve got yourself a story. The concept was there, shining even, but the execution was unfortunately faulty.
I wanted to like this book so badly, I really did, but I couldn’t get rid of my frustration (and not the good kind with a spicy read like this). I read this on my Kindle, utilizing one of my Kindle Unlimited titles, and expected a clean, polished story. The attached picture explains why. For those who may not be able to see the picture, it says:
Note to Readers
Hi friends!
This is the rereleased version of Need Your Number, and I hope you love it.
There are a few changes from the original version, but mainly, I worked with a new editor to do a complete overhaul of the story, grammar, and formatting.
I hope you enjoy it!
Love,
Mariah
Due to this note from the author, I believed she received feedback from her initial release and decided to tweak the book to enhance it as her series continues to grow. I was seriously disappointed.
For the beginning of the read, I gave the benefit of the doubt, “Maybe the revised edition didn’t upload correctly,” “Maybe Amazon messed something up with her edits,” or “Maybe there’s a glitch.” As I progressed through the story, those thoughts slowly disappeared and turned to annoyance.
When a reader is told to expect an “overhaul,” it is painful to see significant grammatical and formatting errors. It is hard to read paragraphs that jump from one place to the next or put characters in opposing places/positions from where they were two pages before. It’s like in a film or TV show with a continuity error in the wardrobe or props; it’s hard to miss.
That, paired with the overwhelming amount of sex and too fast a pace (for me), turned me off from the story. Because of the pacing, there was little to no tension in key moments, and it seemed like there may have been more sex in the book than actual plot, and even those scenes were too fast. Considering how many there were throughout the story, you would expect more variety. Still, a lot of them started and ended the same exact way. It got boring.
This story did, however, have some redeeming qualities in other elements that Mariah explored. There was a strong presence and importance placed on family, which I enjoyed. The sibling dinners, parent meetings, and revisiting of childhood traditions were endearing. Additionally, Mariah addressed important topics such as consent, roofying, and verbal, emotional, and physical abuse. The way the characters dealt with these concepts was empowering and honestly heartwarming. Mariah deserves praise for the way she handled these serious topics so well. But that is where my praise for this story ends.
Realistically, I should have DNF’d this book due to my intense dislike for it, but I gave it a shot because of how much I hoped for a change in the issues I found early on. Because of these faults and the few redeeming qualities, I am rating Need Your Number 2.5 out of 5 stars, with a 4 for spice due to the sheer amount of it.
If the things I mentioned in my review would not bother you while reading, I suggest you try this title, but I will not be reading the rest of this series.
Stars: ⭐️⭐️.5
Spice: 🌶️🌶️🌶️🌶️
June 28, 2023
📚📚 Review 📚📚
Book: Need Your Number
Genre: Romance, Rom-Com
Author: @mariahgwrites
Cover Artist: @madicantstopreading
Tour Organized by: @plungeintobookstours
Tropes: brothers best
Fiona Campbell was in a relationship with a guy who used to abuse her emotionally and verbally. After suffering from abuse, she finally took the stand for herself and broke that relationship, but she was left broken at the same time she got her dream job as social media manager at the Tampa Thunder Hockey Team, where her brother was one of the players.
Zane Miller was one of the star players of the Tampa Thunder Hockey team and also the best friend of Fiona's brother Luke, with the image of a playboy.
Sparks flew between Zane and Fiona, but she refused to accept it at first, and Zane was ready to give her time. He made sure to make her believe in herself and trust people. With the help of Zane, she started believing in herself and fell for him.
Justin, the ex-boyfriend of Fiona was also one of the players of the opposite team, again tried to make her life hell, but this time Zane was by her side, protecting her and giving her the freedom to make her own decisions.
Justin was in his own world of arrogance and was waiting to see her in the jersey of his number, but would she go against her heart, which yearns for Zane? Would Zane and Fiona get their happily ever after?
The heated argument between Justin and Zane was full of tension during the games. Sibling bonds and family relationships were explained beautifully by the author, and the crackling chemistry between Zane and Fiona was hot.
I felt the story was moving at a very fast pace initially, then it was very slow, and a few parts were unnecessarily exaggerated, but it was a cute and entertaining read.
Book: Need Your Number
Genre: Romance, Rom-Com
Author: @mariahgwrites
Cover Artist: @madicantstopreading
Tour Organized by: @plungeintobookstours
Tropes: brothers best
Fiona Campbell was in a relationship with a guy who used to abuse her emotionally and verbally. After suffering from abuse, she finally took the stand for herself and broke that relationship, but she was left broken at the same time she got her dream job as social media manager at the Tampa Thunder Hockey Team, where her brother was one of the players.
Zane Miller was one of the star players of the Tampa Thunder Hockey team and also the best friend of Fiona's brother Luke, with the image of a playboy.
Sparks flew between Zane and Fiona, but she refused to accept it at first, and Zane was ready to give her time. He made sure to make her believe in herself and trust people. With the help of Zane, she started believing in herself and fell for him.
Justin, the ex-boyfriend of Fiona was also one of the players of the opposite team, again tried to make her life hell, but this time Zane was by her side, protecting her and giving her the freedom to make her own decisions.
Justin was in his own world of arrogance and was waiting to see her in the jersey of his number, but would she go against her heart, which yearns for Zane? Would Zane and Fiona get their happily ever after?
The heated argument between Justin and Zane was full of tension during the games. Sibling bonds and family relationships were explained beautifully by the author, and the crackling chemistry between Zane and Fiona was hot.
I felt the story was moving at a very fast pace initially, then it was very slow, and a few parts were unnecessarily exaggerated, but it was a cute and entertaining read.
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July 2, 2023 Disclaimer: I received a review copy for free and am leaving this review voluntarily.
General Thoughts: The premise of this one was good, and the characters themselves were cute. I also really liked the relationship-building between Zane and Fiona, and I thought the characters were interesting, too. There are cute themes and scenes, and I liked several things about it.
While I think Mariah has a lot of potential and others may have really loved this, the book had a very distinctive, unique writing style that didn’t quite work for me. Not every book is for everyone. While there were definitely things I liked, and the overall story arc itself was good, the actual writing style wasn’t my favorite and detracted from the story for me.
I wish the author the best of luck with her journey. It’s available on KU, and you could test a sample. If the writing style is your type, the story is cute. However, I think the author could benefit from a bit more editing and beta reading. She has great ideas; I just wanted more polish in the writing itself.
Steam Meter: ❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥 Steamy and for over 18. Kinky.
Romantic Tropes
-best friend/teammate’s sister
-dual pov
-realistic contemporary romance
-steamy
-hockey romance
-sports romance
-one bed trope
-college romance
You can read more of my reviews at mylastromance.com. You can also find me on Insta @mylastromancenovel.
General Thoughts: The premise of this one was good, and the characters themselves were cute. I also really liked the relationship-building between Zane and Fiona, and I thought the characters were interesting, too. There are cute themes and scenes, and I liked several things about it.
While I think Mariah has a lot of potential and others may have really loved this, the book had a very distinctive, unique writing style that didn’t quite work for me. Not every book is for everyone. While there were definitely things I liked, and the overall story arc itself was good, the actual writing style wasn’t my favorite and detracted from the story for me.
I wish the author the best of luck with her journey. It’s available on KU, and you could test a sample. If the writing style is your type, the story is cute. However, I think the author could benefit from a bit more editing and beta reading. She has great ideas; I just wanted more polish in the writing itself.
Steam Meter: ❤️🔥❤️🔥❤️🔥 Steamy and for over 18. Kinky.
Romantic Tropes
-best friend/teammate’s sister
-dual pov
-realistic contemporary romance
-steamy
-hockey romance
-sports romance
-one bed trope
-college romance
You can read more of my reviews at mylastromance.com. You can also find me on Insta @mylastromancenovel.
February 29, 2024
Book Review
Need Your Number
By Mariah Goodwin
Tampa Thunder Book1
Goodreads blurb: Fiona Campbell, a recent college graduate, who is starting a social media intern position with her brother’s college hockey team. Fresh from a toxic relationship, will she ditch her anti-athlete dating plan in favor of the hot, grumpy player who seems to only be nice to her?
Zane Miller, college hockey player, working towards his dream of playing pro hockey in Tampa. He falls for his best friend's sister, but will she ditch her anti-athlete dating plan for him? Can he break through her walls and win her heart?
My thoughts: I read this series out of order, and that’s okay because I loved getting to know more about the family and friends and how relationships developed over time. I read the second and third book without really having much of an opinion about Zane and Fiona and now I love them.
This is the story of Zane and Fiona and is a mix of insta love and he falls first. Their relationship moves fast and steady because when you know you know. Just like in the books that follow, Zane is extremely protective of his family and friends. Fiona is strong and determined but also fragile. I love how they support each other, and work together to make their relationship work. The grand gestures are sweet, and their love is spicy.
If you haven’t read this series or if you read one of the books, go ahead and read them all even if it’s out of order, you won’t regret it.
Need Your Number
By Mariah Goodwin
Tampa Thunder Book1
Goodreads blurb: Fiona Campbell, a recent college graduate, who is starting a social media intern position with her brother’s college hockey team. Fresh from a toxic relationship, will she ditch her anti-athlete dating plan in favor of the hot, grumpy player who seems to only be nice to her?
Zane Miller, college hockey player, working towards his dream of playing pro hockey in Tampa. He falls for his best friend's sister, but will she ditch her anti-athlete dating plan for him? Can he break through her walls and win her heart?
My thoughts: I read this series out of order, and that’s okay because I loved getting to know more about the family and friends and how relationships developed over time. I read the second and third book without really having much of an opinion about Zane and Fiona and now I love them.
This is the story of Zane and Fiona and is a mix of insta love and he falls first. Their relationship moves fast and steady because when you know you know. Just like in the books that follow, Zane is extremely protective of his family and friends. Fiona is strong and determined but also fragile. I love how they support each other, and work together to make their relationship work. The grand gestures are sweet, and their love is spicy.
If you haven’t read this series or if you read one of the books, go ahead and read them all even if it’s out of order, you won’t regret it.
May 6, 2023
Zane Miller is top tier golden retriever vibes!!
This is a brother best friend trope and I almost kinda feel like insta love from Zane’s side?!
Brothers best friend is usually my top pick but I loved seeing Fiona and Zane’s relationship grow.
Fiona had to come over a lot of past trauma from her past relationship with douchebag Justin! And it was really comforting seeing Zane always being for her no matter what.
It was also really nice to see how much the hockey team + coach supported Fiona not only with her job but just having her back when it came to the things that came to light about her ex!
Can we also talk about how there was no unnecessary drama between her brother and Zane when their relationship came out?! Her brother Luke was just happy for both of them and I really enjoyed that. Because 9/10 in a brothers best friend there’s always drama and it’s very predictable!
I will say I feel like there was a lot of filler sentences that I kinda felt myself skipping over but I enjoyed reading about them!!
Also had some good spice between them! I enjoyed that they were both comfortable with themselves and talking about what they wanted in the bedroom together. Even though Zane was dominant he always made sure she was good and enjoying herself!
AND NO THIRD ACT BREAKUP!! Yay for good communication between them!!🫶🏼
🌶️🌶️🌶️
⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
This is a brother best friend trope and I almost kinda feel like insta love from Zane’s side?!
Brothers best friend is usually my top pick but I loved seeing Fiona and Zane’s relationship grow.
Fiona had to come over a lot of past trauma from her past relationship with douchebag Justin! And it was really comforting seeing Zane always being for her no matter what.
It was also really nice to see how much the hockey team + coach supported Fiona not only with her job but just having her back when it came to the things that came to light about her ex!
Can we also talk about how there was no unnecessary drama between her brother and Zane when their relationship came out?! Her brother Luke was just happy for both of them and I really enjoyed that. Because 9/10 in a brothers best friend there’s always drama and it’s very predictable!
I will say I feel like there was a lot of filler sentences that I kinda felt myself skipping over but I enjoyed reading about them!!
Also had some good spice between them! I enjoyed that they were both comfortable with themselves and talking about what they wanted in the bedroom together. Even though Zane was dominant he always made sure she was good and enjoying herself!
AND NO THIRD ACT BREAKUP!! Yay for good communication between them!!🫶🏼
🌶️🌶️🌶️
⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
This entire review has been hidden because of spoilers.
November 22, 2023
DNF. I had high hopes for this book after reading the description. But after about 60 pages I just couldn't anymore. For instance the main male keeps on talking about not being a player. But he does sleep around with different girls. One moment he is all about how his ex hurt him and he doesn't want to have anymore relationships but then a paragraph further he wants what his parents have. There is almost no real build up in this story. Not any real character development. The main characters knew each other because of the brother/best friend but now that she's working for the team (her brother is in) now all of a sudden the two MC have to have all these naughty thoughts of each other. Please let this be the last in this series.
Why do writers these days publish or self publish a book before proof reading it again? Especially in the New Adult genre? Do they think it's just a bunch of horny people reading their books and wouldn't worry about a proper storyline, character development or even the grammar?
Why do writers these days publish or self publish a book before proof reading it again? Especially in the New Adult genre? Do they think it's just a bunch of horny people reading their books and wouldn't worry about a proper storyline, character development or even the grammar?
This entire review has been hidden because of spoilers.
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