*Review copy provided by NetGalley in exchange for an honest review*
Our MC has been trained to be a seductress/thief/liar all her life by her stepmother, and a spy for the resistance by her grandmother, but she’s bad at all these things. We later learn another character has also been acting as part of the resistance in secret in the palace, and has been able to keep it under wraps much longer than she has and much better. There’s one point where a dog that tracks magic powder alerts to her, and she thinks she’s been found out, so she lies and says she’s been given some by her sewing circle to help with headaches (because Lady Aislinn would get headaches. No one gets headaches but weak women). Her sewing circle has not done this, but you know a lie that can be corroborated? Her future sister in law sits next to her and is sewing the magic powder into her wearing veil one teaspoon at a time. It could have easily gotten onto our MC b/c the women are in such close proximity.
Also did we need magic in this story? Why did we need magic that takes away consent in this story? Our MC has literally been trained to be appealing and appeasing to men her whole life. It’s believable that she could be lying to and seducing him in other ways, and she does, so why include date-rape/SA magic?
How does the magic work? How is it refined and crafted? There was a 20 year war over this stuff to take it from a population who only used it for sacred religious practices so Solis could use it for industry, but we never see those affects. Magic is mostly used for subterfuge. We also never learn much about the religion besides that it has a goddess and they used the magic powder.
Rance (awful name, sounds like Rancid, why would you name your character something so harsh?) is described as having golden skin like all Elorians. Idk if this was the author’s intent, but I can’t stand seeing “golden” used as a stand in for “racially ambiguous brown that could just be tan so maybe it’s a white guy or actually a BIPOC person you can fetishize.” Our MC is also *spoiler* half Elorian but has the look of Solis. This isn’t helped by the fact that Eloria has been occupied/colonized/enslaved by Solis for its magic materials (again, could have been any other resource so we don’t need to include the magical SA plot point) and the citizenry are forced to work in the mines to gather these materials, or as servants. Rance is nicknamed “The Hostage Prince” even, so none of the Elorian characters who are visibly Elorian or known to be Elorian hold any positions of power or equality. I understand they’re meant to have lost a war, but when the only brown (though calling their skin golden might be a way to claim plausible deniability to this fact in the face of criticism, but I digress) people in your story are slaves, hostages, and servants it speaks to the greater racism within publishing and society, and the poor ways BIPOC people are viewed and treated.
The story also tries to have some feminist-y girl power moments where the women roll their eyes at the traditions, or ways men think, but this story hinges on the fact that our MC has to play a very specific role to play that hinges on her ability to play into demure female stereotypes.
And none of that is to mention that the story is too long, convoluted, and internal. We learn basically nothing about this world, its customs, its people, because we spend so much time locked in the palace and inside our MC’s head with her thoughts. We don’t even get to read the conversations she has with other people. It’s pages upon pages of “I talked to this person and got nowhere. There’s no one else I could possibly talk to”. Or giving us a synopsis of the conversations she had rather than getting to read the conversations she’s having. She’s constantly claiming she’s not a bad spy or bad at securing marriage prospects for her stepsisters, but she is. She isn’t the one to do any of the important stuff besides SA the prince!
This is an adult retelling of Cinderella, but the only thing that makes it adult is that the sex isn’t fade to black, and the characters are all (?) adults. They don’t act like it though. This read so much like bad YA, mostly in the fact that it treated the reader like a teen, holding their hand through a story that, while convoluted and overwritten, isn’t complicated.
These are adults. Ash is an adult. She made the choice to join the resistance and gain entry into the royal family/the palace of Solis for the rebellion. As soon as things get hard she gives up because she doesn’t actually care about Eloria, only about Rance. But Rance cares about Eloria, about its people and their place in the world. If she cared for him and what he stands for she would do a better job at using her position to make life better for them.
All the characters are just so flat. There’s no growth. They all just do a thing, but it never really changes how they think or go about actions in the future.
I started off intrigued and liking this book, excited to see where it went. As I read on and became less and less optimistic about characterization (forget about development, give me someone who’s not a paper bag), worldbuilding, and plot I began to hate this book. It doesn’t help that we tread and retread the same scenes and conversations over and over and over. This book could have been 100 pages shorter. It would still get a 1 star, but wouldn’t have wasted so much of my time.