Mindy Klasky is not a very good writer. Half of the sentences she uses seem as though she threw them in there as an afterthought. Her sentence structure ranges from rambling to staccato as we're "treated" to a wide range of Jane's bizarre mood swings.
The main things that bothered me?
1. The characterization of Neko. The complete stereotype of a gay man. Oh, look! He knows more about eyeliner and clothing than dumpy Jane! And the constant "hissing" and whatever else? Okay, we get that he used to be a cat. No need to beat us over the head with it every two seconds.
2. Jane's treatment of Melissa. Melissa is her best friend, but it seems all Jane does is treat her like shit. She mocks her about her dates and love life, settles disagreements with a game of "Rock, Paper, Scissors", and constantly calls Melissa up in a frenzy about her boy "troubles". Jane constantly needs Melissa's help for mojito therapy and cooking/baking, yet she gives her nothing in return.
3. Jane's treatment of her mother. She is such a sullen little brat when she meets her mother. The part where her grandmother tells her to snap out of it because having never had children, of course she doesn't understand how much her mother loves her was the best part of the book. Of course, Jane doesn't take kindly to differing opinions. She's convinced her mother hates her, and is a kook. But oh wait! It turns out they both have magical powers! Guess she's not so wacky and awful after all!
4. Jane's clear mental illness. She's been "observing" (stalking) a library patron for nine months, calling him her Imaginary Boyfriend. Then, after a convenient magical spell makes him pop a boner for her historical costume she's forced to wear at work, he asks her on a date. From this point on, she calls him her Boyfriend. Yes, it's capitalized every time. Never mind that he has only kissed her twice-once before her kitchen erupted in flames, and another one by the shitter after their lunch. Romantic.
Just because you went on a date with one guy one time does not make him your boyfriend. If that were the case, Melissa would have hundreds of boyfriends by now. But, silly Melissa! She just attracts awful, laughable guys. Jane attracts gorgeous men who fawn all over her! Who cares if it's because she's a witch and cast a spell on them? He ordered GARLIC BREAD at lunch. Clearly, this means he's comfortable enough around her to date her! Never mind that he never actually -asked- her to be his girlfriend yet...
5. Jane's irritating habit of reverting back to acting like a spoiled five-year-old. Jane pisses off David by being her usual dickish self, and David calmly says that he's done teaching her magic if that's what she wants. Jane says, and I quote, "So, do you want me to apologize? Is that it? I'm sorry, and I want you to be my teacher again?" How does this girl get through life if this is really the way she thinks friendships work? She is so oblivious to the feelings of everyone around her, unless those feelings involve being hopelessly in love with her.
6. Jane's a major creeper. (See mention of her stalking above). After one lunch date, she runs into Jason at a gala, and in the middle of a slow dance, whispers in his ear that she wants him to meet her entire family at a family reunion in two weeks. He agrees, but it's still weird. She flits from David to Jason and back again, and thinks nothing of it. Meanwhile, she's a condescending dick to her "best friend" who goes on multiple first dates a week looking for the right guy. At least Melissa's trying to find the -right- guy, not just a guy who will stick his tongue down her throat after a garlicky lunch and buy her marshmallows...
I'm actually not quite finished reading the book yet. Jane and Jason have yet to go to THE FARM for the family reunion. What will happen? Will Jason discover she's a witch and "leave" her? Will he reveal that he has powers too and marry her? Will they have a threesome with the Russian girl he claims he's not sleeping with? Will David really leave Jane to fend for herself, or will he be reeled back in with her winning personality?
This book is such a trainwreck that it's almost delightful. So, I gave it two stars.
UPDATE: I finally finished the book. Can I just say how happy I am that Jason was married to the Russian? I really wasn't expecting that. I thought Jane was going to end up with David happily ever after, but that didn't happen either. I'm also glad she realized that Melissa isn't actually a pathetic woman to be pitied after all. Still though, nothing exceptional enough to give it three stars.
I especially wish things had been much more conclusive with Jane and how she got her powers. It's assumed her grandmother has some, and her mother has some (which seems to be the only reason Jane deems her bearable), but her grandmother freaks out about the very mention of magic. I realize there are more books in the series after this. Maybe things will be resolved then, if I can bring myself to read another one of Klasky's books.