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Starfire: Kingdom on the Edge of Forever
Danizar is a young, halfbreed beauty, -- illegitimate daughter of the late Roran King and the Valent woman Eluna. She has the self-discipline of a Roran and the unique gifts of the Valent, an ancient wisdom race. Because of her mixed heritage, Danizar is an outsider to both the Valent and Roran cultures, which are distant and strange to each other. Yet it falls to her, to convince the Roran that the threat of the Zunit insect race is real, and to convince the Valent that they must work with the Roran if they are to win against the Zunit. If Danizar fails, the galaxy will be lost.
145 pages, Kindle Edition
First published November 19, 2011
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January 13, 2020
The less said the better
Nope just nope. The plot is ok but the writing at least in this version is Amateurish at best. Capitals in the middle , over explaining the motivations and long involved backstories poorly hidden as mind reading. Character is not clearly defined is she clever and confident or unsure of her place
It boggles the mind how quickly the motivations and behaviour of various people change without any reason
Nope just nope. The plot is ok but the writing at least in this version is Amateurish at best. Capitals in the middle , over explaining the motivations and long involved backstories poorly hidden as mind reading. Character is not clearly defined is she clever and confident or unsure of her place
It boggles the mind how quickly the motivations and behaviour of various people change without any reason
October 30, 2020
Too many typos
The storyline started out interestingly enough but I just couldn't really get into the book. The typos and lack of proper punctuation drive me batty. With a good edit and overall revision (including the ending....is there a Part 2?) This could be a really good read!
The storyline started out interestingly enough but I just couldn't really get into the book. The typos and lack of proper punctuation drive me batty. With a good edit and overall revision (including the ending....is there a Part 2?) This could be a really good read!
July 22, 2012
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This book is about Danizer, a beautiful young woman who is the daughter of noble Valent and king Roran. Hated in the both worlds, she's had a difficult childhood, especially because Roran tried to kill or control her all her life. And now, on their last attempt, they are using the Planetary Coalition; I never understand what it was exactly because the writer doesn’t explain the term.
What happens next is the race to catch her, which was quite boring; you also can find a lot of expressions, actions, and technology from our days… but the story is set in the future and the main characters are not from Earth.
Danizer was trying to find proof of the existence of the Zunit, an evil race of intelligent insects. With it she wants to unite all the humanoid races so they could protect that side of the universe.
Like I said before, there were terms with no explanation; descriptions where there shouldn’t be, which made the story even more boring. I give it just 2.5 stars.
To See Review at Booked Up
This book is about Danizer, a beautiful young woman who is the daughter of noble Valent and king Roran. Hated in the both worlds, she's had a difficult childhood, especially because Roran tried to kill or control her all her life. And now, on their last attempt, they are using the Planetary Coalition; I never understand what it was exactly because the writer doesn’t explain the term.
What happens next is the race to catch her, which was quite boring; you also can find a lot of expressions, actions, and technology from our days… but the story is set in the future and the main characters are not from Earth.
Danizer was trying to find proof of the existence of the Zunit, an evil race of intelligent insects. With it she wants to unite all the humanoid races so they could protect that side of the universe.
Like I said before, there were terms with no explanation; descriptions where there shouldn’t be, which made the story even more boring. I give it just 2.5 stars.
August 13, 2016
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My advice to any indie author always boils to down that. The grammar, the spelling, the homonyms, the random characters name changes partway through a page... These can all be fixed with a good edit or two. If you can't afford an editor, table the project until you can look at it with fresh eyes & do it yourself.
That said... There are the bones of a decent story and world build in this. It needs a lot of clean up, but the underlying idea has potential. Oh, and it needs to be finished. The book stops just as we are finally starting to see some interstellar intrigue kick in.
I'd like to read more, because the basic idea is good. I just don't want it enough to pay for it until it's been fixed.
EDIT
EDIT
My advice to any indie author always boils to down that. The grammar, the spelling, the homonyms, the random characters name changes partway through a page... These can all be fixed with a good edit or two. If you can't afford an editor, table the project until you can look at it with fresh eyes & do it yourself.
That said... There are the bones of a decent story and world build in this. It needs a lot of clean up, but the underlying idea has potential. Oh, and it needs to be finished. The book stops just as we are finally starting to see some interstellar intrigue kick in.
I'd like to read more, because the basic idea is good. I just don't want it enough to pay for it until it's been fixed.
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