Aside from the obvious problems with this book, like how ridiculously improbable any of it is, I cannot overlook the horrible grammar, sentence structure, and overall terrible writing I came across. Here are just a few examples:
"...the unseasonably, warm night air" So the air itself is just unseasonably?
"Across the dining room a cluster of women gathered around the entrance to the hallway. Looking into it, they talked excitedly in Spanish." Looking into what? Who talked excitedly in Spanish?
"Eddie nearly dumped in his drawers when he heard a gunshot." This story is told by a third person and that sentence was part of the narrative. This should not be in a third person narrative!
"Grateful for his protectiveness, she realized he hadn't annoyed today." Annoyed whom?
"Danielle felt ridiculously adolescent following him into his house, but she had to know if was in for the night, not on a date." You read that correctly, "if was in for the night..."
"Jeff left the room and called Amy Hayes, Jamie's friend from the office. When she answered, he explained how he'd run into Susan Jaster and what Susan had told him about seeing Lisa the night she'd disappeared." If you read the synopsis of this novel, you'd know that Lisa is one of the people looking for the missing women. When the readers met Susan Jaster, she talked about the night that Jamie went missing.
"Orth described the unsub as he had for the group." This is the first, and last, time "unsub" is used in this book. I believe it means "unknown subject" but this author can't seriously expect everyone to know that.
"It comfortable room with an open floor plan, the farmer's table in front of a low counter divided the kitchen area from the dining area." It comfortable?
"We were all spent the night here again." This is beginning to sound like something I may have written in the 4th grade.
It is not my job to edit your book, Marla Madison, but it ought be someone's. I don't care if you got this book for free, or paid $5 for it, it's a waste of anyone's money and certainly a waste of their time. I probably should have known this book was a dud when this sentence is found in the book's synopsis, "When TJ is attacked, and a woman looking remarkable like Lisa is found murdered, they know . . . someone is willing to kill to protect his secret." Proof read, proof read, proof read! I'm not saying that I don't make mistakes because I certainly do, but if I were ever going to publish a novel I would have it proof-read several times.