I formerly rated the previous installment of the Daughters of England as the weakest novel in the series. I changed my mind after reading “The Pool of St. Branok”
Like with “Midsummer’s Eve”, the Australian section often reads like non-fiction travel writing, which is fine if you don’t mind such digressions, but I’d rather stick to the story.
Like the previous four books in the series, we have a plodding narrative with little action and lots of repetition. The repetition in this case occurs between Angel – the narrator – and Ben. Like with several other books in this series, they have almost identical conversations about their relationship – or the lack of one. Because the author has done this in several novels, we know what will happen, and aren’t surprised if an obstacle – that is, for example, a husband or wife – should conveniently die.
A few times, the author ruins the suspense with lines like these:
>And so innocently happy I rode out to the pool, not realizing that life was never going to be the same again.<
>There came one evening at the house in the square which was to change our lives, although I did not know it then.<
>I shall never forget that afternoon. During it I experienced some of the most harrowing hours I have ever known.<
While lines of this type often make for good novel openers, they fall flat when inserted halfway through a story. It robs all suspense because you know something will happen, and can usually predict what it'll be.
Like the Annora and Rolf relationship in the previous book, Angel and Ben first realise they love each other when the female is a child, and the male is a young man. I've read several novels by this author where a grown man has romantic feelings for a child. Writing as Jean Plaidy, for example, this author has a male character in "The Red Cloak" falling for a seven-year-old, whom he feels is older than her years, and he wants to marry her when she's of age. It's not so blatant as that in this novel, but it's still creepy in this context that an adult would want a child to grow up faster.
For example, Ben tells Angel: “I thought of you often … but as a little girl. I was attracted then … I knew there was something between us.” And later: “I love you, Angel. I have from the first. When you were a little girl … Oh why were you only nine years old when we first met?”
This author, including her works as Victoria Holt, has a tendency to have her heroines refer to one of the male characters by both names, which really irritates me. This novel has several *female* characters referred to by both names, most notable Grace Gilmore. This type of thing might not bother some people, but it grates on my nerves.
Another of this author's annoying traits is the overuse of reported speech. Reported speech is passive. Why not make it active by changing it to dialogue?
Regarding dialogue, however, at times several characters are speaking together, which becomes confusing when the dialogue attribution is tagged on at the end. I reached the stage where I had to check the end of the line first to see who’s speaking. Otherwise, you read a line thinking it’s the character who spoke before the previous one, only to sometimes find out it isn’t.
As for the characters, I feel that this cast is among the weakest in the series so far, though better than in “Midsummer’s Eve”.
In short, I consider “The Pool of St. Branock” the least impressive of Books 1–14 in the Daughters of England series. The ending is unsatisfying and anti-climatic in the extreme.