I’m at 44%. It’s not going well. The book is trying too hard to hit booktok. The dialogue is weird and cringey. I’m convinced the dialogue was written by a booktok bot.
One MMC keeps calling the other MMC a golden retriever. The comedy bits are just weird. The spice is meh and the dirty talk is almost silly.
The FMC is literally just a vanilla cardboard cutout of an average booktok subscriber. The personalities of the three main characters are literal tropes with no depth. A golden retriever! A grumpy bearded guy! A nerdy book lover! Hockey! *yawn*
They use the phrase repeatedly in one chapter “blow her brains out”, to mean “give an orgasm”. Ummm. What??
Oh. And it’s HONE IN ON. not HOME in on. For a phrase used so many times in this book, you’d think the author would write it correctly.
Here’s an excerpt of the guys explaining hockey. This dialogue is just.. 🙄
“Sure, but I’m a total newbie.” My two guys give me a lesson, showing me videos on their phones, explaining the basics from face-off to goal, blue lines to red lines, and penalties to power plays. Ryker finishes with, “So that’s hockey.” “Basically, it’s exhilarating,” I say, summing it up. “You got it,” Ryker says. “And you have to be fearless.” “Exactly,” Chase adds. I let out a contemplative sigh, connecting all the dots of what they just told me. “You play on ice, but you need to be fueled by fire. That’s the hockey vibe.” Chase laughs, then it turns into a yawn. “That’s all you need to know, Trina. Hockey is a vibe.” “Hockey is life,” Ryker adds. Wait. Wait. I think I understand hockey now. I park my hands behind my head, letting a smile take over. “I’m pretty sure I had a hat trick tonight,” I say, pausing as they both lock eyes, waiting for me. “Of Os.” They both look stupidly happy as they say yes, yes you did.
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I’m going to finish it, but I’m gonna be mad about it. Why have so many of the books I’ve read been duds this year??