DNF @53%. 1.5 stars.
Shocking, since I hate not finishing, especially a novella. But Willow is that unlikeable.
GENERAL THOUGHTS
After the first thirty pages, I quickly grew tired of Willow’s childish hatred for Byron. This was set up to be a sort of “rivals”/“enemies to lovers” short story, but when the main protagonist doesn’t have much reason to hate the other (other than petty jealousy?), it makes the trope thoroughly unpleasant.
WILLOW
I might have excused Willow’s irrational hatred for Byron (and how it was stemmed from envy), if it wasn’t for the fact that it brought out all the unlikeable qualities of her personality!!
Her constant belligerence made her seem childish, trivial and immature. Every other comment about Byron is an irrational snide, which only makes her seem more and more bitter.
At one point, I quote that she calls Byron: “Annoying. Immature. Abhorrent.”
… Ironic, no? I find those words describe Willow perfectly. She also says at one point:
“Byron is a problem. He wants what I want, and I can’t let him have it if I am to attain my own childhood hopes”
To top it off, she merely assumes the worst of him, and outright glees over potential misfortune befalling him. That’s really unlikeable and speaks poorly of her morals.
Even if you hate someone (albeit irrationally), I think it’s disappointing that it’s then acceptable to wish somebody harm, instead of trying to work on our own sense of virtue, letting go of the anger/hostility, and moving on with your own life when holding on to a grudge is doing nothing for your own self-improvement.
OTHER CHARACTERS
That aside, I wish I had better things to say about the other characters… but they are all very one dimensional and bland.
Marvin, the sad sap… is so monotonous of a character that it’s really pathetic. He lacks so much depth, the guy is literally the “nerdy, physically-weak but book-smart wimp whom is also a little ditsy/clumsy and instantly infatuated by the pretty mean girl after their first meeting”. I have nothing else to say about him.
Byron, who is meant to be the charming “golden boy” who is an all-rounder, came across as very… boyish. Like, preteen. The things he said that are meant to be witty, blasé and bursting with charm? They felt awkward, and a little forced. He was not smooth, masculine or suave like you expect him to be. Particularly as his character is marketed to be “beloved by all in the village” and so “perfect he could do no wrong”. When he banters with Willow, it was like watching two kids in preschool — one who is boiling with dislike, and the other deflecting with graceless, gawky “charisma”.
OVERSTATED “FAE”
Another peeve that became evident the more I read, was how often Willow feels the need to mention that she is fae, whilst her companions are human… or how Byron is a (grandson of a) blacksmith. And how she’s a fae with little to no magic, but she should be amongst the other fae in Skyshire because she’s not really human. How unfair it is that she’s only a low-magic but Byron has powerful magic despite being just a mortal… and oh, did I mention that Willow is fae? Jeez.
THE “ENEMIES/RIVALS” TROPE
I guess this book just highlights that although the “enemies/rivals” romance is a formula that whilst may be a huge “hit” amongst romance readers, it still has to be rooted in some backstory or justified in a dignified manner, whilst showing the character’s own willingness to maintain their integrity and not be outright antagonistic… especially when it could be born out of self-pity and insecurity.
CLOSING REMARKS
I understand that as this is a short story, there are bound to be flaws in the amount of “backstory” that can be written in, or how character development might be a little rushed when there aren’t enough chapters to squeeze it in… but I think a lot of this can still be done without the need for actual world building or flashbacks, etc… instead, you can glean a lot of backstory and depth to characters (their personalities, history, motives), purely from just the way they act & things they say. Sadly even by the halfway point, the characters seem to show absolutely NO sign of development.
I have also read other short stories and novellas that did a much better job of this trope, with shorter, almost “drabble” sequences for chapters, but with characters that had maturity, depth, the ability to let go of prejudices, all while revolving around an intriguing plot.
This one lacked all of that.
So whilst this story is meant to be short, it doesn’t excuse (at least to me,) the poorly written, shallow characters and stunted story. It was cliche, and my feelings towards Willow & her story changed from “mildly disinterested” to “annoyed” to “dislike” because of it.