Thank you to the author and BookSirens for an ARC of this book. I received a free copy and was invited to share my honest opinion.
Ok, there were lots of things that I did like about this book. First was the realistic regency setting; the town, streets, carriages and ballrooms are instantly recognisable to anyone who is familiar with the genre and I felt it was well done. I also enjoyed the slow burn and the friends/enemies to lovers trope and I love a dual POV so that definitely appealed. The storyline I felt was good, as was the characterisation, particularly of the MCs. I liked that Georgiana was not the usual pretty, young, naive protagonist, but a more wily and practical lady with teeth she’s just grown into!
There were a few elements, however, that bothered me - and perhaps it’s because I’m a bit of a regency purist? The fact that one of the principal characters is called the Duke of Yordstrom didn’t sit well. It’s not an English name at all! There isn’t an infinite supply of dukedoms in England and they’re usually named after places and handed down through generations - it’s unusual for new titles to be created. As such, it struck me as odd that the author chose to invent a title that sounds so foreign as opposed to using an existing dukedom. There are enough to choose from, really, instead of creating something that sounds so out of place. (I do appreciate, however, that to an American audience, perhaps this would be totally unnoticeable? It just seems very artificial to me as an English reader!) It also bothered me that this character is alternately referred to as the Duke of Yordstrom, Duke Smith, Busick Smith and plain Smith. This is very much against regency etiquette, which would dictate using someone’s title unless on very intimate terms with them and it didn’t feel at all in keeping with the time period. The given name Busick is also highly unusual, not English and not very regency. I felt that these naming decisions unfortunately took away from the regency feel to the book.
There’s a similar example on p. 179 where Samuel calls both brothers Mr Montagu despite the fact that Nathaniel is a viscount. Again, according to regency etiquette, Nathaniel ought to be addressed using his title or simply his surname if intimacy is implied - but to call him “Mr” would be an insult and I don’t think this is supposed to be suggested in this scene. Another example is when Samuel “shoves” his hands in his pockets on p. 202 “as I trot down the stairs”. A regency era gentleman definitely wouldn’t have walked with his hands in his pockets! I appreciate that these are small things but the inconsistencies feel like errors in an otherwise well-crafted regency world.
The other thing that bothered me about this book was the frequent misuse of language and odd word choices that interrupted the flow of the text. For instance, on p. 190, the phrase “what we had as kids” is used, which is definitely not the correct word choice for a regency novel - a more appropriate choice might be ‘children’ or ‘younger’. There are also examples of the author attempting (unsuccessfully) to use more old-fashioned language, for instance when Lucas describes his evening as ““droll, dull, boring” on p.180, however ‘droll’ means funny or amusing, meaning this sentence doesn’t really make sense! There are lots of examples of this; “denied” instead of declined on p.99, “perspective” instead of prospective on p.227, “deny” rather than forego on p.410. In addition, there are some descriptive choices that are just plain odd; the repeated description of Samuel’s eyes as tree-bark-coloured is very strange and just doesn’t seem to flow naturally in the story. Another example is where, at one point, Georgiana describes running her hand down a horse’s fur - but horses don’t have fur! They have hair, hide, a mane, a flank, but not fur!
I have to say, I was also not a fan of the first-person present tense narration. I generally don’t like books written in the present-tense because I just find it less pleasing to read and I can’t say that this was an exception. It doesn’t fit well for a historical novel in my opinion. I also found that the author occasionally slipped into the past tense making the narration feel awkward.
Overall I did enjoy this story and the characters were engaging but I felt the writing really let it down. I think if you’re going to pick a regency setting, the whole book has to fit into this - and the language used plays a huge part in communicating the setting to your reader. Unfortunately, that’s where this book fell down for me.