Peter Makuck is Distinguished Professor Emeritus at East Carolina University. He is the author of Long Lens: New and Selected Poems and two collections of short stories, Breaking and Entering and Costly Habits. His poems, stories, and essays have appeared in the Georgia Review, Hudson Review, Poetry, Sewanee Review, the Nation, and Gettysburg Review.
This collection had no life, no edge. The poems just lay there on the page, largely one dimensional, no natural surprises or irony. Many of the poems were long, flat descriptions, with a forced surprise in the final lines. We want surprise endings, but they can't be forced. They have to grow out of the setup.
Here is a sample of a flat description (37):
Woodsmoke
Sometimes the sight of it curling blue from brick chimney on a rusty tin roof
or the scent of it drifting on a cold day puts an edge on things, reminds me
we were almost poor forked creatures those frosty mornings, our country home no