I've been reading a lot of western historical romance recently and it's been a bad run, partly because a lot of it has been indie published books.
I can handle some typos and grammatical errors, but I don't have much patience for flat prose and dull dialogue and repetitive, pointless scenes which neither move the story forward nor give insight to the characters.
This book was a nice surprise. Despite a fair number of awkward sentences (so flowery it was hard to decipher their meaning) and errors in syntax or misused words, the writing has energy and verve. The dialogue in particular flows well.
However, I didn't enjoy the book for two reasons:
The story drags on. There are several sections where the couple gets stuck in a rut and things become repetitive. This is easily done in a story which spans a full year - some days and weeks are alike but perhaps they could have been skipped.
And worse, I didn't really like the heroine. Often in romance, to create conflict, one of the characters needs to act in an unreasonable manner, and in this instance it is the heroine, Jem.
In order to save her ranch, Jem hires Reese to act as her husband for a year. They strike a deal, and then Jem does everything she can to stop Reese from doing what she's hired him to do. She belittles him in public, she argues against him, she throws tantrums.
Jem loses her temper a lot (there are frequent references to "red haze of rage" and "anger breaking its confines" etc). When Jem doesn't get her way, she shouts at people. She keeps telling Reese: "I'm the boss and you do as I say". She also publicly accuses other people in the community of crimes, including murder, without any evidence at all, just her gut feeling.
The reason we are given for her behaviour is that she has been an outcast all her life, forced to develop a tough exterior to protect her feelings because she is "different".
And yet, it is clear that she is an outcast by choice. She has always rebuffed offers of friendship from other women, thinking they are simpering fools. She chooses to dress and behave like man (and then she has the audacity to complain that people don't treat her like a woman). She likes to insult other people, but if someone says a cross word to her, she gets upset.
Aggression stemming from uncertainty is the behaviour of a bully, and such behaviour is no more acceptable in a woman than it is in a man. Jem's uncertainty stems from the fact that she is too tall and skinny and not as pretty as her mother who was a renowned beauty.
If every woman dissatisfied with their body shape or falling short of the standard of ideal beauty took that sense of inadequacy as a licence to be horrible to other people, the world would be a terrible place, with 99% of women impossible to live with.
Further, Jem's attitude to the physical side of marriage left me baffled. In the early part of the book, she becomes particularly nasty towards Reese because she starts lusting after him. I assumed her anger was based on her worry that she might allow him to seduce her, which would create complications with ending the marriage at the end of the year.
But that's not it...in fact, Jem seems happy to consummate the marriage, but she wants it to be an unpleasant chore from her part, not something she is a willing participant in. I couldn't understand this at all. If they have sex, how are they going to terminate the marriage, particularly as regular sex over the course of a year is highly likely to result in pregnancy?
One more thing I disliked about Jem is how she thinks about Reese. She thinks he has sold his soul and emasculated himself by entering into the fake marriage with her. Why would that be? They made a deal which benefits both parties. If anyone is selling her soul, surely that is Jem, who is prepared to offer bedroom services as part of the bargain to keep her ranch?
There is a nice suspense element about who killed Jem's father, but it is slightly spoiled by the solution being obvious to the reader from early on, and from Jem being so vocal about accusing the wrong people.
So, in summary, this could have been a great book if the author had speeded things up a bit and toned down the character of the heroine, and made the suspense plot a little less obvious.