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Deadly Temptations
Denise Milton is a professional and damn good at what she does but her faith is tested when she finds herself attracted to her gorgeous partner, Troy Mader. After an unfortunate incident, Denise realizes she is not the only one who craves his touch. Testing the limits of their feelings drives them into the clutches of a tortured mind. Do they let their relationship unfold or will just a taste lead them to Deadly Temptations?
Deadly Temptations is a Short Romantic Suspense with an edge...
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- GenresErotica
40 pages, ebook
First published June 20, 2012
About the author
Mina J. Moore
8 books76 followersA writer at heart, I've been putting words together for years. I love to write about hot bad boy type heroes and strong feisty women. Paranormal is my favorite but I can skip around to other Romantic genres without a problem!
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Displaying 1 - 16 of 16 reviews
June 23, 2012
This is a quick read with likable lead characters, hot sex, and an antag that you wouldn't want to leave around your pet bunny and a pot of boiling water. I will be waiting for the next book in this series.
October 15, 2012
I really enjoyed this book! The characters were interesting, the plot was solid and the love scenes sizzled! I am so glad I downloaded this and I highly recommend this to anyone looking for a steamy, sexy read. I look forward to reading more from this Author!
October 15, 2012
I really enjoyed this book! The characters were interesting, the plot was solid and the love scenes sizzled! I am so glad I downloaded this and I highly recommend this to anyone looking for a steamy, sexy read. I look forward to reading more from this Author!
June 24, 2018
What a great erotic thriller! I like seeing a story with unexpected twists and turns, and this book delivers. The inner struggle and the search Denise goes on is touching and alluring as it is sassy and dangerous. Kudos to Mira Moore. I look forward to reading more from this author.
October 16, 2012
The story was great right up until the last 5 pages or so. I feel like it just sort of stopped and and summed everything up when in actuality I could ave used another chapter or 2.
October 26, 2012
A solid, steamy, sizzling, intoxicating, sexy and interesting story. What more could a woman want! :0)
August 29, 2013
Deadly Temptations is the bare bones of what could be a reasonable erotic thriller. I had issues with pacing, issues with the characters, issues with the level of detail provided, issues with the lack of background information provided, and issues with the sex scenes.
Let's break these down...
Pacing:
This is only 40 pages long, so it's going to be quick. That isn't the problem. The issue arose from too many things being crammed into the 40 pages. Either the book needs to be longer to allow for more development or some of the plot twists need to be removed. I felt rushed through the whole story, had no point where I could just take a breath and reflect on the story because the whole time it was 'go-go-go'. This can sometimes work for thrillers, but it does little for the erotic themes.
Characters:
The biggest flaws with the characters included, that we either knew too much, not enough about them or there were massive discrepancies in character. Given the pressing issue with the length of the story, less about the characters should be ok, but it wasn't.
We were provided with a fair bit of under-developed information that an attentive reader will pick up on that others may not. Subtle things, more from their choices in clothes or unconscious behaviour that Mina included that paint a bigger picture than from the words they say. These things gave me a sense of the characters from fairly early on, that was smashed time and time again by the blatantly out of character actions they undertook later in the story.
Case in point the brash and rather crude language used by Mader in the immediate aftermath of their rushed coupling:
'Mader kissed her neck then her lips. "F&^king A, that was unbelievable."'
He is meant to be a high-powered type of executive, all masculine and sexy and even perhaps a little brooding, but this sudden 'bogan/redneck crudeness' is totally out of character.
Detail:
If you like slam, bam, thank you ma'am sex scenes you might enjoy this. The sexy scenes aside (I'll go into that more later) the details in the story were hazy at best. We had info dumps by way of basic conversation between one unimportant character and one or both of the main characters and little else.
Background information:
This stems from the above lack of detail. In a 40 page novella, background information may or may not be important, but you need to make a call on that pretty quickly. If you think background information is needed you need to drip feed it into the story, not drop it in, in giant chunks that drag down the pace of the scenes. If you don't think the background information is needed at all, make the reason the characters are doing what they're doing seem immediate reactions to something and then justify them. Don't drag the reading from the past to the present to the past to another scene and then back again trying to tie it all up nicely.
An example of this is with Angie, there was really no reason why we needed the background information, and her role in the story could be explained in a much simpler manner.
Sex scenes:
As previously mentioned, wham, bam, thank you ma'am is the flavour of the book. The level of detail in the sex scenes was appallingly thin, basic text - almost as if Mina was a little shy about them. There was very little foreplay, very little lead up at all. Almost as if one minute there was a little interest, and then the next they were going at it like a pair of rabbits.
How to improve this...
A serious editing session with a strong editor, a re-draft of the whole story to work out the important parts and flesh them out. Find the unimportant parts and cut them. Make a character sketch of the protags and the antagonists and make sure their behaviour fits their persona, both consciously and in their sub-conscious behaviours. Develop the sex scenes, tease the senses, not just sight, tell the reader how Mader's well chiselled chest feels, what he smells like as they curl up afterwards, and provide more sensory information to really bring in the reader.
Even for a short titillation read, you need to submerge the reader into it, not just give very basic descriptions.
What worked
The genre melding of erotic thriller worked well for Deadly Temptations, it will draw in a wider audience because of that. Denise is a character that a lot of women could relate to; she seemed to be fairly normal, career driven and realistic. We had very little physical description of her, which may have been done on purpose to allow for more women to relate to her, or may have been done by accident. Regardless, it worked.
The Epilogue isn't needed. It adds a 'fluffy' ending to a story that doesn't need it, but the information in it could have been added into the end of the story in a less direct way.
Ultimately, with a hefty edit and re-write this could be a rather exciting read for both erotic and thriller audiences. Mina has the right ideas, but the execution of them falls short.
Let's break these down...
Pacing:
This is only 40 pages long, so it's going to be quick. That isn't the problem. The issue arose from too many things being crammed into the 40 pages. Either the book needs to be longer to allow for more development or some of the plot twists need to be removed. I felt rushed through the whole story, had no point where I could just take a breath and reflect on the story because the whole time it was 'go-go-go'. This can sometimes work for thrillers, but it does little for the erotic themes.
Characters:
The biggest flaws with the characters included, that we either knew too much, not enough about them or there were massive discrepancies in character. Given the pressing issue with the length of the story, less about the characters should be ok, but it wasn't.
We were provided with a fair bit of under-developed information that an attentive reader will pick up on that others may not. Subtle things, more from their choices in clothes or unconscious behaviour that Mina included that paint a bigger picture than from the words they say. These things gave me a sense of the characters from fairly early on, that was smashed time and time again by the blatantly out of character actions they undertook later in the story.
Case in point the brash and rather crude language used by Mader in the immediate aftermath of their rushed coupling:
'Mader kissed her neck then her lips. "F&^king A, that was unbelievable."'
He is meant to be a high-powered type of executive, all masculine and sexy and even perhaps a little brooding, but this sudden 'bogan/redneck crudeness' is totally out of character.
Detail:
If you like slam, bam, thank you ma'am sex scenes you might enjoy this. The sexy scenes aside (I'll go into that more later) the details in the story were hazy at best. We had info dumps by way of basic conversation between one unimportant character and one or both of the main characters and little else.
Background information:
This stems from the above lack of detail. In a 40 page novella, background information may or may not be important, but you need to make a call on that pretty quickly. If you think background information is needed you need to drip feed it into the story, not drop it in, in giant chunks that drag down the pace of the scenes. If you don't think the background information is needed at all, make the reason the characters are doing what they're doing seem immediate reactions to something and then justify them. Don't drag the reading from the past to the present to the past to another scene and then back again trying to tie it all up nicely.
An example of this is with Angie, there was really no reason why we needed the background information, and her role in the story could be explained in a much simpler manner.
Sex scenes:
As previously mentioned, wham, bam, thank you ma'am is the flavour of the book. The level of detail in the sex scenes was appallingly thin, basic text - almost as if Mina was a little shy about them. There was very little foreplay, very little lead up at all. Almost as if one minute there was a little interest, and then the next they were going at it like a pair of rabbits.
How to improve this...
A serious editing session with a strong editor, a re-draft of the whole story to work out the important parts and flesh them out. Find the unimportant parts and cut them. Make a character sketch of the protags and the antagonists and make sure their behaviour fits their persona, both consciously and in their sub-conscious behaviours. Develop the sex scenes, tease the senses, not just sight, tell the reader how Mader's well chiselled chest feels, what he smells like as they curl up afterwards, and provide more sensory information to really bring in the reader.
Even for a short titillation read, you need to submerge the reader into it, not just give very basic descriptions.
What worked
The genre melding of erotic thriller worked well for Deadly Temptations, it will draw in a wider audience because of that. Denise is a character that a lot of women could relate to; she seemed to be fairly normal, career driven and realistic. We had very little physical description of her, which may have been done on purpose to allow for more women to relate to her, or may have been done by accident. Regardless, it worked.
The Epilogue isn't needed. It adds a 'fluffy' ending to a story that doesn't need it, but the information in it could have been added into the end of the story in a less direct way.
Ultimately, with a hefty edit and re-write this could be a rather exciting read for both erotic and thriller audiences. Mina has the right ideas, but the execution of them falls short.
March 19, 2013
I think this story can relate to a lot of relationships out there. There really are people that would threaten to do anything, even hurt the people they say they love, just to get what they want and this is exactly what happens to the characters here. This story will take you to a journey of love, hate, passion and so many more feelings, that I highly recommend this to everyone and it won't dissapoint, this is a very good read....great job Mina, as always, I love all your work ;)
March 6, 2013
Denise has a secret she wants her partner and she is not the only one! Troy has a secret also one that may kill them both. Can the heat between them survive the secret?
I had to make the above short, I didn't want to give anything away. This book has it all. It is a short story but Mina J. Moore was able to pack it all in the allotted word count!
I Highly Recommend
5 Stars
Patches
I had to make the above short, I didn't want to give anything away. This book has it all. It is a short story but Mina J. Moore was able to pack it all in the allotted word count!
I Highly Recommend
5 Stars
Patches
March 6, 2013
I really like this short read...Wow you never know who your co-workers are or what they are capable of. Loved the tension between Denise and Mader and how it blows wide opened...If you are in the mood for a quick read with suspense with some sexy hot scenes then this is a must read.
October 17, 2012
Eh. It was short. Not too entertaining.
October 21, 2012
Talk about rushed! If all you want is a quick one with a half-assed (but could have been great) story then this is right up your alley.
May 31, 2014
A quick and sexy thriller!Great read!
April 2, 2016
My Rating System:
* couldn't finish, ** wouldn't recommend, *** would recommend, **** would read again, ***** have read again.
* couldn't finish, ** wouldn't recommend, *** would recommend, **** would read again, ***** have read again.
May 27, 2015
A quick read thriller. Not too in depth and could've been expanded to a full length novel but worth the read nonetheless.
October 23, 2012
Quick read and totally unrealistic. Not worth my time.
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