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Between You and Me
Dear Author,
This was supposed to be a quick game of football but somehow it turned into something more. One minute I'm passing him the ball, the next I'm kissing his shoulder. He's my twin brother! And I did it in front of all the guys!
What do I do now? We've always been close but never THIS close. He's so tense, a second away from punching me in the face and all the guys are staring at us. I just want to stake my claim on him but I can't so WHAT DO I DO?!
*I'd like for the one who is going to kiss the other's shoulder to be gay, while the one with floppy hair is straight. No girlfriends. Angst, banter and conversations would be awesome. I want to know these boys before, during and after they make a relationship. But I also want it to be hot! These boys are twins which means they both have huge, thick cocks. Make them use them!
Photo Description: A black and white picture of two young men on a sunny day, the background of a park or field is faded. They have their tops off, displaying chiselled bodies. One has short hair and he's passing the ball to the other who is facing the viewer, long hair is obscuring his face. There's a sense of intimacy in the lack of aggression while passing the ball, suggesting friendship or something deeper.
This story was written as a part of the M/M Romance Group's "Love is Always Write" event. Group members were asked to write a story prompt inspired by a photo of their choice. Authors of the group selected a photo and prompt that spoke to them and wrote a short story.
Download the story, read it online or find it in Love Is Always Write: Volume 1.
This was supposed to be a quick game of football but somehow it turned into something more. One minute I'm passing him the ball, the next I'm kissing his shoulder. He's my twin brother! And I did it in front of all the guys!
What do I do now? We've always been close but never THIS close. He's so tense, a second away from punching me in the face and all the guys are staring at us. I just want to stake my claim on him but I can't so WHAT DO I DO?!
*I'd like for the one who is going to kiss the other's shoulder to be gay, while the one with floppy hair is straight. No girlfriends. Angst, banter and conversations would be awesome. I want to know these boys before, during and after they make a relationship. But I also want it to be hot! These boys are twins which means they both have huge, thick cocks. Make them use them!
Photo Description: A black and white picture of two young men on a sunny day, the background of a park or field is faded. They have their tops off, displaying chiselled bodies. One has short hair and he's passing the ball to the other who is facing the viewer, long hair is obscuring his face. There's a sense of intimacy in the lack of aggression while passing the ball, suggesting friendship or something deeper.
This story was written as a part of the M/M Romance Group's "Love is Always Write" event. Group members were asked to write a story prompt inspired by a photo of their choice. Authors of the group selected a photo and prompt that spoke to them and wrote a short story.
Download the story, read it online or find it in Love Is Always Write: Volume 1.
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First published July 17, 2012
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July 12, 2012
Only a few paragraphs in but it's distant 3rd person narration. I hate this style and feels like everything is being told but nothing is shown. It leaves me feeling disconnected from the story and hard to get into it
It's present tense. Took me a bit too figure out what was so weird about the writing. I don't like the 3rd person present tense at all. It's distracting me and I can't see past it to know what the story's like. About a page into it and feels like its taken hours to get that far
The details in this are pointless. Like describing a mirror after a hot shower and other stuff that everyone knows about. But the. Very vague on any details about the characters. Like he thinks half thoughts and I have no idea what he's thinking about.
Writing still bothers me. So hard to get into and look past it.
How old are they?
Where is Phil?
Howl long the mom been dead?
Is Jace openly gay?
They throw a party at their stepdads house in the afternoon and leave during to go play football? Then come home later that night and happy stuff isn't broken but play is still a mess. Who does that?
Then the end just leaves you with more questions. And you never know cam at allot what he's thinking. He freaks out. Leaves for two days and comes back and is just gay for his twin? And then the end.
There was no chemistry or anything here that I could see. They barely seemed like they'd be friends let alone lovers.
It's present tense. Took me a bit too figure out what was so weird about the writing. I don't like the 3rd person present tense at all. It's distracting me and I can't see past it to know what the story's like. About a page into it and feels like its taken hours to get that far
The details in this are pointless. Like describing a mirror after a hot shower and other stuff that everyone knows about. But the. Very vague on any details about the characters. Like he thinks half thoughts and I have no idea what he's thinking about.
Writing still bothers me. So hard to get into and look past it.
How old are they?
Where is Phil?
Howl long the mom been dead?
Is Jace openly gay?
They throw a party at their stepdads house in the afternoon and leave during to go play football? Then come home later that night and happy stuff isn't broken but play is still a mess. Who does that?
Then the end just leaves you with more questions. And you never know cam at allot what he's thinking. He freaks out. Leaves for two days and comes back and is just gay for his twin? And then the end.
There was no chemistry or anything here that I could see. They barely seemed like they'd be friends let alone lovers.
September 30, 2013
3.75*
Covering the taboo subject of twincest, this is really quite a good emotional take on it. One of the twins Cam, is straight to start with whilst Jace is gay and his feelings for his brother have been deepening and growing for a long time. Then an incident ccurs that outs Jaces true feelings, putting Cam in the position where he has to look into how he's going to deal with it. There's a sad backstory concerning the twins mother and the author puts this moment as a sort of crossroads for when those more dormant feelings started to become stronger.
The only off putting thing for me really is the present tense that the story is written in, its not a favourite of mine because it tends to distance me a tad from whats going on and then the slightly abrupt ending did leave me wondering where the relationship was going to go but I would have to say I did enjoy it and found the tension well paced between the guys. Sexy yet far from porn, its a sensitive subject well handled. Another free offering from the excellent Love Is Always Write collection.
Covering the taboo subject of twincest, this is really quite a good emotional take on it. One of the twins Cam, is straight to start with whilst Jace is gay and his feelings for his brother have been deepening and growing for a long time. Then an incident ccurs that outs Jaces true feelings, putting Cam in the position where he has to look into how he's going to deal with it. There's a sad backstory concerning the twins mother and the author puts this moment as a sort of crossroads for when those more dormant feelings started to become stronger.
The only off putting thing for me really is the present tense that the story is written in, its not a favourite of mine because it tends to distance me a tad from whats going on and then the slightly abrupt ending did leave me wondering where the relationship was going to go but I would have to say I did enjoy it and found the tension well paced between the guys. Sexy yet far from porn, its a sensitive subject well handled. Another free offering from the excellent Love Is Always Write collection.
July 24, 2012
That was very well done despite it is a very controversial storyline. I admit - I loved it, especially the mole (I'm a huge fan of the Clippinger twins and bringing Alan's mole in the story was a streak of genious...I love that mole at the hipbone)
What confused me in the beginning though was that in the letter to the pic James/Jace is supposed to be the straight one and Alan/Cam the gay one - so I had difficulties adjusting at first. After I overcame that I fell in love with them.
The slow built up - even the lack of long conversations - everything fit.
Someone commented that the details are pointless. I can't see this. This is a story based on emotions, confused emotions, the feeling of being detached from reality because what's happenening can't be real, shouldn't happen. If you have been in the situation where you had no control of what was happenening yourself, you would know, that in moments like this you percieve the strangest things. For me it made me feel with Jace just so much more.
It asks from the reader to be willing to follow, to not rush reading.
For people who prefer stories based on action, they will be a bit dissapointed. And they'll oversee the tenderness, the yearning and the little small details that made this story a gem itself.
Now....oh my, I would love to read how they make it work.
What confused me in the beginning though was that in the letter to the pic James/Jace is supposed to be the straight one and Alan/Cam the gay one - so I had difficulties adjusting at first. After I overcame that I fell in love with them.
The slow built up - even the lack of long conversations - everything fit.
Someone commented that the details are pointless. I can't see this. This is a story based on emotions, confused emotions, the feeling of being detached from reality because what's happenening can't be real, shouldn't happen. If you have been in the situation where you had no control of what was happenening yourself, you would know, that in moments like this you percieve the strangest things. For me it made me feel with Jace just so much more.
It asks from the reader to be willing to follow, to not rush reading.
For people who prefer stories based on action, they will be a bit dissapointed. And they'll oversee the tenderness, the yearning and the little small details that made this story a gem itself.
Now....oh my, I would love to read how they make it work.
September 9, 2012
Having known a couple who were brothers IRL, it always annoyed me that (tw)incest stories almost universally start with the pair already an established couple. The most interesting thing about such pairings - to my mind - is not breaking the taboo itself, which so often seems to be done simply for the sake of being a bit "daring", but the how and the why of getting together in the first place. This is what we get in this story, and it's beautifully done. The 3rd person present tense did throw me a bit at first, it reads almost like a flashback, but once I got into the story the immediacy of it fit the tone perfectly. I'd love to read a sequel (hint, hint!).
February 21, 2013
From Love is Always Write - Volume 1
This short story is about the taboo subject of twincest. The present tense narration was strange but somehow managed to convey the emotional struggle, particularly of Jace, very well. I was drawn into the story and actually wanted it to continue. Perhaps there is opportunity for another short story or even full length book?
This short story is about the taboo subject of twincest. The present tense narration was strange but somehow managed to convey the emotional struggle, particularly of Jace, very well. I was drawn into the story and actually wanted it to continue. Perhaps there is opportunity for another short story or even full length book?
July 26, 2012
Like some other reviewers said, the present tense in the narration really threw me at first. However, as I got into the story, I actually decided that the present tense really fit; it made the events of the story seem more immediate, and I ended up enjoying feeling like I was there with Jace as he was experiencing these things.
I've been trying to figure out why this story felt so different from the other twincest books I've read, and I think it's to do with the reasons I've been intrigued by that trope. One of my very favorite m/m tropes is the friends-to-lovers, and I think that the twincest/brothercest trope for me is basically a super-intense, taboo version of friends-to-lovers with even higher stakes. And what really disappointed me at the beginning of this story was that Jace and Cam WEREN'T friends. Or at least that's how it seemed.
Later, however, as we learned a little more about both characters and what had led them to the events of the story, Jace helps us understand why he and Cam felt so distant from each other at the beginning, and they really do feel like they're friends. I thought that was well done.
I also thought the scene at the end with the boys together was beautifully well done. Yes, it's a HFN and possibly (hopefully!) a set-up for another work, but I feel like it was the most honest way to end the story given who the characters were.
What I didn't like so much was how little I knew about Jace and Cam. Perhaps I missed it, but I don't remember being told how old they were, and that kept throwing me as I tried to understand each of them and where they were both coming from. And the context clues as to age seemed contradictory: they're old enough to throw a party where alcohol is involved, and old enough for Jace to have had at least one boyfriend, which to me says college-age (perhaps that's just my very sheltered upbringing speaking, though... :P), but they live at home with their step-father still and seem to dread his coming home from a trip the way high-schoolers do.
Also, while I understand that this was Jace's story, I do still wish I could have been in Cam's head at least while he was gone for those few days.
Overall, an interesting and beautifully-handled exploration of a sensitive topic. 3.5 stars rounded up for being free.
I've been trying to figure out why this story felt so different from the other twincest books I've read, and I think it's to do with the reasons I've been intrigued by that trope. One of my very favorite m/m tropes is the friends-to-lovers, and I think that the twincest/brothercest trope for me is basically a super-intense, taboo version of friends-to-lovers with even higher stakes. And what really disappointed me at the beginning of this story was that Jace and Cam WEREN'T friends. Or at least that's how it seemed.
Later, however, as we learned a little more about both characters and what had led them to the events of the story, Jace helps us understand why he and Cam felt so distant from each other at the beginning, and they really do feel like they're friends. I thought that was well done.
I also thought the scene at the end with the boys together was beautifully well done. Yes, it's a HFN and possibly (hopefully!) a set-up for another work, but I feel like it was the most honest way to end the story given who the characters were.
What I didn't like so much was how little I knew about Jace and Cam. Perhaps I missed it, but I don't remember being told how old they were, and that kept throwing me as I tried to understand each of them and where they were both coming from. And the context clues as to age seemed contradictory: they're old enough to throw a party where alcohol is involved, and old enough for Jace to have had at least one boyfriend, which to me says college-age (perhaps that's just my very sheltered upbringing speaking, though... :P), but they live at home with their step-father still and seem to dread his coming home from a trip the way high-schoolers do.
Also, while I understand that this was Jace's story, I do still wish I could have been in Cam's head at least while he was gone for those few days.
Overall, an interesting and beautifully-handled exploration of a sensitive topic. 3.5 stars rounded up for being free.
July 18, 2012
Nice prologue to any possible future stories.
The story was heavy with description and did a good job of portraying Jace's emotional state. I prefer stories with more dialogue and this fic didn't have much dialogue so I couldn't get into the story or characters that much.
I loved the last few lines at the end of the story. They were perfect.
"It's you and me," Cam says, "we'll figure it out."
"Okay."
"Okay."
The story was heavy with description and did a good job of portraying Jace's emotional state. I prefer stories with more dialogue and this fic didn't have much dialogue so I couldn't get into the story or characters that much.
I loved the last few lines at the end of the story. They were perfect.
"It's you and me," Cam says, "we'll figure it out."
"Okay."
"Okay."
July 8, 2012
They maybe twins but I didn't fell any special chemistry between them, more like(not even best-) friends.
November 23, 2012
Wasn't entirely convinced by the change of heart. Needed more development.
November 17, 2012
Between You And Me is a free story written for the Love Is Always Write event on the Goodreads M/M Romance group. It’s about two twins, Cam and Jace, who grow closer than brothers and have to face up to it. There’s incest, of course, so it’s not going to be for everybody, but it’s a fairly short read that deals with the difficulties of overcoming such a taboo well.
I liked that there was awkwardness between Jace and Cam and even some anger. Getting past the incest taboo can't be as easy as some fiction writers make it seem, especially if the couple grew up together. I thought Between You And Me was a good start to a story and that it handled its subject matter well and without fetishizing it.
I don't usually complain that a story should be longer, especially when it's a freebie, but I would have liked to have seen more, especially since they will have to face many problems in the road ahead if they want to stay together. I did think the ending lines were a perfect way to end it, though. It's a nice little story that provided a good hour's entertainment. Nothing too deep or mind-blowing, but definitely a worthwhile read nonetheless.
My only real nitpick is that the video game mentioned in the story is called Mario Kart, not Mario Cart. Most people won't notice or care, but little details like that can throw a reader out of the story if they are actually knowledgable about such things. It wasn't a deal-breaker for me and it didn't influence the star rating, but as a gamer myself, I do like those details to be correct if they are mentioned.
This review was cross-posted to Infinite Love.
I liked that there was awkwardness between Jace and Cam and even some anger. Getting past the incest taboo can't be as easy as some fiction writers make it seem, especially if the couple grew up together. I thought Between You And Me was a good start to a story and that it handled its subject matter well and without fetishizing it.
I don't usually complain that a story should be longer, especially when it's a freebie, but I would have liked to have seen more, especially since they will have to face many problems in the road ahead if they want to stay together. I did think the ending lines were a perfect way to end it, though. It's a nice little story that provided a good hour's entertainment. Nothing too deep or mind-blowing, but definitely a worthwhile read nonetheless.
My only real nitpick is that the video game mentioned in the story is called Mario Kart, not Mario Cart. Most people won't notice or care, but little details like that can throw a reader out of the story if they are actually knowledgable about such things. It wasn't a deal-breaker for me and it didn't influence the star rating, but as a gamer myself, I do like those details to be correct if they are mentioned.
This review was cross-posted to Infinite Love.
July 29, 2012
This was a really interesting take on the brother/twincest thing, at least for me. I've only ever read stories where the brothers are already an established couple. But they aren't yet a couple, and one brother is completely taken by surprise by the idea. Jace's fear and confusion-both of his own feelings and of the very real possibility that he'll be rejected and lose his brother forever-were all there. I'd very much like to see where it goes from here.
January 3, 2013
I was looking for some better written twincest books and found this story on the Love is Always Write section!
It was much better written than the other stories I've read but I wanted more!!! I would love to see what happens after this story ends!!
Well done with making the story and the pace of it believeable! That's the one thing that's been lacking with the twincest stories I've been reading so far!
It was much better written than the other stories I've read but I wanted more!!! I would love to see what happens after this story ends!!
Well done with making the story and the pace of it believeable! That's the one thing that's been lacking with the twincest stories I've been reading so far!
March 29, 2013
Not quite sure what to think about this. The connection between the brothers seemed off. It was implied (or at least the way that I read it) that the brothers had a close relationship. Then all of a sudden, one is being more distant. The other brother seems not to notice. If they were so close, wouldn't that have been addressed? Maybe not but it seemed off to me. Then all of a sudden, twin who is straight is suddenly ok with trying it? Not my favorite.
May 14, 2014
And here i was so engrossed ,finally connecting and reaching for the moment .....thinking they finally gonna have their moment and then THE END!!!!!!!
I want more of them! This story has so much potential!
The low rating just because i want more....i enjoyed them a lot!
I want more of them! This story has so much potential!
The low rating just because i want more....i enjoyed them a lot!
January 1, 2013
This story captured some pretty clear and serious emotions. It was short and to the point. Though it concerns thoughts of incest, they don't do more than touching and kissing in this story. It's more about one twin's internal struggle of how to deal with the taboo of lusting for his sibling, and the other's struggle of how to react to his twin's lust when he is straight. Good read.
February 3, 2013
3.5 stars. This story was short, but well done. I didn't really have an issue with the subject matter but it was definitely a shorter 'slice of life' sort of piece as opposed to having much of an arc or plot line. It was interesting.
May 28, 2015
Not quite sure how to review this one. The genre is not something I'd usually go for. The premise is what causes me to pause. If Cam and Jace were friends, roommates or acquaintances it wouldn't be an issue. The writing style is a bit unique but nicely executed.
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September 30, 2014
Emotional and sensitive treatment of a very controversial, angst-inducing subject. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
January 16, 2013
A taboo topic that most writer's would shy away from if they aren't appealing to a specific audience. I liked the style and the pace of this. It leaves me wondering where things go from here.
February 1, 2013
Hands down one of the best taboo short stories I've ever read.
September 6, 2013
Aching with a side of anticipation. Quite emotional and thoughtful exploration as Jace and Cam's brotherly love is expanded.
March 15, 2013
Twincest story. Well done but very short. Teaser length. Would like to see how this develops
December 21, 2019
I don’t understand the bad reviews/ratings for this! This was a sweet, INTENSE ride of incestuous goodness. I was surprised by it. I love the descriptions and how Jace’s mind works. I wanted more steaminess by the end but this is a good slowburning teaser. Would like more of these two!
July 23, 2017
Too short! I want to know more.
December 31, 2022
The dynamics were odd between the two brothers. I did not feel the chemistry between them and it might be because of the third person POV narrative.
February 4, 2016
I really enjoyed Between you and Me, since let's face it - it's extremely well written. The flow is amazing and the thoughtfulness of it all is something you can practically touch. I'm just sad it's not longer, since Mar could pull it easily. Now the story felt a little axed, but otherwise it was good. I just longed for more yearning and inner turmoil for the sole reason that it would've fitted this perfectly.
I liked both the brothers a lot and their relationship felt real and even credible. The plot is interesting in its minimalism, but like that it's awfully fitting. I really feel the need to get this as a longer version and i know I would love it. It's hard to pull twincest well and Mar surely did that. I admit that I wanted more action at the end, but even like this the whole thing was cute and depressing at the same time - odd but wonderful combination. The writing is surely the best part though and it's something many M/M stories lack. Same with the credibility, really. Points for those surely.
I liked both the brothers a lot and their relationship felt real and even credible. The plot is interesting in its minimalism, but like that it's awfully fitting. I really feel the need to get this as a longer version and i know I would love it. It's hard to pull twincest well and Mar surely did that. I admit that I wanted more action at the end, but even like this the whole thing was cute and depressing at the same time - odd but wonderful combination. The writing is surely the best part though and it's something many M/M stories lack. Same with the credibility, really. Points for those surely.
May 23, 2014
Okay so I'm not really into incest stories but I do see the appeal between twins, it just doesn't do anything for me personally. However, I thought I would try this story since it's in the Love Is Write anthology and I have never read this author before and I'm glad I did. I think the author did it really well and since there was no real sex between the twins, just the promise of it, it didn't squick me out and I found it very charmingly written.
May 29, 2015
Cam and jace are twins they have friends over and they start playing football. While cam is straight jace is gay. Jace starts having feeling for cam, I think they havent lived together in a while so im guessing he start thinking cam not as his brother. It was sweet also abit of sadness their not sure what the future hold for both of them but hope things work out. Not much goes on but stil good enough read.
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July 18, 2012
Offered FREE from the M/M Romance Group, Love Is Always Write: Volume One.
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