Oh dear, Mr Hoffman. Where do I even begin.
Yes, I admit it. Seduced by the sexy cover, awesome title and exciting plot snippets, I fell for this novel's hype hook line and sinker. And wasn't I a sucker.
The novel's main strength is that the narrator is witty and engaging, of the kind prone to diverting tangents which flesh out the world and plot. The novel's main weakness is.. well... mostly everything else.
Hoffman's fantasy world - does it even have the right to be called that? - is a hideous mish-mash of genuine fact and history with simplistic, poorly realised fantasy vaguely sketched from Hoffman's own mind.
Don't get me wrong; it's apparent what he's trying to do - create a sort of alternative reality to the European Renaissance. Which should be really cool and exciting. Yet 'real world' things are interspersed seemingly at random, and are not integrated convincingly in any way. Occasionally, jarringly, they are used in ways which bear no resemblance to reality at all. 'Norwegians' suddenly come from a place which quite patently isn't Norway, and display no Scandinavian characteristics - so why the bloody hell are they called Norwegians? Was Hoffman using an atlas as a fantasy name generator?
Unaltered name-drops of famous philosophers and scientists come thick and fast, so when the Hanged Redeemer is blatantly Jesus, it is hard to understand why Hoffman bothers to pretend this aspect is original. Time periods are conflated, with groups of mobsters wearing Victorian dress and use Victorian slang in a world not yet on the cusp of industrial revolution. Hoffman can't seem to make up his mind if this is an alternate history, a pure fantasy, or something else entirely, because his blend between the two is messy and confusing.
This brings us to the crux of the problem: it is actually Hoffman's own imagination, so unsubtly swept under this carpet of semi-factual detail, which is sorely lacking. The elements actually of his own creation are so poorly executed and oversimplified that the entire novel becomes utterly unbelievable. The Materazzi supposedly run the 'world's largest empire', and yet we given the names of only two officials, and are left with no sense of governance, of territories, of borders, of its people, or of what it actually consists of outside of Memphis at all, apart from its bloody name. Likewise, the Redeemers control vast territories and conduct war on a continental scale, and yet we are given only the bare bones of description with which to imagine this mass and multitude. It is a world so simplistic, that Thomas Cale, a fourteen year old boy, draws up the complete battle plans for both vast armies...by himself.
Sorry Hoffman, but the world is more complicated than that. If you want us to believe in your story, you're actually going to have to put some effort into creating it first.
And so now we come to the plot. Lel. *General Spoilers*
The beginning of the book, admittedly, has plot: the dramatic escape from the monastery. Yet after that the characters wander around entirely at a loose end. They've escaped. They're safe. So now what? Thus follows an entire two month period during which, for want of anything else to do, Thomas and IdrisPukke (wtf sort of name is 'IdrisPukke'?) are essentially on holiday in a forest (why are they in a forest?), desperately waiting for plot to happen. At last, out of nowhere - Arabel is kidnapped! Hooray! She took her damn time. Finally, Thomas and Puke-boy can launch from their stupor and go to Do Things.
Once Arabel is rescued, this is followed by another two hundred pages of nothing happening (padded out by diverting scenes of burgeoning romance, and Kleist firing crossbows for no reason) until we are starting to wonder if there is any point at all to the novel. And then out of nowhere, the Redeemers attack! Thank god, did they have to take so long? Now things happen again. To be exact, all of the Materazzi die. Yes, all of them. ALL of the soldiers of the ENTIRE EMPIRE, die in one SINGLE battle... because they got squashed in a glorified mud puddle.
One wonders, shite as these soldiers clearly are, how they won the world's largest empire in the first place. The answer is: sorry, there is no explanation - it's just another plot fail that Hoffman is hoping we won't notice.
This is not a plot. This is a random series of events which Hoffman wishes to happen, strung together using the vaguest of excuses.
And why does Hoffman want these events to happen? Why, character development, of course. Hoffman is almost peeing himself trying to prove that Thomas a scary, yet compelling Anti Hero who will 'destroy the world'. And since Thomas is instead a rather annoying, lack lustre and horny teenager, Hoffman needs all the help of Big Plot Things he can get.
And so, inch by inch, Thomas is propelled down the road to darkness. Oh...scary! Clarification: he scowls at a few people, and shags Arbel a lot. Oooh...less scary. Thomas kills people without remorse. Oooh scary! Clarification: people who he was forced to kill in in self defence. Ooooh...less scary. Thomas loudly claims that he saved Riba 'Because Reasons', because anything else would shatter the illusion that he has no conscience. Occasionally, sinister lines of dialogue are popped into Thomas' otherwise normal (if slightly sulky) speech, incase we were forgetting that he is The Antichrist (we were). For example:
'Where have you come from?'
'From hell, to come in the night and eat you' replies Thomas....to a toddler. Just... what?
The book also fails to provide any explanation for why he is so deadly in combat other than the possibility that he may be Teh Chosen One, and yet the existence of higher power is not established by the author. Thomas spins some weird story about hitting his head and it giving him magical powers, but I'm pretty sure that was meant to be a lie, because it was stupid. Please god, let it be a lie. Even blindly accepting his skill Because Reasons is better than that.
As for other characters: as though Hoffman has walked straight out of the century the novel (probably? maybe?) is set in, all the women who make an appearance in this book (there are approximately five) are both described and defined in terms of their physical attractiveness. This is exhausting and infuriating. By the end of the novel, I felt that if I had to read the description 'beautiful' or objectifying epitaph 'swan neck' one more time, I might set the book on fire.
Hoffman is henceforth confined to the (tragically long) list of male fantasy authors who haven't got the faintest clue how to write women without resorting to the bland stereotypes normally resorted to by Victorian bigots and sexually frustrated thirteen year olds. Le sigh.
It gets worse: the two female characters of any consequence are both confined to plot devices.
Riba is invented to give Thomas an excuse for leaving the monastery, then floats around the rest of the novel, occasionally popping up for no reason as a serving maid, as if to prove she's still a person. Arbel - oh, Arbel. At first the token love interest, quite randomly and conveniently kidnapped in order to give Thomas' story a Reason For Existing, she actually develops into someone quite interesting. But then she is forced to betray him, and her ultimate plot device purpose becomes clear - she is the culminating factor in Thomas' list of Reasons To Be Evil!
Oooh! Scary!
If it wasn't a totally shite reason, that is.
It just isn't convincing that Thomas would hate her so much for her decision. What was she supposed to do, let everyone die to save Thomas, who couldn't actually be saved anyway because he was already kidnapped? The rescues of Riba and Conn have already proved that saving people is a banner Thomas can get behind, so it's not like he's an utterly selfish bastard.
And yet because his first girlfriend is forced (AT SWORDPOINT) to betray him (OR CONDEMN HUNDREDS TO DEATH) he decides to spurn her forever. Oh yeah, and to kill the entire world. No, I'm not kidding. He agrees to kill the entire world.
I'm sorry, but it's pathetic. Some boys just really can't handle rejection, huh? Well, Thomas needs to grow the hell up.
I really, really, tried to like this book, because I can see its potential. But the messy writing and scrappy dialogue needs serious work. And even before that, Hoffman needs to go away and think very, very hard about coming up with detail for the plot, and an actual world to put it in. And a main character who is actually convincing in the role he's been cast as. Then, and only then, should Hoffman think about putting pen to paper.
In the meantime, this novel should be burnt.