[Update: I changed my rating from 3 stars to 4 stars; I've recommended this book to several people, and although it isn't perfect, it's a book I'm very glad I read.]
I was so sure I'd like this book; the subject matter is right up my alley, it has gotten good reviews from others, people I respect.
And I did enjoy it; the subject matter is, indeed, right up my alley, and this book describes the horrors of war and its aftermath for soldiers in a shocking but completely believable way.
Jennifer Percy writes of a lost young man, unlucky in love, Caleb Daniels, who finds his identity in the Marines, Special Ops; contrary to what we learn about his early life and his lousy-excuse-for-a-father's negative assessments of everything he does, Caleb has what it takes to complete the brutal levels of abuse (i.e., training) to become a part of Special Ops. Jennifer Percy spends a great deal of time with Caleb after his return from Afghanistan; Caleb, traumatized by the war, sees his dead buddies everywhere, becomes convinced that demons are stalking him, and eventually receives "deliverance" from a minister, the minister's extended family, and a cadre of followers who have also been "delivered."
The story itself really is fascinating, and I don't think the images or the gut-wrenching perspective of soldiers will leave me any time soon, but I'm sorry to say I just do not think this book is very well written.
It started, for me, on page 8 (the story begins on page 7, so it didn't bode well). It's a long paragraph telling about how Caleb met Allyson when they were 16; one day Caleb promises to get her out of town, and one day (same paragraph) they are sitting on a tractor in the bean field and "Allyson told Caleb that while he'd been gone she'd starting seeing a classmate." Wait . . . gone?? Huh?? I re-read the paragraph a few times. In love . . . he's going to rescue her . . . while he was gone she'd been seeing someone. OK, so in the next paragraph it sort of circles back and tells us that Caleb left and worked "through harvest season into winter." I know that really good writers can pull this sort of thing off, but in good writing it's done in such a way that I'm not scratching my head wondering what's going on.
I mention that example, because it seemed to happen a lot in this book. Percy seems to enjoy being elliptical, as though that somehow translates to profundity, whereas I found it annoying. Only ten pages later, there's an account that mentions Caleb, and then goes into a long description of "an E-2, a low-ranking guy, just got in the army, hadn't been int he army even a year." Keeps talking about this "kid," and four paragraphs later you figure out that yes, it's Caleb. It just seemed like a tricky substitute for good writing.
Even when the writing is clear, it's painfully clear and declarative, with details that, again, to me, seem to yell: "Hey! This is profound!"
"She introduces herself as Pam. She's forty years old and she's 'the adopted child.' Pam followed the minister's family to Georgia from their previous home in upstate New York. She lives in Portal now. Her body spills from the chair. I hear her breathe. Some of her hair is curly and some straight. She kills ants with her feet." That evokes absolutely nothing in me except irritation. I am curled on my couch. I feel annoyed. My hair is brown. I wipe my nose.
Or: "The minister has four children and fourteen grandchildren. They all live in Portal. His oldest child lives a dirt road away. It's a Saturday, and by late afternoon all fifteen grandkids [wait -- am I missing something here again? is this something profound? is there a catch? is it just a typo?], ranging from two months to nine years, are in the yard. . . . One pisses on the ground, facing me, as close as possible without hitting my feet. Another picks ants out of the portable swimming pool and eats them. A redheaded nine-year-old named Amaryllis comes up to me and opens her mouth. I feed her."
You feed her. What do you feed her? Do you just happen to have chicken feed in your pocket? Does she really just walk over and open her mouth really wide? Why don't you examine her teeth?
Final example: maybe someone can explain this one to me: "She drags me to the fridge, away from the others, and gets really close to my face. It's covered in a thin patter of cream." So cream is tapping on the refrigerator? the other lady's face? Percy's face? I'd assume by the sentence structure that Percy's face is covered in a thin patter of cream, but what the heck? What is a "patter" of cream, and what is "it"? I'm the English teacher with a red pen: "Unclear."
So . . . I'm not sure who I'd recommend this book to. If you want good writing, try Salvation on Sand Mountain, written by a New Yorker author, about a similar foray into a zealously religious community and the deep effect it has on the writer.
If you are interested in the effects of war on the psyche and spirit, this is probably a great book to read; just don't expect stellar writing.
And, for the record, I think demons are probably as reasonable an explanation as PTSD, hysteria, shell-shock, or any other description of the trauma soldiers undergo in war. This book describes spiritual devastation and genuine attempts to exorcise that blackness from people's lives. Who really knows? Perhaps there are demons of war, and untold victims of those horrible entities.