I understand that fantasy books like to engage in a quest and that there is some leeway in how much time it would realistically take to get to one place from another. But early in the novel, there was one sequence that didn’t make sense to me. Lyana witnesses another character being killed. This character’s death was apparently the only thing delaying the attack on the city and Lyana was suppose to have left earlier to reach the city in time. She doesn’t. She waits until this character dies and Lyana is then chased down by three enemies. These enemies keep up with her, but she’s somehow able to out maneuver them long enough to find a cave. She shifts from dragon to human form. The enemy is stupid enough to lose their advantage in their phoenix form and they shift to human form too. She fights them one at a time and wins. She then finds her brother, Elethor, and warns him of the attack. They STILL make it to the city just as the attacks begin.
My question is this: What were the hundreds of villains doing during this ordeal that didn’t follow Lyana? Playing Tetris? They had ample time to reach and destroy the city before either Elethor or Lyana showed up.
Much of my dislike for this novel comes from my disappointment in the characters. Despite the difference of histories, the characters begin the book like a herd of “Bella”s (depressed and mopey) – except our villain, Solina. It felt like the plot dictated the personalities of the characters, while normally, the characters’ personalities would manipulate the plot.
For example, Elethor begins the novel as a lovesick artist, who spends his entire life obsessing over his lost love. His lost love happens to be Solina, who will kill half his family by chapter three. The moment he sees Solina again, he forgets that Solina had a very good reason for killing his family, and rejects her without hesitation. Throughout the course of the novel, he insists that he’s torn over her, but his actions are 100% against her. He never falters from this decision to side with his family, not even once.
Mori is probably my least favorite character. Her entire personality is “victim”. She’s raped in the first chapter and throughout the rest of the novel, she acts like its both her fault and she’s incapable of defending herself. Except for this one scene with Bayrin, where she drops this victim act to outshine him in battle and then offer some funny one-liners after they almost die. There’s not one shred of evidence that either character has a sense of humor besides this one scene. Also, she does “suddenly” fall in love with Bayrin and all it takes is him saying that he won’t let some guy rape her again. Geez, high standards, right? I’m hoping that EVERY guy would do their damndest not to let some woman be raped, even if he doesn’t like her.
I do like Solina. I feel that she is justified in her actions against this dragon kingdom, although she may have gone overboard. I don’t like how she has to small talk every time she catches up with one of the good guys. Bad people don’t start a conversation with “Hey, how have you been? I heard your Dad died, well, cause I killed him.” Not only is Solina insistent on spilling out her life story at every opportunity, but her minions are determined to use every one liner possible while fighting our good guys. You don’t sneak up on someone and make a joke. That’s a Disney only move.
And the end. I think the author went overboard in proving how evil she was. Every time she’s mentioned, another kid gets chopped in half. Seriously? Why are these kids frolicking around in the middle of battle? There’s no mention of adults being killed, so these kids must have been on their own. Why were our “heroes” so delinquent in protecting these children OVER and OVER again?
And the very end. Thanks, Elethor, for single handedly causing a sequel. (F+)
(I won a copy of this book in a Goodreads giveaway.)