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Pack Law
Poor Ava has no idea that while working one night she would get caught up in a war between two rival Werewolf Packs. The alpha of the Black Mountain Pack, Tristan wants to keep order and peace among his kind and keep the humans unaware of their presence. The alpha of the Appalachian Pack, Michael wants to expose the werewolves to the human population and use the humans for his own personal gain breaking pack law.
Adult material: 18+ older for mature audiences
Adult material: 18+ older for mature audiences
- GenresParanormal
54 pages, ebook
First published August 6, 2012
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About the author
Marie Stephens
18 books31 followersI write urban fantasybooks. I am a Registered Respiratory Therapist by day and a writer by night. I have found my passion fo writing and it takes the forefront on my life. I have created characters that anyone can releate with. I want people to see what I see in each of my characters. I just hope they bring you as much joy as they have brought me.
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August 20, 2013
This is the first time I am very unhappy to rate a book a one star. I probably shouldn't--the author put this story out there for people to review--therefore, she sort of has to stand up to what is going to come of it.
Yes, I saw some good reviews for this book. I was inclined to believe that they dismissed the really terrible grammar, spelling errors, and poor plot developments, and just thought about what the story could be.
I could have done that.
The story had a form of potential.
Right now I felt like it was a first draft that the author had put out for all of us to beta read. Or I felt like we all got ARC copies in the Paranormal group. Then I realized I had gotten this off smashwords so it was in fact a published version of this story.
I have to say that if I properly wrote this review, it would be attached with a fully critiqued copy of the book in an email after it. As I was reading I was literally rewriting the stilted dialogue. I was slashing out whole sentences that literally mirrored the sentence before it that just made it all seem that much more juvenile. This story has potential. HUGE even. It needs an editor and a proofreader really really bad!
It could also benefit from being beta read and or critiqued before it goes to an editor. The plot flow was jarring. It didn't flow and it shoved you into one scene then the other, than back again. The characters had no dimensional value, so it was very hard to connect with any of them.
I honestly contemplated not rating this book. It was just NOT READY to be published. However, the author put the book up for reviews and it is officially published, therefore it needs the rating. I feel bad because the story didn't make me angry, I was just hurting while I read it. Each sentence I cringed and wondering WHY? Yes, just why?
I suggest pulling the version available now, grabbing up a few beta readers that will help with plot flow, some sentence structure, and solidifying the story line. The story is there, the idea is hovering, but it got lost in a sea of amateurish mistakes.
*I received a copy of this book via Lovers of Paranormal romance on behalf of the author in exchange for an honest review**
Yes, I saw some good reviews for this book. I was inclined to believe that they dismissed the really terrible grammar, spelling errors, and poor plot developments, and just thought about what the story could be.
I could have done that.
The story had a form of potential.
Right now I felt like it was a first draft that the author had put out for all of us to beta read. Or I felt like we all got ARC copies in the Paranormal group. Then I realized I had gotten this off smashwords so it was in fact a published version of this story.
I have to say that if I properly wrote this review, it would be attached with a fully critiqued copy of the book in an email after it. As I was reading I was literally rewriting the stilted dialogue. I was slashing out whole sentences that literally mirrored the sentence before it that just made it all seem that much more juvenile. This story has potential. HUGE even. It needs an editor and a proofreader really really bad!
It could also benefit from being beta read and or critiqued before it goes to an editor. The plot flow was jarring. It didn't flow and it shoved you into one scene then the other, than back again. The characters had no dimensional value, so it was very hard to connect with any of them.
I honestly contemplated not rating this book. It was just NOT READY to be published. However, the author put the book up for reviews and it is officially published, therefore it needs the rating. I feel bad because the story didn't make me angry, I was just hurting while I read it. Each sentence I cringed and wondering WHY? Yes, just why?
I suggest pulling the version available now, grabbing up a few beta readers that will help with plot flow, some sentence structure, and solidifying the story line. The story is there, the idea is hovering, but it got lost in a sea of amateurish mistakes.
*I received a copy of this book via Lovers of Paranormal romance on behalf of the author in exchange for an honest review**
March 6, 2013
These are two books that I was given by the author Marie Stephens. I will also be doing an interview with her, so keep an eye out! I would recommend the audience for these books to be adult.
The first book, Pack Law had a good story line. A woman working at a hospital is kidnapped one night while tending to a man with a gun shot wound. Her whole world changes after a sexual encounter that marks her as his mate. She soon comes to find out what the man really is and discovers a whole ‘pack’ of them.
The writing style was different but the story was good. I would put this book under the genre of “erotic paranormal”. I don’t typically read ‘romance/erotic’ books, but I did like the story line. This book opened up the tale for the next book “Pack Law-The Awakening”.
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The first book, Pack Law had a good story line. A woman working at a hospital is kidnapped one night while tending to a man with a gun shot wound. Her whole world changes after a sexual encounter that marks her as his mate. She soon comes to find out what the man really is and discovers a whole ‘pack’ of them.
The writing style was different but the story was good. I would put this book under the genre of “erotic paranormal”. I don’t typically read ‘romance/erotic’ books, but I did like the story line. This book opened up the tale for the next book “Pack Law-The Awakening”.
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August 3, 2013
The storyline could be interesting if the author go back and edit this book. The POVs are all over the place, there are grammatical errors and the story is not consistent.
This is a short story about 55 kindle pages and then about 10 pages of the next story. Even for a short story it is not believable. The characters had no depth and I think if the author goes back and add more to the pack history, the characters and give the relationship between Ava and Tristan about 10 more pages (of believable dialogue) it would be a bit better. Even the sex scenes need work. I found them boring. There are plenty of things to hint at a great story yet none of them are developed.
This, for me, read like a rough draft.
I was given this story in exchange of an honest review. (Lovers of Paranormal R2R program)
This is a short story about 55 kindle pages and then about 10 pages of the next story. Even for a short story it is not believable. The characters had no depth and I think if the author goes back and add more to the pack history, the characters and give the relationship between Ava and Tristan about 10 more pages (of believable dialogue) it would be a bit better. Even the sex scenes need work. I found them boring. There are plenty of things to hint at a great story yet none of them are developed.
This, for me, read like a rough draft.
I was given this story in exchange of an honest review. (Lovers of Paranormal R2R program)
February 20, 2013
Ava saves Tristan's life after he kidnapped her from the hospital.
Her whole world changed after a sexual encounter that marked her as his mate.
She do not know what to do, but she better think fast?
Because someone is after her the alpha.
Nice read...
Her whole world changed after a sexual encounter that marked her as his mate.
She do not know what to do, but she better think fast?
Because someone is after her the alpha.
Nice read...
August 14, 2013
**I received this book in exchange for an honest review, Lovers of Paranormal.**
This book was a potentially great idea and a great concept but it was marred by so many grammatical errors and more importantly POV errors, that just could not enjoy it as I should have.
There is something to be said when in the first sentence of an entire book, there is a word missing...I mean it's really hard to overlook that big of an error. So that was my first impression of the book.
In regards to the story line...I mean it had the potential to be great...the idea was exciting, the heat could have been great...but then Stephens felt the need to rush everything. So it felt like it should have been a 300 page book but it was sliced and diced to become a shorter story...but it was cut in all the wrong places, there felt like so many details that were missing, it effected the connection between the characters and effected the flow.
My biggest concern however is the switching of the P.O.V.s. Sometimes from one sentence to the next we would switch from one P.O.V. to another all within the same paragraph. Or Stephens would switch tenses and it was the MOST confusing P.O.V.s that I've EVER encountered, and that was why I dropped the rating down like I did...it was just too much of a mess to even explain. Unfortunately I wasn't an English major or a grammar guru, so I don't know the exact wording for this issue, but trust me, it was an issue.
I left it at a 2 rating because I kind of like where it could have gone, it really could have been a great book....so for it's potential, it hovers between a 2 and a 2.5.
This book was a potentially great idea and a great concept but it was marred by so many grammatical errors and more importantly POV errors, that just could not enjoy it as I should have.
There is something to be said when in the first sentence of an entire book, there is a word missing...I mean it's really hard to overlook that big of an error. So that was my first impression of the book.
In regards to the story line...I mean it had the potential to be great...the idea was exciting, the heat could have been great...but then Stephens felt the need to rush everything. So it felt like it should have been a 300 page book but it was sliced and diced to become a shorter story...but it was cut in all the wrong places, there felt like so many details that were missing, it effected the connection between the characters and effected the flow.
My biggest concern however is the switching of the P.O.V.s. Sometimes from one sentence to the next we would switch from one P.O.V. to another all within the same paragraph. Or Stephens would switch tenses and it was the MOST confusing P.O.V.s that I've EVER encountered, and that was why I dropped the rating down like I did...it was just too much of a mess to even explain. Unfortunately I wasn't an English major or a grammar guru, so I don't know the exact wording for this issue, but trust me, it was an issue.
I left it at a 2 rating because I kind of like where it could have gone, it really could have been a great book....so for it's potential, it hovers between a 2 and a 2.5.
August 16, 2013
I received this book for review from the author and the Lovers of Paranomal (a GoodReads group). I was not compensated nor was I required to write a positive review. The opinions I have expressed are my own.
This is told in the first person but it’s like Ava is speaking directly to the reader.
This story revolves around the full moon and what happens in the emergency room. As the caretaker of a parent, I can truly attest to what goes on in the emergency room at that time of month – it’s also true in a nursing home.
Ava Lingham is the Respitory Therapist at the hospital. Tristan was brought into the ER not quite feeling like himself. And the action begins right from the first chapter. There’s an escape that’s involved. Ava also gets to meet Zane and Christian. Then things get really interesting from there. I had no choice but to continue reading until I got to the end and then I wished it would continue.
If you want to know what happens with Ava, Tristan, Zane and Christian you will just have to get the book. It is a quick read that you could get done in just a matter of hours. The books is very sexy – what do you expect with all that man material on the pages. It will also have you looking forward to the next book Pack Law: The Awakening that came out this past December.
This is told in the first person but it’s like Ava is speaking directly to the reader.
This story revolves around the full moon and what happens in the emergency room. As the caretaker of a parent, I can truly attest to what goes on in the emergency room at that time of month – it’s also true in a nursing home.
Ava Lingham is the Respitory Therapist at the hospital. Tristan was brought into the ER not quite feeling like himself. And the action begins right from the first chapter. There’s an escape that’s involved. Ava also gets to meet Zane and Christian. Then things get really interesting from there. I had no choice but to continue reading until I got to the end and then I wished it would continue.
If you want to know what happens with Ava, Tristan, Zane and Christian you will just have to get the book. It is a quick read that you could get done in just a matter of hours. The books is very sexy – what do you expect with all that man material on the pages. It will also have you looking forward to the next book Pack Law: The Awakening that came out this past December.
September 24, 2013
I was given this book in exchange for an honest review Lovers of Paranormal.
It was a pretty easy read. I read it in a couple hours, the story lined flowed OK just seem a bit rushed.
I’m assuming that the errors has been fixed. (smiles) I’m not a fan of POV, the slipping from character to character gave be a lil pause. For the most part it was a decent story.
If the story would have been longer you could have seen a great love affair between Tristan and Ava, not enough time to really get into them.
Wolves using guns?? oh but the ghost I really liked. As wolf story goes, there are ones that want a change, ones that want to break tradition. We all know rules are set in place for a reason. Is Michael up to the task of being Alpha or has he bit off more than he can chew. The very first sex scene was pretty warm, I was looking for more. The mating ritual and how to turn a wolf.. wanted more. Don’t take this as a negative please, its a decent quick read. I cant wait to read the second one. Enjoy.
It was a pretty easy read. I read it in a couple hours, the story lined flowed OK just seem a bit rushed.
I’m assuming that the errors has been fixed. (smiles) I’m not a fan of POV, the slipping from character to character gave be a lil pause. For the most part it was a decent story.
If the story would have been longer you could have seen a great love affair between Tristan and Ava, not enough time to really get into them.
Wolves using guns?? oh but the ghost I really liked. As wolf story goes, there are ones that want a change, ones that want to break tradition. We all know rules are set in place for a reason. Is Michael up to the task of being Alpha or has he bit off more than he can chew. The very first sex scene was pretty warm, I was looking for more. The mating ritual and how to turn a wolf.. wanted more. Don’t take this as a negative please, its a decent quick read. I cant wait to read the second one. Enjoy.
August 9, 2013
I was given this book in exchange for an honest review Lovers of Paranormal.
Pack Law is your garden variety woman-meets-shapeshifter novel. The premise was great, and it got rolling quite quickly (only 35 pages long!). I did find the story to echo so many other paranormal romances ive read recently (notably some J.R. Ward?) but I enjoyed the basic story Stephens tried to develop. The characters were obviously shallow with so little time to develop them, but she still managed to get them into two dimensions, although I found Ava changed her mind about our "hero" very VERY suddenly (like a line separates the decision and its very arbitrary).
I would have enjoyed the story more with more fleshing out, and perhaps more editing. I had a hard time reading this just because it needed some serious editing. I do feel that with time Stephens could have something legitimately publishable with some editing and depth. A great start to a fantastic novel with some hammering and tweaking.
Pack Law is your garden variety woman-meets-shapeshifter novel. The premise was great, and it got rolling quite quickly (only 35 pages long!). I did find the story to echo so many other paranormal romances ive read recently (notably some J.R. Ward?) but I enjoyed the basic story Stephens tried to develop. The characters were obviously shallow with so little time to develop them, but she still managed to get them into two dimensions, although I found Ava changed her mind about our "hero" very VERY suddenly (like a line separates the decision and its very arbitrary).
I would have enjoyed the story more with more fleshing out, and perhaps more editing. I had a hard time reading this just because it needed some serious editing. I do feel that with time Stephens could have something legitimately publishable with some editing and depth. A great start to a fantastic novel with some hammering and tweaking.
August 12, 2013
2.5 stars
I was given a copy of this book for an honest review (LoP).
I'm not going to write a synopsis, as there are plenty of those written already, and there's not a whole lot of book to summarise. This was a quick read. The actual story line was okay. Nothing very original, but not too bad, and it had a nice cover. The execution however, was quite poor. There were frequent typos, grammatical errors, changes in tense and POV, and a lack of punctuation, which made it extremely frustrating to read. There were also many things that just didn't make sense and/or were totally superfluous and the writing was simple and disorganised.
I really wanted to like this, and I hate to post negative sounding reviews, but I struggled to find many positives. I really only finished it so that I could write an honest review.
I was given a copy of this book for an honest review (LoP).
I'm not going to write a synopsis, as there are plenty of those written already, and there's not a whole lot of book to summarise. This was a quick read. The actual story line was okay. Nothing very original, but not too bad, and it had a nice cover. The execution however, was quite poor. There were frequent typos, grammatical errors, changes in tense and POV, and a lack of punctuation, which made it extremely frustrating to read. There were also many things that just didn't make sense and/or were totally superfluous and the writing was simple and disorganised.
I really wanted to like this, and I hate to post negative sounding reviews, but I struggled to find many positives. I really only finished it so that I could write an honest review.
August 6, 2013
I really wanted to love this book, because I have such a huge love affair with wolves. Well I just liked it this book, because it was just ok. I think I would have liked it better if the author would have explained more things in the book, so it wouldn’t feel so rushed. It felt like everything was going so fast and there wasn’t any nice flow to it. I just moved from one thing to another; it felt very sudden. The interaction with the characters could be have been written better and been clearer because at time I had to reread to understand who was actually saying what. I think if the author goes back and edits a little and maybe explains more into the scenes going on it would flow better and make the story more enjoyable. I saw great potential in this story; there are great scenes that proved that. I did, after all read the whole book so that why gave this book three stars.
August 10, 2013
*I received a copy of this book for free from LOP in exchange for my honest review*
From the beginning I was completely entranced by this fast pace love story. Ava who is a respiratory therapist at a local ER, gets kidnapped by the very man she is trying to save. Tristan is a werewolf who has been shot with silver coated bullets, and is in a race for his life. So Tristan carries Ava out with him to travel back to the pack's home, to remove the bullets out of his body so that he can heal. During her meeting and short stay with Tristan, she finds herself drawn to him and wanting him. All I can say is that this story was so freaking hot, I had to wipe the drool off my chin. The only thing I wish is that I could've had a more in-depth with the characters, so I could understand them better. All in all this book rocked, I absolutely loved it!
From the beginning I was completely entranced by this fast pace love story. Ava who is a respiratory therapist at a local ER, gets kidnapped by the very man she is trying to save. Tristan is a werewolf who has been shot with silver coated bullets, and is in a race for his life. So Tristan carries Ava out with him to travel back to the pack's home, to remove the bullets out of his body so that he can heal. During her meeting and short stay with Tristan, she finds herself drawn to him and wanting him. All I can say is that this story was so freaking hot, I had to wipe the drool off my chin. The only thing I wish is that I could've had a more in-depth with the characters, so I could understand them better. All in all this book rocked, I absolutely loved it!
This entire review has been hidden because of spoilers.
August 16, 2013
I requested Pack Law for read and review because I felt the synopsis has such potential and it definitely pushed my oh-boy let's read this one button. Unfortunately, as much as I wanted to like this book, it just fell short. The storyline has great potential, but the execution is just poorly done. I feel this read definitely needs to go back to the drawing board and editing table. I did like some of these characters and I would like to see them shine rather than just go through the motions of a poorly done formula read. I requested this book for read and review from the author and received it with a request for my honest review without any compensation whatsoever, other than the joy of reading a new book
August 4, 2013
I received this book in exchange for an honest review (LoP or Lovers of Paranormal)
Ok, where to begin. The beginning of this short story was promising then it just went downhill from there. Story line had potential and characters were intriguing. Due to major editing issues, and not knowing who was talking, and the switch from perspective was awful. By the middle of the book I was ready for it to end. I am a huge supporter of all writers and think that it takes such talent and creativity to write. I think the author started with a great story line but fell flat when putting it all together. I would definitely go back and work on editing and perspective before taking people's money for this.
Ok, where to begin. The beginning of this short story was promising then it just went downhill from there. Story line had potential and characters were intriguing. Due to major editing issues, and not knowing who was talking, and the switch from perspective was awful. By the middle of the book I was ready for it to end. I am a huge supporter of all writers and think that it takes such talent and creativity to write. I think the author started with a great story line but fell flat when putting it all together. I would definitely go back and work on editing and perspective before taking people's money for this.
August 7, 2013
I really enjoyed this book. I loved Ava and her ability to stay strong even when things were horribly wrong. Tristan was a true alpha but still was able to show his feelings to Ava. I could literally feel the character of Michael, he gave me chills at times. I loved the twists in the storyline that I did not see coming. I am looking forward to reading the next book in the series. Marie Stephens has a wonderful gift for keeping you into the story. I could not stop reading until I knew what was happening with Ava and Tristan. I received this book in exchange for an honest review (LoP or Lovers of Paranormal). I am going to recommend this book to my paranormal reading friends, and maybe some who want to try something new. ;)
August 4, 2013
I received this book from The Lovers of Paranormal Group in exchange for an honest review
Stars: 2.5
Overall: Someone hit the fast forward button with this book and never stopped. I loved the plot and the characters, but i felt that the book just rushed by me and i never got a chance to really understand or figure out what was going on. One second Ava is helping Michael with some air tubes, the next she's his mate telling him that she loves him .. all after ONE NIGHT. I wish the author would've slowed this book down and gave more details for the situation. I was happy to read that Tara got her just desserts end.
Characters: Michael & Ava
Page Turner: Yes and No
Series Cont: Yes
Recommend: I'm still on the fence about that.
Stars: 2.5
Overall: Someone hit the fast forward button with this book and never stopped. I loved the plot and the characters, but i felt that the book just rushed by me and i never got a chance to really understand or figure out what was going on. One second Ava is helping Michael with some air tubes, the next she's his mate telling him that she loves him .. all after ONE NIGHT. I wish the author would've slowed this book down and gave more details for the situation. I was happy to read that Tara got her just desserts end.
Characters: Michael & Ava
Page Turner: Yes and No
Series Cont: Yes
Recommend: I'm still on the fence about that.
August 13, 2013
I received this book in exchange for an honest review, LoP.
I enjoyed this book, the story keeps you reading whenever you have a spare five minutes and makes you want another five on top. Although I enjoyed it, it always irritates me when reading this type of book where the 'damsel' meets the mystery man, has sex the next day and is mated by day number 3. I mean, it kinda makes the woman in these books either look seriously needy or darn right loose. Which is never good. The characters are good, some more than others. Even though it was a very short appearance I really liked the character of Lance :) very sweet. I would have really enjoyed slapping the character of Tara and the same for Michael. I do like a happy ending though, and this really did have one :)
I enjoyed this book, the story keeps you reading whenever you have a spare five minutes and makes you want another five on top. Although I enjoyed it, it always irritates me when reading this type of book where the 'damsel' meets the mystery man, has sex the next day and is mated by day number 3. I mean, it kinda makes the woman in these books either look seriously needy or darn right loose. Which is never good. The characters are good, some more than others. Even though it was a very short appearance I really liked the character of Lance :) very sweet. I would have really enjoyed slapping the character of Tara and the same for Michael. I do like a happy ending though, and this really did have one :)
August 9, 2013
I received a copy of this book in return for an honest review LoP. I think this has a lot of potential. It's a decent story, however, there are many mistakes both gramatical and spelling that just drove me crazy. It just needs a good editor and a little more work on the story, and it'll be so much better. I love the main character names - Tristan and Ava. I thought that the storyline needed to be tweaked a bit to show more than lust between them though. I liked that Ava had a connection to Tristan that neither of them were aware of, that part was good. Also the ending was good, as it gave you more to look forward to, others getting together and the possibilities there.
August 4, 2013
I thought it was pretty good. There were some grammer problems that made the sentences confusing. Also sometimes there were no quotation marks so I couldn't tell if the sentences were the characters thoughts or if they said them aloud. It also confused me when the author switched point of views really fast without using an indent or something to say it was someone else's thought. But over all I thought it was a good book. I hope we will have the chance to read book 2.
August 3, 2013
I was given this book in exchange for honest review (LoP). Ava was at work when The alpha of the Black Mountain Pack, Tristan and The alpha of the Appalachian Pack, Michael are at war. Michael wants to reveal that werewolves are real. Tristan wants to keep his pack safe and away from humans. I highly recommend this book!
August 10, 2013
I was given this book in exchange for an honest review for LoP
Fun and intesting to read, a lot of drama and romance with a tint of good fun in the way.
i liked the characters and the situations they're in are so funny sometimes, it was easy to read and feel the characters and the plot.
the perfect lite reading in shapeshifter themes.
Fun and intesting to read, a lot of drama and romance with a tint of good fun in the way.
i liked the characters and the situations they're in are so funny sometimes, it was easy to read and feel the characters and the plot.
the perfect lite reading in shapeshifter themes.
October 7, 2013
I was given this book in exchange for an honest review (LoP). This book is soooooooooooooo good! The describing words used in some places could have been described better and using different words. It hooks you in and you don't want to stop reading it. Hoping their is another book!! Absolutly amazing!!!
October 8, 2012
This book was truely interesting with exciting characters. I look foward to reading more.
August 16, 2013
Not a bad book. I found that the style of writing was awkward for me to read. The story line was pretty good. I would have personally liked more details on describing the scenes and characters.
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