BUNDLE OF JOY
Review
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I like the idea of the story, but the characterization is all over the place. In addition, the story feels out of place in space and time, as if the author did not quite have everything mentally solidified before writing.
Here are a just a few of the things I highlighted as I went:
--"Miss Delta homed in..."
"honed" perhaps?
--"Questions about and reactions to the little one..."
This sentence appears twice in my copy. In addition, it is quite a wordy sentence.
--"That small change haunted Jax through the rest of the evening spending time with the locals."
Ack.
--"'I wanted Mr. Right to add to my life, not to make it from me.'"
What does "make it from me" even mean? We can all venture a guess, but should the reader have to slow down to decipher a sentence?
--"Selby paused for a moment..."
The main character is Shelby?
--Shelby states that she wants to spend time with the little one because time with the baby is limited. Then she immediately dumps the baby on a babysitter for most of the day. And the reader is supposed to just take that in stride?
And on it went.
I have fairly low expectations for stories in this genre, but the characterization was all over the place, and the oddly-worded sentences cropped up with increasing frequency. So I simply stopped wanting to read more.