Spoilers
I wasn't planning on reading this since I disliked the first book.
When I saw it at the library I decided to give the author another chance (I'm nice like that) since I loved her Study trilogy so much. I also reasoned that it couldn't possibly be as bad as the first book. Thankfully, it wasn't. However, it wasn't any better either. So, I guess that's something — right?
I had a lot of issues with this… I think it's easiest if I just list them below in a disorganised and ranty way:
-The writing and dialogue didn't suit the fantasy type setting — it was too modern. The slang, speech and inner monologue took me right out of the story. For example:
'I missed a lot of cool stuff' and 'we're screwed' and 'Kill. me. now' and 'ewww' and swell and super.
With writing like that, I'm hardly going to be thinking of magic, fantasy, kings, kingdoms and swords. No, I'm going to be thinking of high school, malls and Gossip Girl. The writing should reflect the setting of the book.
-The characters called each other stupid nicknames, like: the monkeys, Mom and poppa bear. Belen aka 'poppa bear' was meant to be a strong deadly soldier but every time someone would call him 'poppa bear', I could no longer buy his role as a respected and formidable warrior. No, instead I just thought of him as a giant dumb cuddly bear. The nicknames felt completely out of place.
-Kerrick's POV was dull, he made Avry's bland narration seem almost exciting. For the majority of the book, they were separated … Usually I hate it when authors split the couple in the sequel but I didn't mind it this time around since Avry and Kerrick were even more boring together than when they were apart.
At times I felt like I was reading two different stories as Kerrick's POV rarely reflected or intertwined with Avry's. I'm guessing that Kerrick's journey to his own kingdom, his capture and his time with the tribes will play a role in the final book but that doesn't change the fact that for the most part his POV felt out of place.
-I noticed that Snyder attempted to redeem Kerrick's abusive behaviour towards Avry by giving him a taste of his own medicine. However, his 'redemption' didn't work on me. Kerrick ends up beaten, tied to a tree and starved — was I meant to care? I didn't. Him being tortured didn't lessen or erase what he did to Avry.
I also felt that Tohon was only depicted as a rapey violent douche just so Kerrick could look good in comparison. It was a bit like 'Ooh… Kerrick beat Avry but it's okay he's a decent guy because he only did it because he was stressed and he was remorseful afterwards… and when you compare him with the other 'love interest' he's the best guy for her. He's dreamy compared to Tohon who is an unapologetic sadistic fucker that kills kid.' Yea, I'm not buying it. Kerrick should come across as a decent hero on his own merits and not because he seems good in comparison to someone else.
I have no doubt in my mind that Kerrick would hit Avry again if he ever lost his temper. Sure, he made a vow not to hit anyone again… but if he struck out at a defenseless girl before when he lost his temper, then I hardly think him saying he won't do it again would stop him. He didn't even seem all that passionate about his 'vow'. I really don't think that he felt remorse or regret for slapping and torturing Avry.. the most emotion he had in regard to his past treatment of her was a little bit of sheepishness. He didn't redeem himself at all.
-I had no respect for Avry AT ALL. She was such an annoying martyr and I couldn't stand her. She excuses Kerrick hitting her and mentions the fact that she managed to forgive him for it… And the way it was written was as if it was the right thing to do to learn to forgive the man that slapped, hurt and starved her. That's right girls, when a guy hits you… you just need to get over it and not be a bitter, hateful, resentful bitch. A good heroine girl forgives guys for beating and torturing them!!
'I remembered my own hatred when Kerrick had backhanded me. Even after his apology and promise never to do it again, I couldn’t trust him. It took time and courage to change my mind.'
What utter bullshit and lies! It didn't take time or fucking courage! She was pissed at him for all of 5 seconds — she trusted him more or less straight away even though he'd done nothing to earn her trust. And since when has it been courageous to forgive and trust the guy that's beaten you?!
-Avry's forgiving ways irked me a great deal. Her so called friends (Ryne, Quain, Flea and Loren) abandoned her when war broke out. They purposefully planned on leaving her on her own so they could be safe themselves… they also left knowing that she would be captured by Tohon - an evul bastard that they knew wanted to rape her. They left her without a second thought when they were well aware of all the dangers she'd have to face. Did Avry feel mad? No. Did she feel betrayed? No. Did she feel angry or bitter? No. She was just slightly pissed at her 'friends' for a couple of paragraphs and then she was totally cool about them fucking her over… Because that's just the way she rolls. Ugh.
-Ryne pissed me off. In the last book he was at death's door, and Kerrick desperately searched for a healer/Avry to save him. Avry didn't want to heal Ryne because he was responsible for the execution of thousands of healers (including her friends) but Kerrick and co convinced her that they needed Ryne to defeat Tohon and his evil zombie army… apparently no-one else had the brains or skill to win a war against Tohon. Avry gave her life for Ryne because he was going to save everyone. Naturally, I was expecting Ryne to wow me with his genius tactics since he was made out to be so vital to the war. Kerrick's motto was that they couldn't possibly win without him. So I was expecting to be blown away by this character that would use his superb skill and superior knowledge to best Tohon. Is that what happened? No. Sure, the characters were all saying that the strategies Ryne was coming up were brilliant but nothing he said or did struck me as particularly intelligent or inspired. Where was the so called military genius? After all the drama about Ryne the speshul snowflake in Touch of Magic, I thought I'd actually get to read about his super speshul snowflake abilities. Instead, he came across as mediocre and easily replaceable… everything he did was more meh than genius.
His 'genius' ideas to win the war were as follows:
-Team up with another army (Estrid's) so they would have a chance at beating Tohon. Yea, that was just common sense not genius.
-Take his own soldiers and leave Estrid's to fight so he could run away and hide from Tohon's army. That wasn't genius — it was cowardly and disgusting.
-Fight Tohon's army by ordering small groups of soldiers to sneakily attack some of Tohon's men. Again, anyone could have thought of that… it wasn't a brilliant or brave move.
-Safely hide in a cave whilst his soldiers do all the work.
What exactly was genius about any of that?
It's not enough to just be told someone is a genius, I need a character to display it in some form or another… I need to be shown it through characters actions, decisions and choices. And Ryne didn't… which just makes the driving force behind the first book (Avry giving up her life to save Ryne so he could save everyone else) a joke.
-Quain was a dick. The way he acted towards Avry when he found out she was alive was vile. He was pissed at her for pretending she was dead. That was fine, but he stayed angry at her for ages and ages even when she apologised and explained her reasonings. She only hid the truth to protect herself and make sure she didn't end up with a sadistic rapist. Quain had no right to act like such a bitch and throw such a hissy fit. He should have just been glad she was alive but no, he wanted to lord her one lie over her for as long as possible because he was a dick.
I hate that heroines can't ever be anything other than 100% honest otherwise they are evul lying whores… yet heroes can lie and it's perfectly okay because they have reasons but no reason is valid enough for a heroine to lie. Heroines must always be punished for lying.
And the funny thing was that after he made a huge song and dance about Avry lying he went ahead and did much worse. He hid Ryne's plan to hide from Tohon's army and then abandoned her in a middle of a war when he knew that Tohon would get her and act rapey towards her. Avry lying and hiding from Quain and co didn't put his life in danger whereas Quain's deception not only put her life in danger but also put her at risk of being raped by a sadistic fucker. Is Avry mad at Quain's betrayal? Not really. She was a bit bitter for a few minutes and then she forgave him… you see he had reasons and heroines should understand those reasons and just forgive.
The moral of the story is that a good decent girl should understand that guys have legitimate reasons for lying and they should forgive and forget accordingly — they cannot be angry, bitter or upset. They should also realise that they themselves have NO excuse or reason to lie. Whereas, a guy can lie because of course he has reasons and he can also be bitter and pissed for long periods of time if he should discover that a girl has ever lied to him… Ugh. I'm so sick of the double standards in books.
-Avry only seemed to care about the guys in her life. Even her sister didn't come across as all that important to her. It was all about Kerrick, Belen, Flea, Ryne and the other men in her life. Heaven forbid she actually have a close friendship with a female character. She did make a couple of female friends but I didn't think they counted since 1. She wasn't particularly close to them 2. They were barely in it and 3. One of them ended up dead and the other ended up evil.
Avry should have had at the very least one prominent female character that she was close to.
-Too many cliched characters — the boring overly forgiving Mary Sue heroine, the emo hero, the evul ex girlfriend, the one dimensional villain who wants to rule the kingdom just because he's evul.
There were no original or complex characters — they were all rubbish.
-What was the point of the cliffhanger? Its obvious Kerrick's not going to die. He'll probably be saved by some stupid deus ex machina. Then he'll declare his wuv to Avry even though he's never actually shown it before and then they'll run off into the sunset together… and Kerrick will beat Avry everyday and she'll love all that sweet sweet abusive love… Ugh.
All in all, a huge disappointment.