I got 10 chapters (about 100 pages) into this (roughly 360 page) book before I realised it wasn't really worth my time. It's got an intriguing premise, but the writing was driving me up the wall and also the plot itself was poorly executed.
Firstly, the problems I had with the plot:
The story begins with Mariah (an orphan boy who is on his way to start work at the Regent Hotel) being approached on the train platform by a man who gives him a mysterious pack of cards and requests that Mariah keep them safe and hidden, and when Mariah reaches wherever he's headed, to send a note to the man telling the man where he is so the man can come and pick the cards up.
It's a very good opening.
But after that everything falls apart. Because... Mariah doesn't seem to have a goal? Like, he's headed to the Regent Hotel to work because... the orphanage sent him? And that's it? The most we find out about Mariah as a person in these 100 pages is that his parents disappeared while they were overseas. That's it. Like we don't know anything about him or his emotions or anything that makes us care about him. He just exists so the story has a main character.
When Mariah reaches the hotel he's greeted by a servant girl called Sacha, who tells him the servant boy who he has been sent to replace is missing (hence why Mariah is there in the first place). That, in itself, is intriguing, but then the book proceeds to move very fast through Mariah and Sacha discovering hidden things around the hotel.
Within the 100 pages I read, for some reason Mariah just starts sneaking around with Sacha (a girl he barely knows) (sneaking around that could literally get him fired). They start following this one dude who Mariah just "has a feeling" is up to something. And they discover a key (which Mariah for some reason just knows the missing servant boy touched??? idk if that's something that'll get explained by magic later on or not, but it's stupid as of now), a secret room, and a wax copy of the missing servant boy. Like that's a lot to discover in 100 pages. And I still don't know why Mariah is even doing any of this because his personality does not exist. Like... he doesn't seem to have any emotional motivation? He's just there. Like I guess he wants to help Sacha find the missing boy, but like it's not really clarified why beyond like vague statements like "he just felt like he had to." Like okay?? Thanks for giving the main character the personality of a grape.
Like there's no planned sneaking around. There's no planned "we're gonna investigate the disappearance of the servant boy" it all just happens because they were in the right place at the right time. it's very weird. And at this point Mariah hasn't been at the regent hotel more than a day??? So within less than a day he's discovered a key, found the secret room it goes to, found a wax figure of a missing person, overheard like two dodgy convos, seen Isambard black snooping around TWICE--like bro, slow the fuck down. no wonder mariah has no personal motivations, you're not giving him any time to be a person, the plot is in the damn way.
But that's all I have to say about the plot really. My main issue with this book is the writing. Because G P Taylor cannot write well and his editor must've forgotten to put on their reading glasses. To show you what I mean, I'm just gonna copy some sentences out of the book:
"the lift was thrust up the shaft and sped by at speed, too quickly for him to count the floors" idk why we needed to be told it "sped by at speed" but ok.
"Mariah looked up warily and greeted by the thin china smile of Old Scratty, dressed in her black velvet dress and green silk slippers, hanging limply by a long cord from a metal peg" why is there no "was" before "greeted"?
"Mariah squinted through thin narrow slit" why is there no "the" before "thin"?
This happens numerous more times in the book, but I'm moving on before I give myself a headache.
The language in this book is also highly repetitive, like the author just really likes to hammer things home for you in a way that is unneeded as hell.
I have a few examples, but I'm only going to show you one or else we'd be here all day.
page 82-83:
within the space of these two pages (although most of this takes place on page 82) we are told:
page 82: "Sacha now watched eagerly as he searched every seat, checking underneath each one with his hand whilst he looked about him as if he did not want to be discovered."
page 82: "He's searching the theatre," Sacha said.
page 82: "Black again began to search every seat, slowly and meticulously searching under each one as he made his way along the empty row."
page 82: "He peered out of the secret place and watched Isambard Black checking every row of seats."
page 83: "Black searched on, his head down, a sullen grimace upon his face as he slid his hand underneath each seat."
FRANKLY, i feel like those quotes speak for themselves. G P Taylor is not a good writer. Like. God. F*cking. Damn. It is so bad.
The other example I had is where we're told 2383+ times that Mariah is entranced (not a word GP used, that's my word because I know how to use a thesaurus) by some weird golden clock. That goes on for like three pages and I wanted to break the clock by the end of it.
The next issue is the fact the narrator is annoyingly omniscient.
For this next quote, we're not in Mariah's POV, we're in Sacha's as far as I could tell.
"Quickly," he said anxiously, as if he had something of great urgency to share with her. "We have to go back to the tower, to my room, there's something you must see."
This is annoy because we don't need to be told "as if he had something of great urgency to share with her" becayse not only can we infer that from context, but also we find out in the very next line that that is exactly why he's anxious, etc.
The book does this numerous times. Even with the first quote from page 82. "whilst he looked about him as if he did not want to be discovered."
like...?? idk how to describe why that's bad and boring writing, but it is. It's too convenient for the characters to know that. It's telling when you could just show him looking shifty or show Mariah looking anxious. It's boring. And you're babying your reader to an extent that you don't need to even if this is a middle grade book.
To wrap up, I'll just say I now understand why I always see G P Taylor's books in second hand bookshops--no mf wants to keep this garbage