Mason's initial book in the Jack Beale mystery series revolves around a pair of murders: one in the New Mexico desert, and one in the freezing waters of Rye Harbor, New Hampshire (the latter being the book's main setting). Jack must unravel the mystery behind the murders before his friend and prospective lover Max falls into danger.
"Harbor Ice" contains an interesting backstory behind the murders that spans generations and nations. I enjoyed trying to figure out the significance of a certain piece of jewelry that ties into the mystery. And I also enjoyed that LGBT characters played a large role in the beginning of the story (though they would end up leaving the stage fairly quickly). There's some great action description up front.
In addition, I liked the New Hampshire Seacoast setting of the story. I live fairly close to Rye, Portsmouth, and other places described in the book. The author captured the feeling of a long coastal winter well.
There's a lot of repetition in the story and unnecessary detail included. For example, in a few different places, a scene experienced by one character is then repeated via dialogue as the character describes it to another character. And many scenes that are similar to each other play out in bars and cafes. There are many "Hellos" and "How are yous" and other bits of dialogue that more experienced writers usually cut to get to the interesting bits faster (if dialogue is not directly advancing the plot or revealing something about a character-- and preferably it should do both simultaneously-- it should go).
I would have liked to see more agency on the part of Max, the "feisty redheaded bartender" (as she's referred to on the back cover). A character can't really count as "feisty" if she spends much of the book crying and running into our hero's arms (count the number of times). Also, why is this a "Jack Beale mystery" if Jack's friend Tom (the police chief) is doing most of the investigating? Jack, a civilian, spends most of his time thinking about how to woo Max, not about solving mysteries. He felt a bit colorless, and much of his lovelorn thoughts seemed to be more appropriate to a younger character than I think Jack was actually meant to be (just went back and checked-- yeah, looks like Jack is supposed to be in his mid-forties).
There's also way too much flashback in the first fifty pages or so of the book. As well as later in the book, as the mystery begins to be unveiled. Some of the flashback was interesting backstory, e.g., Jack's past. But with so much flashback, it seemed like the story could have been started earlier in time to have some of these events play out in "real time" for the reader, for a greater feeling of stakes.
On a related note, several times in the book, one character is telling a long story, and another character keeps urging them to "get to the point"-- but the storytelling character refuses and keeps talking in long paragraphs. If you as the writer feel the need to have a character repeatedly insist someone should "get to the point," that's a sign that the scene needs to be revised.
But I'm sure some of these issues are ironed out in later books in the series, as the setting deepens in detail and the author gets more words under his belt. "Harbor Ice" is worth checking out for anyone interested in both mysteries and the Seacoast, and who can forgive a little repetition in the writing.