I know what she was doing. Liz Johnson was trying to re-write Suzanne Brockmann's "Everyday Average Jones" into something 'chrischun'. She swapped out the heroine being waddlishly pregnant for the sister, but whatever. The problem is that she left off the inspirational part AS WELL AS the excitement of it, while also slaughtering any believability.
Staci (with an 'i') is in a prison in the Persian Gulf after being taken from an aid camp. Two weeks ago, she was separated from the elderly couple also taken. Except that... if she was taken TWO WEEKS AGO? She's definitely been raped and beaten, multiple times by the time the SEALs get to her. So this whole thing is already completely implausible. Islamic extremists are particularly brutal to pretty young female infidels - worse, if they're proselytizing christians. Now if Liz had wanted to make it 'by the grace of God, untouched', that would've been one thing, but since this is *inspirational, XXXXX-light*, that's not what we're dished.
While in prison, the extremists talk about a plot to blow up some target near Coronado Naval base - IN ENGLISH - in front of her, conveniently dropping a map with symbols in her cell. *SERIOUSLY!?!?* You're kidding, right? And just leave it there, for her to snatch up? HArDLy. Ugh, ugh, ugh...!!!! Bad, implausible, too-convenient writing.
We're also told that Staci has been in the Middle East for TWO YEARS and speaks some Arabic... but then on pg 93 we're told that the men who took her were yelling and she couldn't understand a word. ?!?!?
In getting rescued, she's SHOT, to the point where she can't use the arm that's just hanging there, can't feel it... but three weeks later, apparently she's perfectly fine...??? I. Can't. Even. The author assures us the bullet made a clean exit, so - hey, we're golden - moving on! ((O_o)) You do realize a wound that hits nerves like that would take MONTHS just in healing, not to mention the physical therapy required to rehab it. *IF* the damage wasn't permanent. Shoddy, shoddy writing.
The author tells us that she gets to the States, and tries to tell the pubic affairs, police, congressmen, etc. about the plot and the map, but everyone passes her off as delusional. NO, they WOULDN'T. And if she told them she's being followed? They'd assign someone to her, just based on the timeline of events surrounding her trauma, alone. This WHOLE THING is bogus on every single level.
Also, the author tells us the word 'second' on the map is the variation of the word that denotes 'second in command'. But somehow, the word 'first' is inconclusive, and there's no information on what THAT one means. Rrrrrrrrrrriiiiiiiiiight.
Out of desperation, she goes to the man who rescues her for help. HE follows her, sees a van ram her car into a light pole (!?! Wouldn't NOW the cops/feds take her seriously?!?!?! But no mention of them arriving on the scene - the author has no use for additional characters - it takes too much brainpower to write more than three or four people.)
He takes her home to a property IN HER PARENT'S NAME and assures her that she's safe there, nobody'll find her. Um... how about NO!!!! If they know her name, they know her rich parents and can FIND HER THERE, hello. But you're not supposed to think about that. This is no-no 101 for people with brains. But apparently we're not supposed to have any.
So shocker when a BOMB arrives at her house. She calls SEALman (instead of the police, who by now would have CONCERNS), he brings in his team, diffuses the 'made-by-a-pro' bomb, and while the team is doing it, he's giving her ALL OF THEIR REAL NAMES. Um, NOT. A CHANCE!! Talk about ridiculous - if she were taken again, their entire team would be compromised by way of *any* torture/interrogation. BAD, BAD, BAD writing!!!! He would NEVER do that.
And when it's diffused? THEN he decides that she can't stay there, because it's not safe. (((sigh.)))
So he offers to TAKE HER HOME to stay with his pregnant sister. Which would put *HIS* loved one at risk, and HOW. ABOUT. NO!!!
In addition, WHERE ARE HER PARENTS/SISTER?!?!? If you daughter was kidnapped in the Middle East and held prisoner, shot, most likely raped... wouldn't YOU be there? Again, apparently too many characters to write, and not convenient to the author's tunnel vision.
Sister's pregnancy is over-the-top ridiculous. She's so big she can't get out of a chair. She's too big to DRIVE. She's soooooo hot, that Staci wishes for a scarf and mittens IN THE HOUSE, IN SAN DIEGO because the A/C's up so high. It takes sister an HOUR to get shoes on to go on a food-cravings run. I'm sorry, but I carried SIX babies in my womb, and never experienced ANY of that, not once. It's preposterous. "Carrying a baby is hard work," Liz writes, "and anything that took her mind off it was a treat". I... can't. even. Carrying a baby just *happens*, and it's NOT. HARD. You basically don't do anything to assist, hello. Maybe rest a little more, but UGHHH!!
Anyhow, Staci-with-an-i then argues about going to his house, because she's barren and can't bear to be around a pregnant woman. It's not about putting innocent lives at risk - Nooooo. It's selfishness. Which... let's face it. Staci hasn't been *ANYTHING* but selfish since this thing started. We haven't seen her pray, haven't seen any sign that she rests in the shelter of the Lord's arms, no peace about her... she's just another ditzy rich girl who's skeered cuz they're gonna come for her.
I love how these LI authors write worse-than-the-devil ex-boyfriends for the heroines, too. She has Chris drag Staci across the country to live [with? by?] him, and then declare it's over, cuz she can't have kids. "He stood, brushing his tie smooth and nodding toward the money he'd left on the table. That should cover the meal. The, sticking his hands into his pockets, he'd shrugged. It's been fun, Stace, but I'm ready to settle down and start a family."
Because a good christchun girl would definitely schlep her life across the States for someone like THAT?!
"She now saw in Tristan the tenderness that Chris had never shown. The kindness and concern that left her boneless and weak." WHY IN HADES would she have been with Chris at all, let alone RELOCATED for him, if he never showed her any kindness or tenderness?????
Staci is supposed to be a Believer in Christ, but she never sings a hymn, prays, offers to pray with anyone, opens a Bible, PACKS a Bible... nada. Nothing. And Tristan has absolutely *no* faith whatsoever, until the very end, and then he's making vague references to 'god' which are little more than platitudes thrown in to make this 'inspirational', for publication reasons. All she ever is in this book is cowering, whimpering, simpering, sc-c-c-c-cared. And that's not faith.
Heck on pg 258, we're told "she wanted to pray for his safety". BUT NOT ONCE does she actually DO IT. Never once does she actually live out *ANY* faith in this hot mess.
I'm failing to see why this is inspirational.
Or better than Brockmann's book.
It's definitely written far, far, far worse.
The gym scene would've been cute (Tristan teaching her self-defense), *IF* Staci weren't written to be the Dumbest Human on Earth. She whines about hating running, not wanting to do exercise or liking physical stuff (but at the same time, she follows sports on TV, to the point where she wears jerseys of her team?!??). What is that?! Her arm 'is a limp noodle' when he lifts it up. ?!?!?
This was fun: (pg 155) "He held up a fist, one jagged key protruding from between his middle and ring fingers, the rest of the key chain clasped in his palm. 'See? Now try to hit me. Dig it in deep." She nodded, taking the keys from him and doing like he'd shown. Except when she swung at him, her hand opened, and the keys clattered to the mat."
Dumbest. Human. On. Earth.
And the ball would've been sweet, if it weren't all weirdness. From sister ("Please don't take this wrong, but why isn't he taking his GIRLFRIEND that nobody's mentioned to her up until now and not you?") to horny commanders and the OBVIOUS revelation of the bad guy (again: author refuses to write more than nine characters, so...)
Then he has to go on a mission... and doesn't ask anyone from non-related teams to take over watching her?!?!? We were told the superiors knew what was going on, and where in on it. Now suddenly there's *NOBODY* on all of Coronado Base that could take over for him while he's away?! GAHHHHH!! Bad, bad, horribly bad writing!!!!!!!
I'm not a Suzanne Brockmann proponent, anymore. Not since her son came out of the closet and every single one of her characters is now LGBTQ+ (and she writes sex scenes, so... no and thank and you.)... but Brockmann's older stuff is MILES AWAY better than this. This was pitiful. I was *HOPING* for something along Brockmann's lines, except with actual FAITH, and maybe similar action.
Instead I got a cheap rip-off with NO faith and nothing new under the sun. Hard pass on this one, people. Except I have books #1 and #3, so... (((deep breath))) Might as well read/review those and get it over with, next...