Oh boy. Where to start?
Maybe I'll begin with the fact that this book was not ready to be published. It is a first draft. The author also marketed it as "traditionally published" when in fact there is no mention of an editor, agent, production team, or publishing company in the acknowledgements. Instead she references some beta readers. And don't get me wrong, beta readers are a crucial part of the editing process, but they are absolutely not the only part of it. I'm willing to bet that this book was self-published without feedback from a professional editor, which was unwise. I understand the author may be new to writing a novel and perhaps was unaware of these things, but at the end of the day, it was her job to put forth her best work -- and this was not it.
Worldbuilding / Gwen's home life:
I had a huge issue with the way Gwen's family, friends, and boyfriend were introduced, mostly because THEY WEREN'T. We never meet Nathan, her boyfriend. We never meet Artie, her brother (which, it's kind of weird to me that her brother and love interest have the same name? I'm sorry but that's not at all appealing). We are also told that Gwen is a librarian, but we never once see her working in a library. It makes you wonder why all of this was mentioned when it had no importance to the story.
As for the Dark Ages section of this book, I am genuinely disturbed by the portrayal of both the serfs and their lifestyles. The author literally describes them as dirty, dumb losers with absolutely no intelligence or personality whatsoever. It's honestly so upsetting that she relies on these stereotypes of history and then people in the reviews call it "accurate". It's not. People in the Middle Ages, including serfs, visited bathhouses and (sometimes) nearby rivers to bathe. They weren't stupid either -- they created special combs to remove lice, wrote beautiful chants and poetry in monasteries, created elaborate gowns with gravity-defying headdresses, and the list goes on. But the author reduces them to a few characters with missing teeth and a horrible version of English -- which, if she was going to make the dialogue as accented as she did, she might as well have just written half the book in Old English.
Prose:
This might be where the most work was needed. The author makes the mistake of "telling" instead of "showing". Sometimes there were endless paragraphs of Guinevere detailing her every thought -- and while I want to know what a protagonist is thinking, I don't want it blatantly listed out. Prose is supposed to be something that is exciting to uncover. It can be dissected and interpreted in different ways. When you tell instead of show, that doesn't happen. I think if the author had an editor to assist her this issue would've been better addressed. It's kind of a shame that it wasn't done.
Another thing that bothered me was the incessant reminder that Gwen is a "21st century woman". Literally read the book blurb and you will find this phrase multiple times. Again, this is telling. Calling your character independent does not convince me that they are independent. It would've been better if the author showed Gwen trying to do things on her own without attaching all these adjectives to her.
Additionally, the author uses wayyyy too many adverbs. Way too many. Using big words does not necessarily elevate a book's diction -- in some cases, it lowers it. I wish she'd tried using stronger verbs and nouns, rather than so many unnecessary descriptive words.
Characters:
Guinevere -- After 300 pages I still didn't have a good sense of her personality. She doesn't really have any interests / noticeable traits except praising herself for everything. Honestly, I don't think the author intended for her protagonist to come across as stuck up and self-centered -- but she did. Gwen constantly describes herself in a manner that gives off "I'm better than you" vibes, probably because the Dark Ages people are about as developed as a piece of blank paper. Also, this girl CHEATED ON HER BOYFRIEND and it's just dismissed b/c she's "in love"??? How am I supposed to root for a character that lacks empathy and common sense???
Arthur -- the brother, or the husband? Who knows. I guess I'll stick to the latter. Gwen pretty much drools over him having ragged hair and a "masculine scent" -- wtf??? -- and he's lowkey kinda misogynistic which, I'll admit, is somewhat historically accurate. Other than that he doesn't have much development except for a semi-tragic backstory abt his family and some anger issues.
Nathan -- Gwen's boyfriend. I said this earlier, but we never meet him, which makes it REALLY hard for me to feel any conflict between him, Gwen, and Arthur. All I felt was upset because he got cheated on. Nathan deserved better.
Merlin -- I really, really wish the author did more with this character. He easily could've been such a cool character because he already WAS a cool character. There's so much history about it, and yet this book features none of it. He kind of comes across as a creep. In fact, in the beginning of the novel he literally STALKS A CHILD and says she's gonna marry someone??!!!!! WTF?? Other than that he just sat around spying on people and doing nothing.
The rest of the characters honestly needed more development, even as side characters. I don't know what else to say.
Pacing:
This was another area where an editor would've really helped the author. The pacing was just not consistent. Sometimes there'd be paragraphs upon paragraphs of Guinevere telling the reader her every thought. Other times there'd be reallyyyyy long descriptions of a journey through the country in which nothing happened. There's a lot of scenes that could've been trimmed down or cut entirely. Overall this book needed a lot more editing.
Review: 0.5 stars
I will give Fil Reid credit for writing a novel. Regardless of the improvements that needed to be made, she wrote at least 300 pages, and that's not easy. But she really needed to analyze her writing more and be honest about the quality of certain sections. This was not ready to be published.
I find it interesting that this book has good reviews -- this was actually what made me read it in the first place. To be honest, I think the author should've presented this book more for adults. She doesn't seem to adhere to a specific audience, but from reading the reviews, it's clear that many grown adults found some value in reading it. And that's fine. But I'm not an adult. I genuinely had the impression that this was a YA book -- IT IS NOT. Some scenes are too detailed for YA appropriate literature, and some scenes are kind of immature (reading from Gwen's perspective, at least).
I want to emphasize that this book had potential. The concept itself is very interesting: a woman goes back to the Dark Ages and lives among real historical people. That's awesome. What wasn't so great was the execution. I truly believe that an editor and a publishing team would've improved the writing SO MUCH. It's a shame that didn't happen.