A lovesick unidentified agent botches up a job for his criminal employer and is reprimanded. Not much is revealed. Some vagaries add to the story, some seem too purposefully random. Like: why is it so hard to find turkey? What is it that his love puts in his hand? And some of the side story fill doesn't add depth. Like: spontaneously combustible damp hay, ponderings of honey.
The beginning was strong enough... and actually included paragraph breaks between scenes, thoughts, dialogue, location shifts, etc (unlike the rest of the novel).
I did want to know who bashed his head in (his love? his friend?) and if his relationship would continue. I was invested in the love between the characters. I liked how she set a stapler just at the right height for him to reach.
As the book continued many sentences remained well crafted, which is saying something because some sentences went on for about half a page. But all the characters started having the same (enjoyable enough) voice, which when combined with the no paragraph breaks added to some dizzying pages.
For a direct quote: "I am not very lucky, I told her later that day, when I saw her again, which is to say that I did see and speak to her again, whether or not it was her."
To me this type of writing is a bit tiring to read late at night. Just when you get your mind wrapped around the sequence of events the narrator will say, "Actually, I'm omitting the part where I had to..." and then veer off and return later forcing the reader to gather oneself again when the sequence continues.
A typical good enough and bothersome enough passage:
"We lay on our backs talking about honey, about its different colors and grades--yum, we said--and wondered aloud if dead bees produced ghosts as dead fleas, it has been said, did, and if ghosts of bees would go on making honey and what that honey would taste like, probably not so good, though we couldn't be sure, but sooner or later we’d find out, and we concluded that nature, especially given the creation of honey, all kinds of honey, really was, as the beekeeper had said, quite smart."
The humor was queen enough. I liked the typed "compliment" he was delivered. I liked the scene where the other agent let him borrow his spare pair of sunglasses but had to keep a hand on them. Even character quirks like "not being able to say goodbye" where done well and pretty funny. Ha.
I wish the author would have relied on his wit and prose more and just told the story. But that is just me. I am not much for gimmicks.