I read the first Jackelian book, The Court of the Air, on my honeymoon, and ever since then I've been a Stephen Hunt fan. Each new book has been better than the last, and when I saw that Jack Cloudie was following on the heels of Secrets of the Fire Sea, I was delighted.
And then I read it, and everything fell apart.
I am so disappointed and furious, it actually hurts. I've really loved Hunt's other works, and when he spoke out against the anti-SFF prejudice in the BBC's coverage of World Book Night, I thought he was right on target. Which is why I'm as much baffled as angry at how this book came to be: I simply don't understand how an author who's otherwise written such flawed-and-fierce-yet-functional cultures, awesome female characters and big fantasy plots has managed to so spectacularly backpedal on all three counts.
I'll start with the last of these, as it's the less objectionable. Put simply, the plot of Jack Cloudie is... simple. It's a human war between human nations, and while both sides are driven by a mix of magic and machinations, the story never gets past that level. This isn't a sin in and of itself, except that's not what I've come to expect from Hunt. The Court of the Air was about the re-emergence of deadly ancient gods; The Kingdom Beyond the Waves had a jungle-quest to find a lost city equivalent in myth and function to Atlantis; The Rise of the Iron Moon took the characters into space to battle demonic aliens from a neighbouring planet; and Secrets of the Fire Sea was ultimately concerned with the explosive origins of an entire civilisation and its sibling races. Compared to all this boys-own-adventure archaeology, murder, intrigue and save-the-world grandeur, a treacherous grand vizir and a couple of airship battles doesn't really cut the mustard. And also, seriously? The treacherous grand vizir must be the most over-used cliché of any and all stories set in Middle Eastern analogue societies/caliphates. DO NOT USE IT.
So the book is more... cramped, shall we say, than it's predecessor volumes – concerned with a far smaller stage. Which isn't a crime, per se: it just means the stakes are lower than usual. Admittedly, there's one point at which a prophetic utterance declares that if the fight is lost, the whole world will fall, but we never see any evidence of that, and it doesn't do anything to ramp up the tension.
Next, we have the female characters; or rather, the absence of same. While each of the previous Jackelian books has boasted an amazing heroine – respectively Molly Templar, Amelia Harsh, Purity Drake and Hannah Conquest, all of whom have been POV protagonists – Jack Cloudie has none. Now, while I certainly enjoy the presence of awesome ladies in my fiction, I can still enjoy books without them, being as how chaps and chap-based stories can also be excellent, too. And if these two complaints were my only beefs with the book, then I'd have been happy to shrug and be on my merry way, comfortable in the knowledge that, even if Jack Cloudie wasn't my favourite volume in the series, it was still worth a look-in.
But they're not, and it isn't.
Because what really distressed me about this book – the thing that saw me gritting my teeth and set to fling it across the room – was the constant intertwining of racism and sexism. Charitably, I shall say that both were likely unintentional: as I've said, Hunt has a good track-record prior to this of writing strong cultures and female characters both. But that's not enough to excuse what he's done in Jack Cloudie with a handwave of benevolent intentions. Not by a long shot.
At various points in previous books, we've heard passing mention of Cassarabia: a theocratic caliphate whose much-feared magicians are called womb mages. Through the use of biologicks, womb mages create a variety dreadful chimaeras by impregnating female slaves with genetically engineered, inhuman embryos, which they then are forced, over and over, to gestate and birth. Which is, frankly, vile, and the only reason I've let these asides pass in previous books is because they've been just that: asides. More to the point, they've always been mentioned by enemies of Cassarabia, and so while we've had no specific cause to doubt their verity, neither have they been contextualised in terms of Cassarabian society. By which I mean: Hunt builds viciousness into all his societies, but usually balances it against more positive elements. The atheistic Jackelians, for instance, though nominally democratic, also keep their fallen royalty imprisoned in breeding pens, while the reigning puppet-monarch's arms are always amputated as part of their coronation ceremony – a literal symbolism of the pledge that never again shall a king or queen take up arms against the people. This, too, is awful, but in a way that is shown to be distanced from the day-to-day lives of the populace. Jackelian society is brutal in many ways familiar to Victorian England (on which it is closely modelled), but nonetheless promotes equality in others. So while the womb mages of Cassarabia have previously been invoked as bogey-men by Jackelian characters, it's never been clear whether their terrible practises are sanctioned by an entire society, or are just the darkest aspects of it as manifested at the highest and most brutal levels of power – a unique depravity such as all governments in Hunt's crapsack universe possess.
But as Jack Cloudie all too lamentably makes clear, this is not, in fact, the case. Not only are womb mage sorceries a part of everyday Cassarabian life, they are an integral part: everything from healing to the creation of guards and various animals is their domain, and this is established almost from the word go. Now, admittedly, the only time we actually see the forcibly pregnant women (or producers, as they're called) is in the royal citadel and later at the womb mage capital city; almost every other usage of the term is detached from this reality. And as there's another, more neutral term for their talents – biologicks – it's conceivable that all the non-royal practitioners we encounter just use flesh-manipulation without the aid of female slaves. I'd be slightly happier about the book if this were so, but the fact is that, with only one exception I noted (where the word 'sorcerer' was used), every Cassarabian magic-wielder who was not created or augmented by someone else's magic is called a womb mage; and that bothers the fuck out of me, because it infers that the whole society, in addition to repressing women in other social, religious and cultural ways, is tacitly condoning the continual forced impregnation, abuse and eventual death-by-discard of hundreds of thousands of female slaves.
And look: it's not like I think Hunt thinks that this is a marvellous basis for society. It's that he's written an Arabian/Muslim analogue country where, if possible, the treatment of women is even more fucked up than in the most vile and strawmantastic version of a militant Islamic society that stands for All The Middle East in the deranged fantasies of Frank Miller, and does not seem to think there's anything wrong with this. But I can tell you: reading this book in my lunch room at work, where almost everyone else present was either Muslim or from a majority-Muslim nation, all of them training to be doctors? Did not feel me leaving like a good person for reading it. And that makes me pretty certain that if any of them had chanced to ask about the plot or scan a few pages over my shoulder, they wouldn't have felt happy about it, either.
And then it gets even worse.
I don't think I can convey the full awfulness of the plot any better than the following passage, ripped from the climactic scenes of pages 382 and 383. This is the great revelation of Jack Cloudie, where the true caliph denounces the evil schemes of his treacherous grand vizir – the enemy against whom both the Cassarabian and Jackelian characters have been striving in unison:
“'Hear me. Hear your Caliph Eternal. This is the progress which the Sect of Razat brings you!' shouted the young ruler, his voice carrying far across the quieted hall. 'The progress of slaves and criminals who were born women and who have perverted their bodies towards the male form through the use of an illegal changeling virus. Criminals who have dared to use a variation of that foul virus to turn men into producers to breed unlicensed monstrosities.' His arm swept across the chamber. 'They have done this so that you, all of you, will take their places in the tanks of the producers.'”
Or, in other words: it turns out that the women of Cassarabia have, somewhat understandably, grown sick of being maltreated, and extremely sick of female slaves being used to breed chimaera-monsters until they die. So they've started a cult whose initiation process consists of turning themselves into men (because ladies, if you want to overthrow the patriarchy, YOU MUST YOURSELVES BECOME IT) and have then gone the added step of developing a biologick spell to give men wombs (!) so that they can turn their former oppressors into a new crop of monster-gestating producers. Also, they have simultaneously started a war with the Jackelians to the north, which action is the fulcrum of the entire plot.
And I just. I don't even.
WHAT IN THE EVERLOVING FUCK.
There are so many things wrong with this, I don't even know where to start. Actually, yes, I do. How about the part where the true caliph has been using womb magery on female slaves for fucking CENTURIES prior to this point – a practise which the Jackelians have reviled – and yet, when they free him from the evil sect's clutches, and he gives the above speech to explain what's happened, nobody calls hypocrisy on the fact that womb magery is apparently only deemed a vile and outrageous blasphemy when practised on men, and that this SINGLE FACT is what sways the sect's uninformed followers back to his side? Or the fact that, at the end of the novel, nobody has learned a lesson about Not Forcibly Impregnating People With Monsters and the entire caliphate is left the way it was before, except for the part where the war has stopped? Or how the light-skinned Jackelians effectively put on blackface in order to pass as locals? Or when Commodore Black, the one character who appears in all the Jackelian books, having earlier said that he never takes female compatriots near Cassarabia because of what might happen to them there, explains that the culture and people of Cassarabia have effectively evolved as brutally as they have to cope with living in a desert? Actually, that bit's worth quoting, too:
“'We're here to fight them,' said Jack, 'and it sounds like you admire them.'
'Not so, lad, but I do understand them. Because it's the way of the world. In bright, fertile waters, the fish you see are as shiny as rainbows and swarm in schools as large as clouds. But run your u-boat deep and into the dark barrens, and the fish are tough, bony-looking things, few and fierce. That's the empire. The Cassarabians are warriors. Their land made them that way and they've rolled up all the plumper, richer nations that lady fortune tossed down for them as their neighbours.'”
In other words, they're like that because they live in a desert, and could never have been otherwise.
And then there's the part where Omar, our Cassarabian POV character – who was so obnoxiously arrogant that I spent the whole book wishing him dead – has his entire motivation based around the love of Shadisa, a childhood friend who started hating him (funnily enough) when he physically stopped her from helping another woman escape from an unwanted marriage, whose ultimate punishment, when caught, was to be turned into an edible cactus for the use of passing travellers while possibly still retaining her human sentience. No, seriously: THIS ACTUALLY HAPPENS. And even when Shadisa tells him, over and over to his face, that she hates him now, Omar's only thoughts are for how he saved her from getting caught, too, and how she should really be grateful, and how beautiful she is, and how she's his and he'll save her and they'll be together forever, and how she can't really mean it when she says she doesn't want him, SOMEONE ELSE MUST BE CONTROLLING HER. And how Shadisa then goes on to join the evil cult and turn herself into a man, which Omar thinks of as an abomination, only she still likes him enough that, despite having tried to kill him several times, she also fails to inject him with the womb-giving serum, which he then takes as proof positive that she loved him after all. WHAT?
Or how about where the only other relevant female character, Maya Westwick, starts out as being described as the half-Jackelian, half-Cassarabian daughter of an escaped producer-slave, with her hatred of what was done to her mother as her motivation for everything she does, only it turns out that this is actually a lie, and she's a double-agent for the Cassarabian secret police (though whether willingly or through magically engineered conditioning that make her loyal to the caliph isn't clear – possibly it's both) and apparently doesn't hate womb mages after all? And how, when the sect who rose up in their hatred of how the womb mages mistreat women capture Maya, they threaten to have their womb mages make clones of her? And how it's inferred at the end that actually, the true caliph has been a lady all along?
Yeah. About that.
Jack Cloudie has drained me in so many ways. It's left me feeling wrung-out and sad and furious and betrayed, because the only thing worse than reading a hideously offensive book is reading a hideously offensive book by an author you thought was better than that. I'll always have those first four novels, but if a new one comes out? I don't know. I just don't know.