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Clever Lass: A Pride and Prejudice Variation
Clever Elizabeth Bennet's world is imperilled by the unjust entail which looms over her beloved family estate, Longbourn. Her father's ailing health only exacerbates the urgency of their predicament. Determined to ensure that the odious Rev William Collins never inherits her home, Elizabeth embarks on a courageous journey to end the entail once and for all.
Fitzwilliam Darcy, an arrogant scion of wealthy lineage, accompanies his rich tradesman friend, Charles Bingley, to survey the Netherfield estate. Caroline Bingley, a woman of calculated ambition, sees Darcy as the ultimate prize. Her plans are threatened, however, when Bingley becomes captivated by the gentle Jane Bennet. Caroline's jealousy and resentment know no bounds.
Darcy finds himself irresistibly drawn to the spirited and independent-minded Elizabeth Bennet. As their paths intertwine, Darcy’s conviction that she is beneath him in fortune, connections, and station, is challenged by her character and wit. Charles Bingley, deceived by his conniving sister, must overcome societal expectations, and find the courage to follow his heart.
Elizabeth's audacious hope to thwart Collins and preserve Longbourn for her family leads her to an unexpected ally, and perhaps even love, amidst the chaos. Darcy and Bingley must confront their own shortcomings and reassess what truly matters in life.
Fitzwilliam Darcy, an arrogant scion of wealthy lineage, accompanies his rich tradesman friend, Charles Bingley, to survey the Netherfield estate. Caroline Bingley, a woman of calculated ambition, sees Darcy as the ultimate prize. Her plans are threatened, however, when Bingley becomes captivated by the gentle Jane Bennet. Caroline's jealousy and resentment know no bounds.
Darcy finds himself irresistibly drawn to the spirited and independent-minded Elizabeth Bennet. As their paths intertwine, Darcy’s conviction that she is beneath him in fortune, connections, and station, is challenged by her character and wit. Charles Bingley, deceived by his conniving sister, must overcome societal expectations, and find the courage to follow his heart.
Elizabeth's audacious hope to thwart Collins and preserve Longbourn for her family leads her to an unexpected ally, and perhaps even love, amidst the chaos. Darcy and Bingley must confront their own shortcomings and reassess what truly matters in life.
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Published July 1, 2023
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July 3, 2023
This was a long variation. I am not usually opposed to long books, but I think this one would have really benefitted from more trimming and editing.
I noted that some elements of the plot were repeated frequently, and led to inconsistencies. E.g. Darcy tells Elizabeth that Mr Bingley is definitely not interested in Georgiana, and that she is too young to be out. A few chapters later, Miss Bingley’s note implies otherwise. While Elizabeth doubts Miss Bingley’s note, she shows no indication of the fact she had been explicitly told by Mr Darcy that any such claim would be false. It is Mr Bennet who then claims that Mr Darcy had told him that Georgiana was too young for marriage, and Elizabeth makes no mention of the fact she had been told the same. Even when Jane is distressed later in the novel about the claim, Elizabeth never mentions that she knows for a certainty that the claim is false.
In London, Darcy overhears a conversation with Elizabeth and Mrs Gardiner, where he learns her true opinion of him. In Hertfordshire, he had also learnt from Mr Bennet that Elizabeth was not interested in him. However, a few chapters after hearing her true opinion of him, he approaches her “confident that she looks for his addresses” and tells her “your teasing responses and sparkling wit… impressed me with a sense of your having, perhaps some fondness for me”. It simply does not make sense for Darcy to say or believe this, as he has already heard from Mr Bennet that Elizabeth lacks interest in him, and has overheard Elizabeth herself say she has no interest in him!
In particular, these repetitions harmed the central concept of the story - that of Elizabeth being a “clever lass”. Putting aside my confusion about the frequent use of the word “lass” in this variation (to my understanding and experience, it is a part of Scottish verbiage, and not a word used much in Hertfordshire - let alone by multiple people with great frequency and always exclusively in reference to Miss Bennet), Elizabeth’s behaviour in this variation was directly incompatible with her epithet. Whether this is due to the author making accidental repetitions, or whether she intended to make Elizabeth look foolish, I am unsure.
When Wickham tells his tale, Elizabeth immediately doubts his story due to her legal knowledge. She is then told by Bingley that Wickham is a bad man and not to be trusted. She believes Bingley, and tells her father. However, she subsequently confronts Darcy about Wickham at the Netherfield Ball (despite already suspecting Wickham to be untrustworthy) and then raises the issue again with Colonel Fitzwilliam - at which point she finally seems to accept that Darcy was faultless in this area.
Elizabeth also confronts Darcy about pushing Bingley away from Jane. In response, he denies it, and explains his actions. She believes him and regrets confronting him. Later, her father suggests she is interested in Mr Darcy, to which she responds “I have no interest in the arrogant, self-important man who struts around judging me, our family, and all our friends. He has done nothing but assist Mr Bingley in running away from Netherfield and breaking Jane’s heart.”
At this point in the story, not only is she aware Darcy did not assist or encourage Bingley to leave Netherfield and Jane, but he had also rescued her from her altercation with Collins and had befriended her father, assisting him with some issues on his estate. She knows he did no wrong to Wickham, and has heard from Colonel Fitzwilliam that he is a good man. Her fervent objection to Darcy in this conversation therefore makes no sense in the context of the story and what has happened within it. I also found it odd that she needed to be corrected by her father on this point, after previously feeling grateful to Darcy for his intervention and feeling guilty that she accused him of keeping Bingley away. When she is in London, she alternates between feeling guilt about confronting him on this point, and accusing him of separating Jane and Bingley to her aunt - despite knowing for a fact that it is not true.
There were many other occasions where i noticed these kinds of repetitions and inconsistencies in the text. In my view, they seriously damaged that which could have otherwise been an interesting story.
I noted that some elements of the plot were repeated frequently, and led to inconsistencies. E.g. Darcy tells Elizabeth that Mr Bingley is definitely not interested in Georgiana, and that she is too young to be out. A few chapters later, Miss Bingley’s note implies otherwise. While Elizabeth doubts Miss Bingley’s note, she shows no indication of the fact she had been explicitly told by Mr Darcy that any such claim would be false. It is Mr Bennet who then claims that Mr Darcy had told him that Georgiana was too young for marriage, and Elizabeth makes no mention of the fact she had been told the same. Even when Jane is distressed later in the novel about the claim, Elizabeth never mentions that she knows for a certainty that the claim is false.
In London, Darcy overhears a conversation with Elizabeth and Mrs Gardiner, where he learns her true opinion of him. In Hertfordshire, he had also learnt from Mr Bennet that Elizabeth was not interested in him. However, a few chapters after hearing her true opinion of him, he approaches her “confident that she looks for his addresses” and tells her “your teasing responses and sparkling wit… impressed me with a sense of your having, perhaps some fondness for me”. It simply does not make sense for Darcy to say or believe this, as he has already heard from Mr Bennet that Elizabeth lacks interest in him, and has overheard Elizabeth herself say she has no interest in him!
In particular, these repetitions harmed the central concept of the story - that of Elizabeth being a “clever lass”. Putting aside my confusion about the frequent use of the word “lass” in this variation (to my understanding and experience, it is a part of Scottish verbiage, and not a word used much in Hertfordshire - let alone by multiple people with great frequency and always exclusively in reference to Miss Bennet), Elizabeth’s behaviour in this variation was directly incompatible with her epithet. Whether this is due to the author making accidental repetitions, or whether she intended to make Elizabeth look foolish, I am unsure.
When Wickham tells his tale, Elizabeth immediately doubts his story due to her legal knowledge. She is then told by Bingley that Wickham is a bad man and not to be trusted. She believes Bingley, and tells her father. However, she subsequently confronts Darcy about Wickham at the Netherfield Ball (despite already suspecting Wickham to be untrustworthy) and then raises the issue again with Colonel Fitzwilliam - at which point she finally seems to accept that Darcy was faultless in this area.
Elizabeth also confronts Darcy about pushing Bingley away from Jane. In response, he denies it, and explains his actions. She believes him and regrets confronting him. Later, her father suggests she is interested in Mr Darcy, to which she responds “I have no interest in the arrogant, self-important man who struts around judging me, our family, and all our friends. He has done nothing but assist Mr Bingley in running away from Netherfield and breaking Jane’s heart.”
At this point in the story, not only is she aware Darcy did not assist or encourage Bingley to leave Netherfield and Jane, but he had also rescued her from her altercation with Collins and had befriended her father, assisting him with some issues on his estate. She knows he did no wrong to Wickham, and has heard from Colonel Fitzwilliam that he is a good man. Her fervent objection to Darcy in this conversation therefore makes no sense in the context of the story and what has happened within it. I also found it odd that she needed to be corrected by her father on this point, after previously feeling grateful to Darcy for his intervention and feeling guilty that she accused him of keeping Bingley away. When she is in London, she alternates between feeling guilt about confronting him on this point, and accusing him of separating Jane and Bingley to her aunt - despite knowing for a fact that it is not true.
There were many other occasions where i noticed these kinds of repetitions and inconsistencies in the text. In my view, they seriously damaged that which could have otherwise been an interesting story.
This entire review has been hidden because of spoilers.
July 15, 2023
Lizzy is book smart
But not so clever.
SPOILERS FOLLOW
So many of the story characters told her about Darcy’s esteem for her but it took so long for her to see what was obvious for everyone else.
Collins is a brute like his father and is dangerous to everyone around him except men who can use physical force like he does.
Other than that the writing style didn’t lend itself to strong emotions. The Bennets finally have a son, which made the plot of the entail a non vital curiosity. The son is a nice sort but less bookish. It was mentioned he lagged in development but would still be effective as the next master of the estate. An odd direction to take.
All in all an ok story.
But not so clever.
SPOILERS FOLLOW
So many of the story characters told her about Darcy’s esteem for her but it took so long for her to see what was obvious for everyone else.
Collins is a brute like his father and is dangerous to everyone around him except men who can use physical force like he does.
Other than that the writing style didn’t lend itself to strong emotions. The Bennets finally have a son, which made the plot of the entail a non vital curiosity. The son is a nice sort but less bookish. It was mentioned he lagged in development but would still be effective as the next master of the estate. An odd direction to take.
All in all an ok story.
August 7, 2023
I originally was going to give this 4 stars but I just can’t. There are a LOT of editing problems including the author trying unsuccessfully to use French phrases. This is maddening because it is so easy to look up. How does she think Haute Ton is spelled Haught Ton. I think her mistake of je ne sais quoi was a typo but who knows. There are so many mistakes of editing I think the author didn’t even double check her manuscript. Extra words, missing words and more.
It was an interesting premise but was too long. There was humor and I really liked Darcy’s heroic portrayal. Mr Collins and his story just got ridiculous.
She does that thing I hate where she ends with Caroline. Why?! Why do authors do this. She is NOT the heroine.
It was an interesting premise but was too long. There was humor and I really liked Darcy’s heroic portrayal. Mr Collins and his story just got ridiculous.
She does that thing I hate where she ends with Caroline. Why?! Why do authors do this. She is NOT the heroine.
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July 22, 2023Bored. DNF at 3%.
April 3, 2024
Entertaining and enjoyable
It has several unexpected developments and interesting situations. The portrayal of Mr. Bennet is well written and the change of Mrs. Bennet is original as well as other happenings.
It has several unexpected developments and interesting situations. The portrayal of Mr. Bennet is well written and the change of Mrs. Bennet is original as well as other happenings.
December 9, 2025
painfully dull. I am at 9 hours left in listening, and not much happens that is interesting
Mr Collins is such a villain that it's surprising that Mr Bennett didn't kick him out earlier. Bingley goes from being in love with Jane to. telling Darcy that he is indifferent (why did some authors hate Bingley so much)? Darcy helps out Elizabeth tremendously, and she still behaves like he is an odious man?
I have over 9 hours left, and I'm DNFing
Mr Collins is such a villain that it's surprising that Mr Bennett didn't kick him out earlier. Bingley goes from being in love with Jane to. telling Darcy that he is indifferent (why did some authors hate Bingley so much)? Darcy helps out Elizabeth tremendously, and she still behaves like he is an odious man?
I have over 9 hours left, and I'm DNFing
July 9, 2023
2.5 Stars
What I liked:
- Bingley's storyline. Although he's absent for most of the story, I am pleased with the new spin on his character.
Why two stars? Questionable happenings.
Confusing:
- On different occasions, mainly in the book's first half, the timeline seems to be off. Maybe it's just me, but Darcy's 'tomorrow' felt like two or three days.
- A few sections of the book appear to be out of order.
-Several scenes repeat but in a different manner.
-Characters will forget they were already informed of XYZ.
Forced:
- Some of the responses between Darcy and Elizabeth came across as forced so that they could achieve the same tension in canon. Unfortunately, the way things played out in this variation, it wasn't always warranted. That is where Elizabeth's character comes in...
Elizabeth:
- Elizabeth is not clever in this version. It is mentioned but not shown. When it came to Darcy, she was immature, temperamental, and seemed to have short-term memory loss.
- A scene would have Darcy and Elizabeth getting along, and later, Elizabeth would say something negative concerning Darcy or wonder what he was up to. She ignores the fact that everyone in her family likes him and trusts him. He has visited with her and the Gardiners plenty of times, invited them to an outing in London, and encouraged the relationship between Georgiana and the eldest Bennets. Yet, she feels he looks down on her and her family and doesn't have a problem telling him.
- At the 85 percent mark, I skipped the rest of the scenes involving Darcy and Elizabeth once Elizabeth, for the umpteenth time, wondered what Darcy was up to.
What I liked:
- Bingley's storyline. Although he's absent for most of the story, I am pleased with the new spin on his character.
Why two stars? Questionable happenings.
Confusing:
- On different occasions, mainly in the book's first half, the timeline seems to be off. Maybe it's just me, but Darcy's 'tomorrow' felt like two or three days.
- A few sections of the book appear to be out of order.
-Several scenes repeat but in a different manner.
-Characters will forget they were already informed of XYZ.
Forced:
- Some of the responses between Darcy and Elizabeth came across as forced so that they could achieve the same tension in canon. Unfortunately, the way things played out in this variation, it wasn't always warranted. That is where Elizabeth's character comes in...
Elizabeth:
- Elizabeth is not clever in this version. It is mentioned but not shown. When it came to Darcy, she was immature, temperamental, and seemed to have short-term memory loss.
- A scene would have Darcy and Elizabeth getting along, and later, Elizabeth would say something negative concerning Darcy or wonder what he was up to. She ignores the fact that everyone in her family likes him and trusts him. He has visited with her and the Gardiners plenty of times, invited them to an outing in London, and encouraged the relationship between Georgiana and the eldest Bennets. Yet, she feels he looks down on her and her family and doesn't have a problem telling him.
- At the 85 percent mark, I skipped the rest of the scenes involving Darcy and Elizabeth once Elizabeth, for the umpteenth time, wondered what Darcy was up to.
July 8, 2023
Kindle Unlimited pays per pages read, this may be a reason for the extremely prolonged and repetitive book. The timelines are also a little messy and confusing. Sometimes I got the impression that for example Lizzy stopped being resentful only to regress in her emotions to an earlier time in the book without explanation.
September 29, 2023
Huzzah for Richard’s brother, Hamilton
3.5 stars
Clever Lass has much to offer, weaving the stories of various Bennets, Mr Darcy, and various Bingleys. Caroline is beyond redemption, yet Ms Alexander nonetheless makes me feel sorry for her plight. Richard’s brother makes a cameo, and he is almost as delightful as Amy d’Orazio’s Saye. I hope Hamilton becomes a recurring character in Alexander’s future tales. And this Mrs Bennet is perhaps the most intriguing one I’ve encountered.
That said, Clever Lass has structural problems. In a way, the story is a cassette tape, leaving the reader chronically rewinding it every five seconds in hopes of catching the lyric. In many places, sections of chapters play out, only to have the next section, featuring another character’s life, pick up the narrative a month or two prior to the end of the previous section. For example, the narrative cuts from Darcy’s scene at the end of January to Caro at Xmas.
Eventually, the cassette jams on the rewind, spitting out tape that will never sound the same, even if the listener painstakingly rewinds the tale with a pencil. Chronological errors abound. In one segment, Lizzy tells Jane that Caro didn’t insinuate that Bingley was going to court Georgiana until after Darcy left Meryton. This is wrong, because Lizzy had an entire conversation with Darcy about it prior to his departure. Later, Darcy fears going to Meryton and causing speculation (about his intentions towards Elizabeth), when he knows full well that Lizzy is in London. Meanwhile, Mr Bennet ruminates on how Lizzy’s cheeks redden every time Darcy is brought up. This is quite the trick, as Lizzy’s cheeks have been in London for over a month.
Despite the clear narrative (despite the cross-backs), some fundamental things don’t make sense. I’m still fuzzy about the legal procedure threaded throughout the book. In addition, Darcy keeps reminding himself that he can’t marry someone without wealth and connections. For all that it’s brought up, the author never mentions WHY he’s so possessed. Would his current relations kill him? It’s certainly not because of his parent’ expectations, as they had married for love.
A good editor would also catch some tiny mistakes: the Earl of Matlock wouldn’t be married to a Duchess, and Anne would have a consistent inheritance date (which in one place is pegged at 21, only later to be pegged at 25).
Despite these flaws, the story is engaging, and features fully developed characters.
3.5 stars
Clever Lass has much to offer, weaving the stories of various Bennets, Mr Darcy, and various Bingleys. Caroline is beyond redemption, yet Ms Alexander nonetheless makes me feel sorry for her plight. Richard’s brother makes a cameo, and he is almost as delightful as Amy d’Orazio’s Saye. I hope Hamilton becomes a recurring character in Alexander’s future tales. And this Mrs Bennet is perhaps the most intriguing one I’ve encountered.
That said, Clever Lass has structural problems. In a way, the story is a cassette tape, leaving the reader chronically rewinding it every five seconds in hopes of catching the lyric. In many places, sections of chapters play out, only to have the next section, featuring another character’s life, pick up the narrative a month or two prior to the end of the previous section. For example, the narrative cuts from Darcy’s scene at the end of January to Caro at Xmas.
Eventually, the cassette jams on the rewind, spitting out tape that will never sound the same, even if the listener painstakingly rewinds the tale with a pencil. Chronological errors abound. In one segment, Lizzy tells Jane that Caro didn’t insinuate that Bingley was going to court Georgiana until after Darcy left Meryton. This is wrong, because Lizzy had an entire conversation with Darcy about it prior to his departure. Later, Darcy fears going to Meryton and causing speculation (about his intentions towards Elizabeth), when he knows full well that Lizzy is in London. Meanwhile, Mr Bennet ruminates on how Lizzy’s cheeks redden every time Darcy is brought up. This is quite the trick, as Lizzy’s cheeks have been in London for over a month.
Despite the clear narrative (despite the cross-backs), some fundamental things don’t make sense. I’m still fuzzy about the legal procedure threaded throughout the book. In addition, Darcy keeps reminding himself that he can’t marry someone without wealth and connections. For all that it’s brought up, the author never mentions WHY he’s so possessed. Would his current relations kill him? It’s certainly not because of his parent’ expectations, as they had married for love.
A good editor would also catch some tiny mistakes: the Earl of Matlock wouldn’t be married to a Duchess, and Anne would have a consistent inheritance date (which in one place is pegged at 21, only later to be pegged at 25).
Despite these flaws, the story is engaging, and features fully developed characters.
November 13, 2023
Might try again in a few years if reviews show any sign of author doing a major edit or getting an editor. 26% of the way in, between the direct quotes from P&P and the 1995 BBC film adaptation, most of it feels like wasted time. Even some of the new stuff feels like I have directly read it before. Also so many, many grammatical mistakes that make it obvious spell check was used but not anything else. (Mrs Bennet “embroidered” a story instead of “embellishing” it. EB didn’t want to “addling” to Mr. Bennet’s problems instead of “adding” to them.
Title gives the the idea EB is clever but so far she is great at noticing important details and then explaining them away to fit her already perceived view of the world. She only thinks herself clever and uses that justification to approve of those who show outward signs of liking her and disapprove of those who don’t. See similarities between Jane & Darcy’s personalities yet applauds Jane for being circumspect and denigrates Darcy for being proud/dismissive.
EB acting as a scribe for her father/uncle is not a new device and instead feels like it has been lifted out of another’s work. Similarly many of the conversations and main plot points feel this way. I found myself constantly going back through my borrowed list to double check I hadn’t read this before.
EB constantly has conversations that show she has gained a vital insight or is weighing new information only to act like it never existed in the next conversation she has. Weird conversations where she discusses something (like Darcy having a sister) which she “never knew before” except she has been in the room or involved in discussions where the subject came up previously (at Netherfield when she was laughing at CB devoted attention to Darcy). Sometimes only a day or two before.
So far I do feel sorry for Mrs. Bennet in this version. She is extremely aware and caring of her family. While they all sigh and roll their eyes at her “nerves” which do appear to be an actual health issue. In some ways it almost feels like the author swapped EB and Mrs. Bennet from the original P&P. Mrs. Bennet in this version is insightful and making changes. EB changed what she said previously to always be “right” in her opinion.
At 26% (140-ish pages) of the way in I am thoroughly confused by the many 5-star reviews and just don’t think I can plough through another 450 pages looking for the gem of a story so many say exists. Also don’t think I can stay to watch the obvious chaos CB and Collins are going to cause even with everyone untrusting of them. They both show very nefarious designs yet are managed by those around them without much attempt keep them from polite society. This is especially glaring with CB because it is obvious Charles and the Hursts are aware she is a problem but they try to distract her instead of disciplining her.
Title gives the the idea EB is clever but so far she is great at noticing important details and then explaining them away to fit her already perceived view of the world. She only thinks herself clever and uses that justification to approve of those who show outward signs of liking her and disapprove of those who don’t. See similarities between Jane & Darcy’s personalities yet applauds Jane for being circumspect and denigrates Darcy for being proud/dismissive.
EB acting as a scribe for her father/uncle is not a new device and instead feels like it has been lifted out of another’s work. Similarly many of the conversations and main plot points feel this way. I found myself constantly going back through my borrowed list to double check I hadn’t read this before.
EB constantly has conversations that show she has gained a vital insight or is weighing new information only to act like it never existed in the next conversation she has. Weird conversations where she discusses something (like Darcy having a sister) which she “never knew before” except she has been in the room or involved in discussions where the subject came up previously (at Netherfield when she was laughing at CB devoted attention to Darcy). Sometimes only a day or two before.
So far I do feel sorry for Mrs. Bennet in this version. She is extremely aware and caring of her family. While they all sigh and roll their eyes at her “nerves” which do appear to be an actual health issue. In some ways it almost feels like the author swapped EB and Mrs. Bennet from the original P&P. Mrs. Bennet in this version is insightful and making changes. EB changed what she said previously to always be “right” in her opinion.
At 26% (140-ish pages) of the way in I am thoroughly confused by the many 5-star reviews and just don’t think I can plough through another 450 pages looking for the gem of a story so many say exists. Also don’t think I can stay to watch the obvious chaos CB and Collins are going to cause even with everyone untrusting of them. They both show very nefarious designs yet are managed by those around them without much attempt keep them from polite society. This is especially glaring with CB because it is obvious Charles and the Hursts are aware she is a problem but they try to distract her instead of disciplining her.
August 8, 2023
Entertaining
The story begins with Darcy's stay at Netherfield, his infamous insult to Elizabeth at the Meryton assembly, and eventually Elizabeth's stay at Netherfield to nurse Jane, all of this as per usual from the original P&P. The difference is that Mr Bennett is chronically ill, Elizabeth is asked by her uncle Phillips to help him in his law office as a scribe, and when Mr Collins eventually shows up, he's a terrible, awful person. Uncle Phillips has already mentioned to Elizabeth that he thinks Mr Bennett should investigate having the entail on Longbourn removed through legal channels. When Mr Collins assaults Elizabeth during his marriage proposal, Mr Bennett finally has the motivation to begin the process. Due to his ill health, Mr Bennett gets Darcy to help him in his efforts to remove the entail. Darcy is already fighting his strong attraction to Elizabeth, so he's happy to help and have more time with an excuse to be close to Elizabeth, although she has no very good opinion of him.
My first time reading this author, and I'm impressed. Good writing and good composition of an engaging story. The Bennett family is not so extremely silly as in the original, and that's a nice change. Mr and Mrs Bennett get along a little better, and the youngest two daughters are more manageable. Darcy comes around more quickly, although Elizabeth still takes way too long to get over her grudge against him. While Elizabeth is somewhat annoying in her inability to give up her prejudices, the romance is lovely.
I deducted two stars for the glaring need for editing. There are countless instances of missing words, extra words, words misused or misspelled. There even seems to be some paragraphs or chapters that are misplaced, as things happen outside their apparent timeline in the story. Otherwise, it's an interesting premise, and an entertaining story. There is even a very nice and sensible approach to a down syndrome child born in this era, which I felt was a brave little touch. I recommend this book for a pleasant way to pass some time.
The story begins with Darcy's stay at Netherfield, his infamous insult to Elizabeth at the Meryton assembly, and eventually Elizabeth's stay at Netherfield to nurse Jane, all of this as per usual from the original P&P. The difference is that Mr Bennett is chronically ill, Elizabeth is asked by her uncle Phillips to help him in his law office as a scribe, and when Mr Collins eventually shows up, he's a terrible, awful person. Uncle Phillips has already mentioned to Elizabeth that he thinks Mr Bennett should investigate having the entail on Longbourn removed through legal channels. When Mr Collins assaults Elizabeth during his marriage proposal, Mr Bennett finally has the motivation to begin the process. Due to his ill health, Mr Bennett gets Darcy to help him in his efforts to remove the entail. Darcy is already fighting his strong attraction to Elizabeth, so he's happy to help and have more time with an excuse to be close to Elizabeth, although she has no very good opinion of him.
My first time reading this author, and I'm impressed. Good writing and good composition of an engaging story. The Bennett family is not so extremely silly as in the original, and that's a nice change. Mr and Mrs Bennett get along a little better, and the youngest two daughters are more manageable. Darcy comes around more quickly, although Elizabeth still takes way too long to get over her grudge against him. While Elizabeth is somewhat annoying in her inability to give up her prejudices, the romance is lovely.
I deducted two stars for the glaring need for editing. There are countless instances of missing words, extra words, words misused or misspelled. There even seems to be some paragraphs or chapters that are misplaced, as things happen outside their apparent timeline in the story. Otherwise, it's an interesting premise, and an entertaining story. There is even a very nice and sensible approach to a down syndrome child born in this era, which I felt was a brave little touch. I recommend this book for a pleasant way to pass some time.
July 21, 2023
long but fun
“Clever Lass” is a very long story but a good read nonetheless. The first part is so similar to the original I wasn’t sure if I should continue, but I did and was well rewarded. Those who like a mystery will enjoy the middle, in which the theme is Whatever Happened to Mr Bingley? Those who enjoy a despicable Mr Collins will be gratified. Those who prefer milquetoast characters to grow spines will be equally pleased. I particularly enjoyed Caroline’s storyline, despite her stubbornness in the face of her challenges being overdone. It was worth withholding credulity to see the result. Both Darcy and Col Fitzwilliam shine, and Lizzy is talented without being an unrealistic genius, though I must say she’s remarkably un-clever when it comes to Darcy. I think readers who may not find this book to their liking are those in search of high adventure or a short, quick read.
I had to remove one star because of typos and because the big event at the end was so anticlimactic. Another star because so much of the story, particularly in the first half, seemed out of order and repetitive. It felt like the author worked so long writing the book that she never went back and re-read before publishing. This book desperately needs a good editor to tighten the story and correct inconsistencies. However, as a first go this was very good. I hope the author takes the advice of her readers, because she has real potential. I look forward to reading future offerings!
“Clever Lass” is a very long story but a good read nonetheless. The first part is so similar to the original I wasn’t sure if I should continue, but I did and was well rewarded. Those who like a mystery will enjoy the middle, in which the theme is Whatever Happened to Mr Bingley? Those who enjoy a despicable Mr Collins will be gratified. Those who prefer milquetoast characters to grow spines will be equally pleased. I particularly enjoyed Caroline’s storyline, despite her stubbornness in the face of her challenges being overdone. It was worth withholding credulity to see the result. Both Darcy and Col Fitzwilliam shine, and Lizzy is talented without being an unrealistic genius, though I must say she’s remarkably un-clever when it comes to Darcy. I think readers who may not find this book to their liking are those in search of high adventure or a short, quick read.
I had to remove one star because of typos and because the big event at the end was so anticlimactic. Another star because so much of the story, particularly in the first half, seemed out of order and repetitive. It felt like the author worked so long writing the book that she never went back and re-read before publishing. This book desperately needs a good editor to tighten the story and correct inconsistencies. However, as a first go this was very good. I hope the author takes the advice of her readers, because she has real potential. I look forward to reading future offerings!
October 15, 2023
Long and tedious....
I skimmed most of the second half of the book. I barely recalled the first half. This Lizzy was almost unlikable in her prejudice and stubborn inclinations.
Minor spoilers
While.Caroline Bingley rightfully deserves her comeuppance, it seemed a but extreme that she wouldn't take different actions in effort of self preservation that would result in a less extreme outcome.
For the impact and unsavory behavior of Mr Collins in the plot it seems off that in such a long and drawn out book his story is so small at the end. He could have been left to a few lines and that would have survived.
Wickham also served no purpose. His presence in the book did nothing to promote the plot.
Jane and Bingley and Mr and Mrs Bennett were all more mature versions of themselves in this book. While I found it difficult to understand the lack of communicating location of Bingley, it was feasible.
I did not enjoy this book. I just felt compelled to finish.
I skimmed most of the second half of the book. I barely recalled the first half. This Lizzy was almost unlikable in her prejudice and stubborn inclinations.
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While.Caroline Bingley rightfully deserves her comeuppance, it seemed a but extreme that she wouldn't take different actions in effort of self preservation that would result in a less extreme outcome.
For the impact and unsavory behavior of Mr Collins in the plot it seems off that in such a long and drawn out book his story is so small at the end. He could have been left to a few lines and that would have survived.
Wickham also served no purpose. His presence in the book did nothing to promote the plot.
Jane and Bingley and Mr and Mrs Bennett were all more mature versions of themselves in this book. While I found it difficult to understand the lack of communicating location of Bingley, it was feasible.
I did not enjoy this book. I just felt compelled to finish.
July 10, 2023
Promising
This story is in want of an editor. Once repeated sections/paragraphs are eliminated, a coherent, otherwise well-written story with novel ideas would remain. From the title, I thought that Elizabeth would demonstrate her intelligence by doing more than just copying out legal documents or being her father's pen. Perhaps with editing, her use of information gained from helping her Uncle Phillips would be better elucidated.
This story is in want of an editor. Once repeated sections/paragraphs are eliminated, a coherent, otherwise well-written story with novel ideas would remain. From the title, I thought that Elizabeth would demonstrate her intelligence by doing more than just copying out legal documents or being her father's pen. Perhaps with editing, her use of information gained from helping her Uncle Phillips would be better elucidated.
September 2, 2023
Potential
The story would have potential with a really good editor. As it is, it jumps around sp much, it is hard to keep track of what is going on. Seems to me the ball had to be in October but then much later it is given the date of 26 November. Maybe jumping timelines with no warning is why this ball date does not seem possible. That is one example of the problems I would sum up as continuoty issues, but it also has typos and sloppy sentences.
The story would have potential with a really good editor. As it is, it jumps around sp much, it is hard to keep track of what is going on. Seems to me the ball had to be in October but then much later it is given the date of 26 November. Maybe jumping timelines with no warning is why this ball date does not seem possible. That is one example of the problems I would sum up as continuoty issues, but it also has typos and sloppy sentences.
October 8, 2023
Good story buried in errors
The story starts strong but soon devolves into an error laden rough draft. To the Author, Please Pull this story down and re-write it. There are elements here but the story suffers terribly from poor editing and spelling as well as misplaced fragments and senseless repetitions and contradictions. Uneven pacing, and contradictions of names and facts within the same paragraph. In its current format, this story does not belong on Kindle.
The story starts strong but soon devolves into an error laden rough draft. To the Author, Please Pull this story down and re-write it. There are elements here but the story suffers terribly from poor editing and spelling as well as misplaced fragments and senseless repetitions and contradictions. Uneven pacing, and contradictions of names and facts within the same paragraph. In its current format, this story does not belong on Kindle.
July 18, 2023
Needs editing
It was an interesting story. It was a little dark at parts. The worst part was the editing. Spelling errors were present but not a big deal to me. It's the story that jumped around so much without thought of timeline. Many times I felt things were said/happened well after they should have. It was just too hard to follow.
It was an interesting story. It was a little dark at parts. The worst part was the editing. Spelling errors were present but not a big deal to me. It's the story that jumped around so much without thought of timeline. Many times I felt things were said/happened well after they should have. It was just too hard to follow.
July 16, 2023
So so
Rather frustrated by this version of Lizzy, who seemed very obtuse and petty. There are sections out of order in the middle which adds to the confusion in reading.
Rather frustrated by this version of Lizzy, who seemed very obtuse and petty. There are sections out of order in the middle which adds to the confusion in reading.
June 8, 2024
I loved it!
It was so enticing that I couldn’t put it down, this book grabbed my interest from the very first page. I couldn’t put it down, I had to know what happened next. The story is well written with a very good storyline. You will see the most beloved characters in a whole new way. This is a Jane Austen's Pride and Prejudice variation. Clever Elizabeth Bennet's world is imperilled by the unjust entail which looms over her beloved family estate, Longbourn. Her father's ailing health only exacerbates the urgency of their predicament. Determined to ensure that the odious Rev William Collins never inherits her home, Elizabeth embarks on a courageous journey to end the entail once and for all.
Fitzwilliam Darcy, an arrogant scion of wealthy lineage, accompanies his rich tradesman friend, Charles Bingley, to survey the Netherfield estate. Caroline Bingley, a woman of calculated ambition, sees Darcy as the ultimate prize. Her plans are threatened, however, when Bingley becomes captivated by the gentle Jane Bennet. Caroline's jealousy and resentment know no bounds. Darcy finds himself irresistibly drawn to the spirited and independent-minded Elizabeth Bennet. As their paths intertwine, Darcy’s conviction that she is beneath him in fortune, connections, and station, is challenged by her character and wit. Charles Bingley, deceived by his conniving sister, must overcome societal expectations, and find the courage to follow his heart. Elizabeth's audacious hope to thwart Collins and preserve Longbourn for her family leads her to an unexpected ally, and perhaps even love, amidst the chaos. Darcy and Bingley must confront their own shortcomings and reassess what truly matters in life. So with all that and more this story pulls you in and holds you tight. I highly recommend to everyone.
It was so enticing that I couldn’t put it down, this book grabbed my interest from the very first page. I couldn’t put it down, I had to know what happened next. The story is well written with a very good storyline. You will see the most beloved characters in a whole new way. This is a Jane Austen's Pride and Prejudice variation. Clever Elizabeth Bennet's world is imperilled by the unjust entail which looms over her beloved family estate, Longbourn. Her father's ailing health only exacerbates the urgency of their predicament. Determined to ensure that the odious Rev William Collins never inherits her home, Elizabeth embarks on a courageous journey to end the entail once and for all.
Fitzwilliam Darcy, an arrogant scion of wealthy lineage, accompanies his rich tradesman friend, Charles Bingley, to survey the Netherfield estate. Caroline Bingley, a woman of calculated ambition, sees Darcy as the ultimate prize. Her plans are threatened, however, when Bingley becomes captivated by the gentle Jane Bennet. Caroline's jealousy and resentment know no bounds. Darcy finds himself irresistibly drawn to the spirited and independent-minded Elizabeth Bennet. As their paths intertwine, Darcy’s conviction that she is beneath him in fortune, connections, and station, is challenged by her character and wit. Charles Bingley, deceived by his conniving sister, must overcome societal expectations, and find the courage to follow his heart. Elizabeth's audacious hope to thwart Collins and preserve Longbourn for her family leads her to an unexpected ally, and perhaps even love, amidst the chaos. Darcy and Bingley must confront their own shortcomings and reassess what truly matters in life. So with all that and more this story pulls you in and holds you tight. I highly recommend to everyone.
January 7, 2024
interesting reinterpretation
I liked the changes to the plot… although this one definitely needed better editing. The whole thing with Lizzy being a clerk was pretty unnecessary and really didn’t serve the plot. A lot of time is spent in Caroline Bingley’s head, and that was unpleasant. I stopped reading them toward the end- I don’t really care about Caroline. The Chas Bingley-Jane Bennet saga was, on the other hand too light. I wish energy had been redirected and put into Charles’ personal journey- which in my mind was much more rich with opportunities to develop that character.
Caroline doesn’t develop and the time spent working out her “just desserts” felt gratuitous and self-indulgent in pettiness. The Collins storyline went unexpected places (is there a trigger warning? I don’t remember- but if there isn’t, there should be. I wasn’t triggered but I can see how the proposal at breakfast could be a shock.) As to what happened in Kent… it strained credulity that a situation could be quite so out of hand without the Bishop, the Earl of Matlock, or the militia involved before it ended as it did. Certainly no rural community would allow such aberrant behavior on the part of someone so obviously insane.
In spite of all that, this book is a really great re-ordering of events to reach a HEA for ODC.
I will look forward to reading other works by this author.
I liked the changes to the plot… although this one definitely needed better editing. The whole thing with Lizzy being a clerk was pretty unnecessary and really didn’t serve the plot. A lot of time is spent in Caroline Bingley’s head, and that was unpleasant. I stopped reading them toward the end- I don’t really care about Caroline. The Chas Bingley-Jane Bennet saga was, on the other hand too light. I wish energy had been redirected and put into Charles’ personal journey- which in my mind was much more rich with opportunities to develop that character.
Caroline doesn’t develop and the time spent working out her “just desserts” felt gratuitous and self-indulgent in pettiness. The Collins storyline went unexpected places (is there a trigger warning? I don’t remember- but if there isn’t, there should be. I wasn’t triggered but I can see how the proposal at breakfast could be a shock.) As to what happened in Kent… it strained credulity that a situation could be quite so out of hand without the Bishop, the Earl of Matlock, or the militia involved before it ended as it did. Certainly no rural community would allow such aberrant behavior on the part of someone so obviously insane.
In spite of all that, this book is a really great re-ordering of events to reach a HEA for ODC.
I will look forward to reading other works by this author.
August 10, 2023
A complex story
This story has so many parts running through it and for me its wonderful! Darcy is involved with the Bennet family throughout the entire story and comes to actually being their saviour in several incidences. Collins attacks Elizabeth and Darcy's threat to horse whip him saved her even though the neighbors believe something untoward happened. Collins actions and his outright bullying causes Mr Bennet to seek the Courts to overturn the entail. He has Darcy's support in doing so as its costly, cumbersome, and bribes are necessary to grease the wheels of justice! Of course he's doing this because of his love for Elizabeth. Mrs Bennet has a midlife child who while males, actually has Downs syndrome according to the descriptions in the story. Darcy is appointed guardian for the young Master Bennet in order to protect his future. I enjoyed reading this even though the process of breaking the entail is too complicated for me to understand, and Mr Collins is pure evil!
This story has so many parts running through it and for me its wonderful! Darcy is involved with the Bennet family throughout the entire story and comes to actually being their saviour in several incidences. Collins attacks Elizabeth and Darcy's threat to horse whip him saved her even though the neighbors believe something untoward happened. Collins actions and his outright bullying causes Mr Bennet to seek the Courts to overturn the entail. He has Darcy's support in doing so as its costly, cumbersome, and bribes are necessary to grease the wheels of justice! Of course he's doing this because of his love for Elizabeth. Mrs Bennet has a midlife child who while males, actually has Downs syndrome according to the descriptions in the story. Darcy is appointed guardian for the young Master Bennet in order to protect his future. I enjoyed reading this even though the process of breaking the entail is too complicated for me to understand, and Mr Collins is pure evil!
July 4, 2024
Great story but needs editing
I have enjoyed all of this authors variations so far and this is no exception. The conversations between Lizzy and Mr Darcy are really well written. Lizzy is witty, Darcy is awkward. I really enjoyed the variation to Mr Bingley's story.
However, between the ball at Netherfield and the main characters meeting in London the timeline is so confused I nearly stopped reading. The timeline issues could easily be resolved with editing. Too many points of view told at the wrong times. And things happening one day when it should have been the day after or before.
There are also quite a few small things that need editing through out the book but I found easy enough to over look though a little irritating as they could easily be fixed by having someone read through it before releasing the book. Eg. "Mr" Bennet when it should have been "Mrs" Bennet, Duchess of Matlock when it should be Countess.
I have enjoyed all of this authors variations so far and this is no exception. The conversations between Lizzy and Mr Darcy are really well written. Lizzy is witty, Darcy is awkward. I really enjoyed the variation to Mr Bingley's story.
However, between the ball at Netherfield and the main characters meeting in London the timeline is so confused I nearly stopped reading. The timeline issues could easily be resolved with editing. Too many points of view told at the wrong times. And things happening one day when it should have been the day after or before.
There are also quite a few small things that need editing through out the book but I found easy enough to over look though a little irritating as they could easily be fixed by having someone read through it before releasing the book. Eg. "Mr" Bennet when it should have been "Mrs" Bennet, Duchess of Matlock when it should be Countess.
July 18, 2023
It should read the transformation
The reason for 4 stars is the length of the story. For anyone who has not read pride and prejudice—okay. However I skipped many sections of a P&P repeat.
The plot was concerning more the a “Clever lass.” It was about many characters.
The Darcy and Elizabeth story line was different but characters stayed the same. Charles and Jane took a turn that I did not expect but applauded the changes. Caroline’s storyline was sad. She had many opportunities for change but choose poorly. The best transformation was Mrs Bennet. Rosy, Collins, and Lady Catherine were big surprises to me. There was also others,
I wish to have read about Darcy’s cousins. There was little written about them, BUT what was written stole from the scene. It was NOT poorly written.
I enjoyed every positive transformation.
The reason for 4 stars is the length of the story. For anyone who has not read pride and prejudice—okay. However I skipped many sections of a P&P repeat.
The plot was concerning more the a “Clever lass.” It was about many characters.
The Darcy and Elizabeth story line was different but characters stayed the same. Charles and Jane took a turn that I did not expect but applauded the changes. Caroline’s storyline was sad. She had many opportunities for change but choose poorly. The best transformation was Mrs Bennet. Rosy, Collins, and Lady Catherine were big surprises to me. There was also others,
I wish to have read about Darcy’s cousins. There was little written about them, BUT what was written stole from the scene. It was NOT poorly written.
I enjoyed every positive transformation.
July 12, 2023
Interesting variation
Enjoyable read, good storyline. Main issue I found was so many typos! Yes, you can understand the story even with the abundance of wrong or misspelled words, but why the author failed to re-read it and correct them is unknown. The cover is nice, the legal details were interesting, and the weaving of the story around the legal situation was good. Elizabeth's misunderstandings with Darcy were a bit shallow and repetitive, ultimately leaving her to come to accept Darcy rather slowly wondering if she ever would.
Enjoyable read, good storyline. Main issue I found was so many typos! Yes, you can understand the story even with the abundance of wrong or misspelled words, but why the author failed to re-read it and correct them is unknown. The cover is nice, the legal details were interesting, and the weaving of the story around the legal situation was good. Elizabeth's misunderstandings with Darcy were a bit shallow and repetitive, ultimately leaving her to come to accept Darcy rather slowly wondering if she ever would.
July 13, 2023
Clever authour
What a hidden treasure. The story deepens and deepens as it unfolds, revealing not only deeply done character development, but also an intricate plot revolving around the vicissitudes of the law of inheritance. Not in the least as dull as that sounds! No surprise to find, in the author's notes that she is a lawyer herself. Satisfying come uppance for the two villains of the piece, although I will just say...poor Caroline! Overall highly recommended to anyone who enjoys a long, complex read, with a satisfying reflection of the journey of ODC at its heart.
What a hidden treasure. The story deepens and deepens as it unfolds, revealing not only deeply done character development, but also an intricate plot revolving around the vicissitudes of the law of inheritance. Not in the least as dull as that sounds! No surprise to find, in the author's notes that she is a lawyer herself. Satisfying come uppance for the two villains of the piece, although I will just say...poor Caroline! Overall highly recommended to anyone who enjoys a long, complex read, with a satisfying reflection of the journey of ODC at its heart.
August 22, 2023
Elizabeth Bennet with some legal knowledge, Charles Bingley with a wonderful a ha moment, Caroline Bingley creating her own troubles, Mrs. Bennet with a wonderful secret, Mr. Bennet with terrible arthritis, wonderful cousins for the Darcy siblings, and Mr. Collins as an absolute monster. All these things made for a very interesting although long story.
I liked the way the author switched points of view, even though it retold part of the story but from another characters perspective at times. I enjoyed experiencing Elizabeth and Darcy's metamorphosis as he worked at courting her.
I liked the way the author switched points of view, even though it retold part of the story but from another characters perspective at times. I enjoyed experiencing Elizabeth and Darcy's metamorphosis as he worked at courting her.
July 5, 2023
Enjoyable
While I do think the book could use editing for length and typos, I enjoyed this. The character development of our leading men was well done and interesting. The usual villains were a bit over the top, as were their punishments. A good editor would have improved the book, as I found myself skimming through boring sections, and also slowed down by extraneous and erroneous phrases.
While I do think the book could use editing for length and typos, I enjoyed this. The character development of our leading men was well done and interesting. The usual villains were a bit over the top, as were their punishments. A good editor would have improved the book, as I found myself skimming through boring sections, and also slowed down by extraneous and erroneous phrases.
August 16, 2023
Excellent read in spite of some continuity errors: Mr. Gardiner, for example, appears to have three different first names. In spite of this, it's a good plot with believable characters with an engaging storyline that includes a few things not often seen in JAFF. I loved Caroline Bingley's comeuppance, which was also original. Mr. Collins is especially vile and even Lady Catherine was taught a lesson, which, unfortunately, she does not appear to have benefitted from.
July 6, 2023
Nicely done
A long and involved variation on canon, the plot twists away with interesting results. Still a nasty Caroline, a dreadful Collins, and a less-than-confident Bingley. Darcy takes his time becoming less arrogant and Wickham is dealt with early and decisively. Enjoyable but had a surprising number of typos!
A long and involved variation on canon, the plot twists away with interesting results. Still a nasty Caroline, a dreadful Collins, and a less-than-confident Bingley. Darcy takes his time becoming less arrogant and Wickham is dealt with early and decisively. Enjoyable but had a surprising number of typos!
July 22, 2023
loved the beginning
But got tired of the drawn out misunderstanding. A shame, as a quicker resolution would have left more time for more enjoyable topics.
Still, the author knows what she is doing. It’s a great story for the most part if a bit tangled in timeline in places.
Looking forward to future endeavors
But got tired of the drawn out misunderstanding. A shame, as a quicker resolution would have left more time for more enjoyable topics.
Still, the author knows what she is doing. It’s a great story for the most part if a bit tangled in timeline in places.
Looking forward to future endeavors
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