This series is really going downhill...
There is an interesting story here, so I'm trying to slog through until the end, but the heavy-handed storytelling and self-published style and lack of editing is getting ridiculous. Typo's and ridiculously rambling situations abound! Oddly, I don't remember the previous books being quite this bad. Were they, and I just didn't notice for some reason?
I realize the author is trying to write an exciting book, and the target audience is likely teen-aged girls, but do even young girls really enjoy this, out of the frying pan into a larger frying pan, type of storytelling? I mean, Thor and his band of merry men are continually stumbling from imminent death from invincible enemy to invincible enemy for the duration of this entire book! They even pick up a young slave girl who has an inordinate amount of knowledge about the dangers of the locale they're planning to travel through. Dangers of the sort that nobody lives to tell about. And yet, she willingly accompanies them! And one hapless member of this group is continually the one that first gets grabbed by each new monster they encounter. Is he just stupid? Bumbling? Looks tasty? We'll never know, I suspect.
Well, maybe I'm being too harsh... Some of the monsters aren't actually invincible. One will immediately regrow any appendage that is chopped off, or immediately heal any damage dealt by any weapon, but the locals know the secret. You just need to toss a bucket of water on them, Wicked Witch of the West, style. Water? Really? So I'm assuming there is no rainfall or even humidity in this world? Sure, the story is fantasy, so we're expecting to suspend reality while we're reading, but this is hard to stomach even from a fantasy world standpoint!
And the character development is shallow at best. Queen Gwen, a young woman with no leadership experience is instantly revered and beloved by the citizens of a city she's never actually visited before? Errrmmm... Why? She has literally not-done-a-single-thing to account for "her people" accepting her in this way, let alone to to unanimously accept her as the queen they'd willingly give their lives for. -sigh- The author does mention that their leader, Lord Srog, was unfailingly loyal to her father, the previous King. Something to do with his charging the citizenship lower taxes than he could have, I understand. Low taxes charged by your father apparently make you exactly the type of person that people want to lead them.
I wish I was exaggerating here, but this actually happens.
And with no battle experience or training in battle strategy, the various "generals" of a combined army are all taking strategy advice from this young woman? Let alone allowing her to actually direct the attacks? I guess it's due to the few phrases that she utters that cause these experienced military men to gaze at her with surprise, admiration, and respect? (Again, this actually happens.)
Then the "million man army" besieges the impenetrable city that hasn't been conquered in thousands of years due to it's nearness to a deep canyon, and the fact that the citizenship can simply retreat to the lower levels of the city, which literally untouchable by any attackers. Of course, after making this retreat, then Lord Srog asks Gwen, what now? We only have 1-2 weeks of food!
Seriously? You have this fortress that has been unassailable for thousands of years, but in all this time, you've never considered what happens after you've trapped yourself in this hole? You really have no exit or food storage once you've entrenched yourself into your safe haven? I... I don't even have words for that... Hey guys, I have a great idea! We can trap ourselves down here where they can't touch us! Let's just hope that whoever wants to destroy us gets bored and leaves immediately, otherwise our only option is starvation, starting next week...
It's all just a ridiculously large pill to swallow. I'd imagine even the target audience feels this is a bit much.
Well, I just downloaded the next book in the series. If the next book continues in this same vein, I don't know that I'll make it to the end of this "EPIC*" fantasy adventure. Wish me luck!
*You keep using that word. I do not think it means what you think it means...