Waiting in Line [For the new iPad]

by Max Sebastian

An overnight stay outside the Apple Store, ahead of a major product launch, becomes a magical experience when Dylan Winfield takes a chance and strikes up a conversation with an attractive girl waiting next to him in the line.

Noelle Shaw is tired of guys who take her for granted, don't know how to please her in bed, and don't care to find out.

When Dylan cheekily suggests maybe Noelle needs to find a different kind of guy, perhaps one who will let her tell him exactly how to please her, the pretty brunette is in for a night she will never forget...

Genres: Erotica, Short Stories

49 pages, Kindle Edition

First published May 9, 2013

About the author

Max Sebastian is the Amazon-bestselling author of The Madeleine Trilogy, What’s Mine is Yours and Rock Her World.

He specializes in sizzling hot, romantic erotic stories that challenge the conventional boundaries of modern relationships, featuring naughty wives and insatiable girlfriends, along with the husbands or boyfriends who adore them.

Max lives in London with his wife and two children.

Reviews

[Dee · Rating 3 out of 5]

2.5 stars rounded up.

This is my dumb luck for not noticing first this is tagged 'New Adult' and that is exactly the type of feel the story had. It felt like it had been written by and told from a 15 year old boys POV. If that was what the author was trying to do, then he succeeded.

I personally didn't find this story erotic. Listening to a bunch of girls talking about what they want and how boys just want to get off, didn't excite me. The fact that one girl commanded the boy the 'do it' did not make her a strong/dominant character IMO.

If you like new adult stories, and risky public sex, you might enjoy this story.

The positive, it was free and a quick read.

[Victoria · Rating 4 out of 5]

A short story, less than 50 pages. It was extremely quick and cute. Very interesting to see a detailed oral encounter written by a male as well as coming from a male POV. I liked it.

[Chakib Miraoui · Rating 4 out of 5]

This lad manages a situation very well. He scores a great chick, pleases her with his fresh oral skills. Aventurous story, quite unnverving

[Vikram · Rating 5 out of 5]

Impressive, Max Sebastian.

I'm impressed by author style of writing erotic stories unlike other adult stories where you get to know the story ahead due to its nature of writing. And so you lose your interest in starting.

In this very story, the author was successfully able to create a pleasant aroma of dawn and night scenes. Also the story doesn't bear with repetitive wordings which eventually maintain swift flow of the story.

I loved the way the dialogues were written for the character's. It was equivalent to watching a romantic movie, of course spiced with erotica.

[Cassie Hess-dean · Rating 4 out of 5]

Dylan is in line waiting to purchase an ipad for his sister. There is a group of girls in front of him talking about men and sexual acts and he comments on the conversation. Noelle the one he is most attracted to seems to like his input and she and her friends include him. They get to know each other a little and Noelle seems to want to be a little closer. What will happen between the two while they are waiting overnight for the electronics store to open?

[T. · Rating 4 out of 5]

Gotta give the writer credit on this one, he turned a boring subject (standing in line overnight for an iPod release) into a fairly good story. Its unique to get the guy's POV listening to a group of gossipy girls- but it was handled well and it was well-written. Surprisingly, a good free ebook- I enjoyed it. I will definitely read something else from this author.

[UberApril · Rating 3 out of 5]

A story focusing in two opposites with some sexy times. She's a beautiful popular young woman and he's the average shy young man. I just had a difficult time thinking they were doing this in a sidewalk and surrounded by people. Safe sex. The cover photo is hot.

[Jennifer Payette · Rating 4 out of 5]

i liked it, very hot. only wish it was longer

[Regina · Rating 3 out of 5]

Cute short story.

[Wendy · Rating 3 out of 5]

I rather enjoyed this short story. Waiting in line made erotic. I would love to see the author expand this story.

[Lizzie · Rating 5 out of 5]

will write more later

[Melody · Rating 4 out of 5]

wow! ......

[Sarah Scott · Rating 4 out of 5]

Good short story. Would be nice if he could expand on the story and make a little longer or even a follow up of what happened throughout the summer

[Nicole · Rating 2 out of 5]

Free on Amazon
It was a good little read but towards the end I got stuck into it and it just ended. I was hoping for more but other then that it was enjoyable.

[Jamie Leigh · Rating 3 out of 5]

an okay read. unrealistic but the writing was good and a somewhat humorous tale.

[tyrianpurple · Rating 4 out of 5]

surprisingly good. despite the lame title.
the content is so much more and more than rich for some short stories. i love to see all of the issue from man POV.