The beginning was quite lame. Rhianna is the oldest of 5 daughters and her family is starving and her parents can't afford all of them. So her dad sold her at an auction to get money to take care of the rest. Funny how he can afford 6 people but not 7....Anyway, the men there wanted to see her body so her dad must have told her to do it, and she started unbuttoning her bodice until Rayven had her stop. Where is your backbone, you doormat? Where was any strength? And Rayven is so absolutely feminine. Raven isn't a good name for a guy anyway, but especially when you add the y, it just makes it sound even more like a woman.
Her dad told her to do whatever Rayven asked without question and asked if she kenned his meaning...dad of the year award material right here. But Rhianna didn't seem to mind. She said they she understood. She tried not to hate him and tried to feel satisfaction that her family would be fed. Rhianna went right to the door when he dropped her off, didn't even think of running away. I had no respect for her.
When I found out she was only 15 I was so turned off and repulsed. Couldn't she have been a grown woman, an adult at the least? It was so unbelievably creepy to have this young girl in the home of an immortal.
It was oh so creepy to have this man call her a child, a young girl, to have young girl's dreams, and to call her a child-woman while he was lusting after her. Here's yet another author who promotes stalking as romance. Rayven went to her room each night and touched her cheek, lips, and neck, listened to her breathing, her heartbeat, and her blood flowing through her veins. Just because women married young back then does not mean a young teenager and a grown man make a good romance. And sneaking into someone's room and watching them while they sleep is grounds for a restraining order.
Rayven's behavior was so villainous. As he was in her room each night staring at her and listening to her bodily sounds, he would feed from her. Rhianna had nightmares, scars, and lethargy by morning while he was being kept alive. That's something the villain would do, not the hero. He's brought many young, beautiful, poor women to his house but of course Rhianna is the youngest and most beautiful. And even though tales abound about the women who come to his house disappearing, he pays them and sends them far away instead.
Time passed so quickly. It was only pg. 36 that Rayven was obsessed with her, couldn't stop thinking about her, wanted her more than he had anyone else. By pg. 46, almost 6 months had passed. Who condenses 6 months into 3 chapters?
Not only was Rhianna the most beautiful woman he'd ever seen, but she was good at the piano, painting, she learned to read quickly, she was bright and had a keen intellect, and sense of humor. I don't know why authors keep thinking readers like this type of heroine. It's not realistic; it's not relatable, and it's not likable.
The very first night she was there, he came to her room after she changed into her nightgown and she asked him if she should get in bed, then asked if she should disrobe. Wth is wrong with her? Why would she ask him that if she didn't want him to? Even if you expect the man who bought you to use you for sex, why the hell would you bring it up and make him think of if? 0 respect at all for the woman who went docile to this purchase and offered herself to her buyer. They talked of why he bought her one night and she told him she thought he had so she wouldn't have to disrobe in front of everyone. But she said he never came to her bed and I'm like wth is wrong with her? I can't respect a woman who wants to be considered desirable by a man so much that she wants him to use her for sex. She had shades of too-stupid-to-live.
She was there for over 6 months, and when Bevins told her Rayven was sending her to Paris, only then did she mention her family. She hadn't even thought of them once since she first got here! And the author tried to spin it that Rhianna felt guilty for living in such splendor while her family was poor. Yeah, you really believe that because Rhianna hadn't mentioned it once.
Rayven offered her a boon, anything she wanted, and she said she wanted to stay with him. He agreed to have her there for a year. Montroy came to see her and Rhianna told him like there was nothing wrong with it at all. He asked to court her and this shameless loser agreed to let him. And even though she told Montroy she loved Rayven, he still wanted to marry her, convinced he could have her heart. Of course! Dogged, determined side male isn't even turned off by the heroine loving another man. Rhianna was going to use him to make Rayven jealous, a truly respectable pursuit.
Rhianna undressed before the maize and put a cloak on, dropped it when she found Rayven. He hadn't seen a fully naked woman in over 400 years. Rhianna was the first woman to love him and want his touch since he'd turned. And just when you start to relax, the author opens up and drops a bomb. He'd taken a harlot, young but wise beyond her years, as a vampyre, to ease his hunger but he killed her instead.
Once when they kissed she had seen a glimpse of him attacking a man and she was afraid of him and wanted to go home. He locked all the doors and wouldn't let her, asked her to pity him. So not attractive. But lo, Rhianna said she wanted to stay. You fear him, but you don't want to leave. Makes sense.
We also got to hear about the woman who turned him. She was married, the most beautiful woman he'd ever seen. His lust ran hit and he went to events hoping to see her, kissed her in gardens and corners.
Rayven left for good, told Rhianna to marry another. He found Lysandra's home somehow and asked her to kill him. He told her she was still beautiful. She caressed his hair, and once she'd also drained him she kissed him on the lips. Wtf.
There were some nice moments, like when he was outside at night and she had seen him and went down to join him. He asked if she would kiss him, and she replied if he wished, and he said "Not as I wish." And he wanted her to kiss him of his own free will. He had told her not to go in the east wing and she did one day. He had smelled her and knew she had been in the forbidden part of the castle (there's always a forbidden place in the castle...) and he questioned her about it at dinner. He knew he would give her a necklace to go with a dress because she was the first woman to be brave enough to disobey him.
The night before she was to leave for Paris, she went into the labyrinth garden and found him at the center. He hadn't heard her and said no mortal has ever been able to creep up on him. She told him to only ask her to stay and she would.
He gave her sister a dowry so she could marry and he had their house fixed up and an allowance, as well as paying for Rhianna's schooling, and giving her spending money.
She went to Paris for four years and came back at age 19. I had wondered if she'd have to age before they were together because this relationship was in desperate need of some propriety. She told him she'd missed him and he said it was impossible to believe.
There were comments about one of his favorite past times being pursuing beautiful women and the best times of his life in lush, candlelit bedrooms.
He would ask her to do something and she would say "If it pleases you." She was all the time asking if he was mad at her, what she'd done to anger him, apologizing for whatever she did to offend him, asking why he didn't touch her, and asking him to touch her. She was a pathetic, spineless, doormat.
The romantic scenes with them touching and kissing were so boring I could barely pay attention. And then the sex. Both times--he time they almost had sex and the time they really did--he thought back to the whore he'd had. Granted, it wasn't out of pleasure; he was afraid he'd kill Rhianna the way he had her, but I don't want the hero remembering any other woman when he's about to sleep with the heroine, and I don't want to think of it before a romantic scene.
The sex was barely described, hardly any details at all, glossed over and finished so quickly. Totally not worth the long wait and all the false starts and failed attempts.
Rhianna had told him he was kind and he said no one had ever accused him of that. Another time she'd told him he was kind and he said no one had ever accused him of that. You already wrote that. Rhianna had accused him of that the first time she told him...
She made references to his breath, like he lost his breath, or he looked like he wasn't breathing, when vampires don't have breath. That’s a major oversight.
It was all so generic. His home was on Devil Tree Mountain. What kind of lame, villainous name is that? He had a cloak that was almost alive. It was bizarre!
And a plot that consisted of her doing nothing more than shopping and blowing his money. At one point she said "And why shouldn't she?" in regards to buying something, because he had offered her anything she wanted.
I was disappointed to learn that the poems were written by other people, because they were the only good thing about the book.
The plot stayed at ground level and I kept pondering on what she was going to do to lift this off the ground and wondered if she was just going to have Rhianna continue to buy hats and dresses. It wasn't until about the 85% mark that something of interest actually happened when Rayven left and intended to die. Her health was tied to his and she began declining as he did. Salvatore made an appearance, and performed a ritual to return Rayven to mortality. With the many paranormal romances I've read, I've never found a book in which the hero returns to being a human to join the heroine in mortality and grow old with her. Kudos for originality and that's what I wanted to happen for them. But this relationship was all kinds of f'ed up. He wasn't attractive. She kept throwing herself at him, hot and cold. One minute she wanted him despite everything, the next she was afraid. She was constantly worried about offending him and displeasing him, forever apologizing even when she had no idea what she'd done. He was messed up, a complete piece of work with a crap ton of baggage. She constantly pitied him because he was a pitiable creature, and that's not hot. I barely felt anything reading these two. They're not inspiring and this was dismal, depressing, and dragged out.