1.75*
I don’t know what I was expecting when I opened the pages of Daughter of Shadow (book #1), but I can tell you that I did expect a whole lot more than what I got.
The writing style was atrocious and the editing was sub-par at best. I think the author has changed the title of her book, so before chapter one even began, she had a note in the front of the book stating that editing for the edition that I had on my kindle had been updated with some new-and-improved corrections (but nothing else within the story had changed). Perhaps this set my expectations up for failure, but I didn’t even think much about that comment until I began reading. If this edition was the one with the editing updates, I shudder to think what errors this novel had in its prior renditions. It became so bad that I started highlighting the mistakes I saw – something I never do. To add to that, the writing style was juvenile and weak. The flow of the story was awful, and the pacing was rushed.
The world-building was poorly executed too. Frankly, there wasn’t a lot of world-building being done to begin with and it came mainly in the form of info-dump sessions (largely occurring because our uneducated and highly sheltered heroine was so ignorant about the workings of the world). There were so many unanswered questions by the end of the novel. It wasn’t interesting, it was irritating.
While this book is fast-paced making the story easy to read, the plot was severely lacking as well. It simply didn’t make a lot of sense. Decisions the characters made, the twists and turns the story took, the reasoning and justifications for the plot points were all often nonsensical (or at the very least, they weren’t explained very well).
Okay, so the writing wasn’t great, the world-building was lackluster, and the plot fell flat…did the characters at least make up for these failings within the novel? No, not one bit.
I couldn’t stand Calla. At certain times, it’s implied that she’s smart and “wild,” filled with strength, and is spunky to boot. And yet, almost every action Calla takes displays the opposite. There were so many inconsistencies within this novel and, since Calla was the FMC, these mainly revolved around her character. Some examples of this include:
• Thomas, a boy Calla has always disliked in her town, gropes her when he’s sober. And yet, when it’s dark and he’s seriously drunk, Calla allows him to walk her home…through the dark and secluded woods. What kind of a choice is this? Does she have no self-preservation at all?
• Calla claims that she doesn’t often drink. And yet, she’s drinking to the point of drunkenness 3 out of 4 nights she’s spent since getting rescued by the boys.
• Despite never having had fighting lessons, Calla boldly claims that she can defeat Rohan (a trained warrior) in a fight, even making bets that she’ll beat him. So, it should come as no surprise that she’s overpowered easily (although he should’ve put her on her back long before he actually did).
• Calla is able to fight off Thomas, get arrested (knowing that she was going to be sentenced to death), fight Rohan, and even get attacked by the Ebon but the second she’s almost let go (by an Ebon warrior holding her at knife-point), she faints. Faints from WHAT???
• Calla claims that she doesn’t sleep with just anyone but after 1 day, she’s lusting after her 3 rescuers (or is it “captors?”). After 2 days, she’s kissed one of them and would’ve done more if she hadn’t been interrupted, after 3 days she’s re-kissing the same man while being felt up (at the same time) by another (i.e. she already being shared) and again, this would’ve gone further had they not been interrupted. She barely knows these men, but after one whole day, she’s ready to jump into bed with any (or all) of them. Discretion be darned.
• She gets mad at one of the guys and accuses him of viewing her as a possession, but then turns around and wants to be possessed by him.
• Although not solely about Calla, the town of the Relinquished shut down at night, locking the gates so that there was no way in or out of the city. And yet, once the 4 of them leave the inn, they escape really easily (and it was pretty anti-climactic).
• In chapter 19, Calla breaks down and starts crying. However, a few sentences later, Leander walks in in time to “stop her tears” (which had already been “spilling from her eyes??”) I’m confused. Was she crying or not?
• In the same chapter, at 75% through the book, Calla is only just now voicing any concerns or thoughts about her family. She was NEVER worried about what they may have thought happened to her, how they’d feel when she disappeared, or how they’d be affected by the powers Calla revealed. It’s not until 75% through that she even bothers to have one single thought concerning them. She’s been more worried about her little pet dragon than her parents or her sibling. It was like Calla loved no one but herself and was too self-absorbed to bother thinking about other people she “cared” about. It was a real “Wooow” moment (since thinking about how Calla’s family would feel was one of my first thoughts).
Overall, I found Calla to be meek, uncaring about others (not out of malevolence, just out of selfishness), and she made really stupid decisions so many times throughout the journey. She was ignorant about the world but never asked many questions or tried to understand it either. Her lack of curiosity about the true state of things was astoundingly ridiculous.
Really, what this largely comes down to is a lack of character development. There was no character growth (except in lustful feelings) and each character was pretty one-dimensional.
Leander the “High Lord” of Stonecrest (and almost-prince), Galen the elf, and Rohan the Lightbringer warrior were okay. Again, their characters weren’t very fleshed out and they fell flat, but I think they had the potential to grow on me. I just don’t think the author really took the opportunity to give these characters any depth or feeling.
I’m also really confused by Luin (the dragonkin pet). He seems to fly away when danger is near, but he’s sure to attack one of the guys for getting too close to Calla. It wouldn’t surprise me at all if Luin was really a dragon (somehow) and became another man for Calla to want to sleep with and possibly fall for. – This is just a guess though.
By the end of this novel, nothing meaningful or really very interesting occurs. I wanted to like this book so much more than what actually ended up happening. I’m going to put down the series here because I don’t think I could get through another book by this author.