Whoa, props for author for writing her first book, but this was glaringly a badly written novel. The dialog was far from natural, the plot development lacked any transition, the story told versus describing or letting the reader feel the characters emotions, and the plot was so far from believable - I think there were at least 5-7 climatic moments that came as fast as they went. To top it off, had huge editing issues - almost every page lacked sufficient quote marks to show when a dialog ended, attribution wasn't given a lot of times in text messages confusing reader on who was saying what, words were misspelled, etc. Oh and at some pt, everyone has a POV, even very very minor characters - like 3 sentences suddenly of inner monologue of Vinnie?!
Surprisingly I did finish this one, was quick, but I was laughing out loud with how bad things began to sound when I read them. To show I am not trying to deliberately be harsh, here are some examples:
"He screamed out her name as he planted his impression inside her."
IMPRESSION?!
"But meeting Brad's mother was different, she wasn't just someone off the streets."
Weird comparison....
"To our first date, hopefully you'll agree to have many more with me. After dinner, do you want to take a walk near the river to end our perfect night? I already know it's going to be perfect cause you are."
- what male says stuff like this? From the first page it seemed like they were engaged!
This could completely be a personal preference and I know I am a harsher critic than some, so maybe others will come to different conclusions, but my first suggestion would be to leverage beta readers heavily.