A great storyline but a good editor is needed! Very amateur, littered with spelling, grammar and punctuation errors (in fact, punctuation was noticeable by its absence). Three things in particular were irksome - the excessive use of exclamation marks, the way Tom used the word 'babe' in virtually every sentence, and 'yea' being used instead of
'yeah' or 'yes'. If it had been written correctly and more professionally, I would've given it 5 stars.