It seems like an interesting idea for a story (and might even make an interesting script), but was very predictable and a little cheesy. I’d guessed the ending two chapters into the book and found myself skimming through endless paragraphs of Tom feeling more fear or slapping the pavement with his sneakers. This would have been salvageable with a good editor but over all felt like it was a first draft.
I had difficulty with the writing style because I found it to be filled with clichés, repetitive descriptions, and sloppy sentences. Worse, the character is supposed to be in high school but does not think, act, or talk appropriately for his age (aside from the frequent changes in what era of English the author uses). What the hell kind of a high school “longs” for an attractive classmate and describes her “sweet beauty”? Just…no.
The dialogue is written in a very amateur way, with characters repeating themselves, using clunky sentence structures, and using each other's names way more than is realistic, making it tedious to read. (Hi Tom. What are you doing Tom? Go to the chapel Tom. Tom, answer the phone. There’s fog Tom.) It was the kind of dialogue that sounds ridiculous when read aloud or even imagined while reading it silently.
The characters themselves are boring and undeveloped or underdeveloped. Right, we get it, the girlfriend is a rich cheerleader who is blond and pretty and has a doctor for a dad and lives in a big white house and is so amazing. And the newspaper editor is cool, but unattractive, freckled, pug-nosed, etc. Characters like this write themselves because they have no identity or depth, and there are no surprises. You could basically say, “the newspaper editor looks like you’d think” and be done with it.
I’d be more charitable if this was a debut book, but someone who is repeatedly published should know better. Then again, Twilight is a best seller, so maybe not. That said, a two out of five star review seems far too harsh for a book that is ok but needs work. Yet, a three star reviews means (according to Goodreads' rating scale) that I liked it, which I did not.