i really wish the goodreads rating system would let me give this 2.5 stars instead of 2 but anyway
i'm not sure what my biggest gripe with this book would be aside from the fact that it was disappointing. i first saw this series mentioned in a wikipedia article about the goetian demons a while back, thought the description was cool but didn't try reading it for like a year until i saw that the first one was free for kindle. sure, the description given by goodreads here was kind of awkward and clunky, but the premise was intriguing enough, especially since it seemed similar to something i was writing that also involved demons from the goetia.
this book is not living up to its potential.
i want to say that kauffman had some interesting ideas but i'm not exactly sure what could have been done to make this better.
i have so many feelings and so many issues so i'll go through things one by one.
the characters range from well-written if a little boring to flatter than cardboard. my feelings about nico were mixed; on one hand, i have a soft spot for angry characters--i think we forget that anger is just as much a reaction to trauma and betrayal and misfortune as depression is--but sometimes being in his head for too long got old. Nico, who is a relative newcomer to Dis and the main character, is essentially the vessel that we the readers use to gain insight on all the coming and goings of hell, but it didn't feel like we necessarily got much from Nico. it's hard to explain, but let's put it this way: Nico only knows what we know, which isn't much until we get all these info dumps later on, and with the point of view jumping around at times, things got real confusing.
his backstory wasn't badly written but it felt weird and out of place. right as things were building up in the main plot we'd find ourselves suddenly thrust back and forth between the action and Nico's human life. I feel this would have worked better if this story was spaced out, getting only hints and such in this first book and have it slowly unravel through the next ones. We got hints about Cadmus's past which i thought was working well until it was kind of suddenly dropped in another flashback? it was hard to tell because the end got confusing.
anyway, I liked Cadmus. He definitely played well of Nico's fieriness without being flat. there isn't really much i can say about him other than i kind of wished he were the main character at times.
the villains were all really boring. how do you manage to make demons fighting boring? well, beleth was such an OBVIOUS VILLAIN. we know so little about him other than the fact that he's evil, he's a king, he's mean, etc. like the very moment he was introduced i absolutely knew he was going to be a villain. on the other hand azazel's part in betraying lucifer kind of came out of nowhere.
really, they were really boring and one of the worst things you can have in this kind of story is boring villains.
i don't have much to say about Mammon other than why the fuck is there a reference to The Shining in this? how would mammon know that. how would any of them know that.
which brings me to the next point--how does hell even work in this book? why do they speak like normal, modern day humans, use our slang and curses, somehow have knowledge of our memes? it's mentioned once that Dis has a common dialect, so what is that dialect? there's a lot of questionable world-building stuff in this but this was my biggest issue with it--the fact that it just seemed like earth but filled with monsters.
the writing in this book, while it had its share of good moments, had a ton of rookie mistakes in it. it's tells a LOT instead of showing. it's most obvious when the text straight up says something along the lines of "for some reason, barbas made an emotional investment in him [Nico]." we don't need to be explicitly told that. we should be able to gather that ourselves through the events and dialogue. also "for some reason" is a terrible, terrible phrase to have in your writing in my opinion. you should know why things happen! at least as long as it's not a mystery, of course.
another nitpicky thing about the writing is the way the characters show disgust at the forms of demons. like, Nico you were a leper in life, you're the Horseman of Pestilence, and you've been in Hell for 200 years and you still get grossed out by the things that would gross out a normal person? like, DUDE YOU'RE IN HELL!!!!
the fight scenes seemed really stilted and lifeless and there were SO MANY OF THEM. at times it felt less like there was a central plot and more like a string of battles loosely connected.
it really is a shame i didn't enjoy this much because i wanted to like it SO BAD. i do plan on reading the rest eventually, and i really hope they get better from here.