Oh, Brother Hughes, you can do better.
My complaints:
(1) There was no story. The book just meandered through a historical period. It was to the point where I wanted someone to cut Will just to get away from the monotony of Liz cleaning the house and Will overworking and attending Sunday sermons. I don't want to read the Days of '47 version of my boring life. Things finally picked up at the end, but it was too little too late.
(2) The characters were flat. They got all their development in Book 1, and they need no more development. Will is never going to be anything but a Peter Priesthood, the very model of a modern Mormon man thrust into 1840s society. In sum, the characters were lifted straight from a certain Gerald N. Lund series, and that is no compliment.
(3) Bro. Hughes advocates within this book a less sugar-coated version of history, and he commendably takes steps toward that, but he follows the good-and-faithful writer's stereotype of Joseph Smith as the jovial and charismatic sage, not the hothead who, say, throws trumpets around in Zion's Camp or is still fistfighting his brother in their adult years. The book also creates a confusing paradox of condemning the excommunicated unfaithful who disagreed with gathering en mass while simultaneously agreeing with their position that this is exactly what caused neighbors to hate the Mormons. Also, what was that bit about Liz not having anything to do while Will was away at work? These women made their own soap and butter and no counter space for a breadmaker.
(4) This is a tiny complaint, but it rubbed me the wrong way that the character in the present-day story is descended from a biological rather than adopted child of Will. It seemed a subtle snub of adoption when the adoption subplot is largely what carried the story. Hughes passed up an opportunity to show that heritage is more than blood.
Please don't feel bad, Dean. You're still the only LDS fiction writer for me.
Things that worked:
(1) Points for daring to include a female blessing. (Hurrah for Israel.)
(2) I appreciate the attempt at accuracy in depicting the circumstances of Joseph Smith's martyrdom. With the way the account is told in church, one is left wondering what was their deal, those guys who killed the prophet? (Musta been Satan at work, as well as beer and coffee and Pepsi and anti-gun legislation.)
(3) The theme of building Zion by helping each other is an important one, as is the theme of excluding those not of our faith.