A young woman travels to tell a hopeful suitor that her shallow, materialistic sister will not be coming to marry him, as she has already married another man. This book has a very familiar theme, similar to one I read this summer.
Some modern ideas…
…On guns:
“she was holding an instrument of death”
“the only weapons I’ve seen up close are the ones behind glass displays at the museum. I never imagined I’d be holding one, much less learning how to shoot someone.”
Learning how to shoot does not equal learning how to shoot some ‘one.’
…On marriage:
“You’re an adult. Surely they don’t plan to choose your husband for you?” This was common in those days.
Some editing errors, with misuse of vocabulary words, or people teleporting, or behaving out of character:
“To Kate’s surprise, Mrs. O’Malley clasped her hands in hers. “I’m so pleased to meet you!” Then, a paragraph later, “His mother approached,…” She had not backed away in surprise, and cannot approach if she’s holding both Kate’s hands already.
“Though hot from working in many layers of clothing, she [Kate] was satisfied with her efforts.” Kate would not have considered her many layers of clothing to be such. She would have considered it to be the normal amount of clothing, and that she was hot because of the weather.
“She didn’t see Josh until she was almost upon him. “Kate?” “Josh!” she gasped. Seeing her distress, he ran to intercept her.” How can he run to intercept her if she is almost upon him?
Josh doctors the soles of Kate’s scraped feet, and Kate “panicked,” strongly objected, and was “Mortified,” with both of them awkward and embarrassed. Moments later Josh sits next to her, his arm around her, cups her cheek and kisses her with none of the previously noted symptoms!
Between bits of conversation, Josh, going to visit a neighbor with Nathan, emerged from the trees on horseback, then Nathan came to stand beside him, and Josh scanned their surroundings. Then Josh was pounding on the door with Nathan at the bottom of the steps.
Josh “moved to peer through the single window. It was coated with grime to the point of being opaque. He could only make out bulky shapes.” “Opaque” means that you can’t see through it at all.
Josh “stuffed his hands in his pockets” while he was presumably holding a lantern.
Kate held Josh’s hand as he helped her over a log, then “Immediately he curled his free hand around her waist and swung her to the ground.” It sounds like she has a 12” waist, if he can lift her down with one hand!
“A shutter descended over his expression.” A camera shutter, perhaps? Window shutters do not descend. I’m not sure how camera shutters work.
A corset is described as “tortuous,” which means “full of twists and turns” or “excessively lengthy and complex.” The intended word for this context is “torturous,” which means “causing agonized suffering,” but I consider it a bit strong, since I don’t think wearing a corset is truly comparable to being drawn and quartered!
Josh played the fiddle for an hour to comfort himself after a physical fight. Is it really possible to play the fiddle with bruised/broken ribs?
On care with horses:
Josh and Nathan left the drunk neighbor’s horse, presumably saddled, loose in front of his house when they left for home.
Josh was surprised, and “Yanking on the reins, [Josh] guided the team to the side of the street.”
Worried, upon reaching his destination on horseback, “Jerking to a stop, he slid to the ground,”
Josh keeps appearing out of nowhere just in time to rescue Kate from the drunken neighbor.
I keep having trouble figuring which man is surprising Kate by appearing and speaking.
Includes a list of clothing items worn by high-class ladies.
Christian.
Contains: Pemarital kissing, former premarital intimacy, stalking, rough treatment of horses, former child abuse.