So I just finished the first book of this series midnight magic. And gosh I was hoping for so much much more.
It had so much potential to be the perfect romance slow build love story. Instead it just fell flat.
2nd son Hawk has to marry a Scottish lady out of a plea and promise to his dad. His dad the Marquess, was saved in battle by Scotsman. As a thank you twenty years prior, the marquess offers one of his sons to marry one of the acotsmans 3 daughters, Clare, the painter, 17yrold Violet, the chatterbox and good socialite, or 19yrold perfect for him Frances. Problem Frances doesn’t want to be sold off as a wife and disguised herself as an ugly Dowd.
Thinking that he then won’t be bothered by his ugly and mousy wife he selected Frances and he can go off back to his mistress who then tells Hawk he has to treat his wife as a true lover in the bedroom and not as a mousy lady who doesn’t want sex.
So to please his father and since his elder brother has died most mysterious death, he does his duty and slecrsnFrances.
Problem. : from the get go it’s all about the husbands duties and he has to bed his wife and make an heir. And while she consents because she has to, she lets him stick his dick in her without Andy love or passsion or him asking her any feelings. There were just too many nights like this. It could have been so much more. And still be the same sorry. So disappointed when he is chasing her through the house in the middle of the night and finds her in the sewing room. And then he somehow consoles her back to the bedroom and fucks her because she “lets him”. It just felt too rapey. And maybe because she wrote this in 80s. And that was still kinda the trope. I don’t know. It just could have been so much better. I hustended up not liking Hawk and I really wanted too. He could have talked to his father about his fathers experoence with love and women and his mother.
My rewrite would be this. Marries dowdy woman. As obligation. He beds her once to consimmmate the marriage. And then leaves her alone back to London his mistress and Wiley ways for months to unbeknownst t to him fix up the house and become the beautiful woman that she is and with knowledge of keeping the horse breeding business on the state turns all their financial troubles around and through all that they learn to grow and love and respect each other and end up having hot sex in the tack room for really first time. Slow build. Months apart. Then given time when he reappears to still have spar and poke each other and call each other out. Could have been so much fun watching their love/hate and get some good kisses in there. And have him actually stay in bed with her after he’s fucked her. Because really there was no making love. He didn’t teach her the art of love making. He just did it to her.
Oh god. It could have been so much better. I can’t even write what it should hav even. But the whole time I was reading it I kept erewriting it in my head.