This book was a waste of money and time, though I decided not to waste too much of the latter on it. No need for spoiler warnings, since I didn't finish this thing. Couldn't even go further than four chapters.
I don't know more than the premise in a bit more detail.
The two heroes are Adan and Lyan. They're not from Earth, but from aplace called Belizair (I assume it's the name of the planet, but that wasn't clarified in part I read). They are only on Earth on a mission to retrieve their mate - a woman who according to scientists from their home, is genetically compatible with them both.
They have to do this since enemies of their race, the Hotalings, used genetic weaponry and rendered their females infertile. Some humans apparently descend from Fallon, after said Fallon beings mixed with humans in the past, and finding them and mating them with two males (or more?) seems to be the only way to save their species.
So their mission is important on a personal and global level.
The heroine, Krista, is a woman on the run from an obsessed, criminal ex-boyfriend. Having witnessed one of his crimes, she has been running until she can testify against him, then hopefully return to a normal life when he's behind bars, and can't get to her anymore.
I have no problem what so ever with the premise/plot. In terms of story, I knew what I was getting buying the book. So I'm not going to complain about clichés or anything - heck, I like them, I think they're pretty fun. I like the whole "Mars Needs Women" trope, I like protective alpha males, and I don't mind the whole "they see the girl and they KNOW she's the one they're looking for".
So I won't complain about clichés. Honestly I might not even care if the author didn't bring anything to make it fresh, new or any sort of twist to make it more interesting or unique. (I don't even know about that part, I didn't read far enough to find anything like that.) It wouldn't have gotten five stars, but I might still have enjoyed it.
So what DID earn it one star? The writing itself, and the characters. I can also mention plot progression, but it goes hand in hand with characters, so...Moving on.
The Writing:
Bad. Confusing as hell. Bad again.
Description was ok sometimes, but mostly it wasn't.
In all five chapters, all I got was that all the main characters were hot, the males were tall, the girl was short, Adan was blond, so was Krista, and Lyan had dark hair. And I'm honestly not completely sure about any of what I just said. I don't like having the character described in excruciating detail over and over, but I'd like to know what to picture when the characters are introduced. I don't even know the color of any of their eyes. I don't know the guys' sizes - as in height and build, people, get your head out of the gutter. It's frustrating when I'm being told the characters are freaking staring at each other, but the description given to me is what I would see in a short glimpse.
I also never got much of their surroundings. For instance, at the beginning, I knew they were at the casino, I knew there were slot machines and...nothing else. I don't need to be told every little thing, but I don't even know where they were standing. Were they being inconspicuous, or was everyone noticing them? I honestly pictured them being weird and standing right in front of the door, looking around and surely making everyone start to feel kind of paranoid.
Also, there was too much switching of points-of-view. I enjoy reading a story from more than one point of view, but for the love of God, don't switch every paragraph or every other paragraph. Is it so hard to stick with one for a while, make it clear when you change to another? Sheesh.
Not only did it get confusing, but rather than getting any real feel of any character, we ended up with none, with all the head hopping.
Speaking of characters...
The Characters:
Adan and Lyan:
Honestly, neither had much of a character, so there's not even any need to separate them.
Adan was the light-hearted one, from what I could see. His two main actions/states of being were "smiling" and "chuckling/laughing".
Lyan was the "dark", intense one. What he did most was "growl".
Krista:
Oh, man. Oh, boy. I am really going to have to make an effort not to rant to much about this one.
First and foremost, one big question: Why the heck wasn't she in the Witness Protection Program? There's a brief mention like "After getting away from Alexi (the ex-boyfriend), she didn't know who to trust", but...I'm sorry, that does not stand as a good explanation to me. Maybe something later comes up that says he's like...bribing EVERYONE, Federal agencies and Government included or something, but I don't think anything would really sit well with me as a reason for this.
Onward...she is a woman who has been on the run for a while, from what I gathered had a few scares already. She's not only moved from city to city, she has moved from state to state. If she's running from a guy with the resources to hunt her down despite such, she would have to be smart. She should be paranoid.
At the start, she enters the casino seeming just that, watching out for being seen, and with resolve not to stay longer than she needs to. At least, it seemed like it.
(By the way, she was there to get money to survive, using her knowledge in math. Yet the first thing she does is use a slot machine. Not blackjack or poker or something...Just...Really? Knowing math makes you win at slot machines, now? Do I really know THAT little about gambling?)
Yet she sees two guys - attractive guys...but also BIG guys, staring straight at her, and she doesn't run. Not glancing her way and exchanging words and smiling, perhaps indicating two normal guys who just think she's attractive or something...No, they are staring right at her.
She considers running, but she does
Among her reasons for not bolting? For not thinking they are after her? They are hot. Her ex-boyfriend - and this is not even my own sarcastic remark, this is her actual trail of thought - would not hire guys like those.
I must have missed some important feminine instinct or basic survival lesson or something, that teaches you attractive guys can't mean you any harm or be hired by crazy people.
Only after accepting their out of the blue dinner invitation, and having dinner with them, does she run when they mention bounty hunters. (The only action that made any sense given the character she was suppose to be.) And even then, she feels bad afterwards. She even goes back to the same casino.
And when she sees Adan again there, rather than being the least bit cautious, she once again summons her "hot guys can mean us no harm" mental excuse, and when he approaches her, she apologizes. Then, for no good reason, decides to tell him about her problem. About having a crazy but powerful guy hunting her down.
That a bit of a big thing to throw on someone - someone she has no intention of getting to know or at least be with for long, since she doesn't want to involve him or his friend in her dangerous life...And not only that, why would it seem safe to reveal? Maybe they're not actively hunting her, but they could be connected to her ex, they could be opportunistic and hand her over in hopes of reward.
This just does not seem like a reasonable way to act for someone living like she is.
Also, when Lyan comes along and asks who is after her, she is only briefly suspicious. He was not there when she talked about it. Yet he knows. Nevermind someone paranoid, any NORMAL person would find this weird. Would, in the least, ask how he knew.
But nope, instead, she just agrees to go sleep with the two of them.
Alright, I failed at the no-ranting part.
But I'm done now, only one little note about something I didn't think to mention before...
The Sex Scene:
(Since I only read one, whether there are more or not.)
Terrible. I won't drawl on about this too, though, I've gone on long enough.
So that's it, that's my humble opinion. I ask you to respect it, because I respect everyone else's.