I do love a good story. The author’s topic is interesting - WWII in Italy. She titled her story to draw people in. The book jacket is colorful and pleasing. The book begins and ends with Mimi’s thoughts…but the pages between the prologue and the epilogue is where the book is, in my opinion, an epic fail. There are three issues in this review that should, at worst, prevented this book to ever be published or, at best, to be re-edited, revised, and rewritten before going to press.
FIRST FAIL: the writing. The American nurses were written as country bumpkins because one was from Dallas and one from Kentucky ( though she did smoke a corn-cob pipe) Only Carrie, Vito, Anna, and Mimi were more than one dimensional characters. The rest of Daiko’s characters were flat, stagnant, and unappealing.
The author included so many idioms that I lost count. Phrases such as “hit the hay” and “raining cats and dogs” were used which must confuse readers who are not familiar with American idioms.
The author over used the word “Jerry”, slang when referring to the Germans, and the word “pumpkin”, an endearment Carrie called Mimi. Daiko even borrowed Scarlet O’Hara’s famous line “Tomorrow is another day.”
Some sentence structure was, to me, just sloppy.
Carrie’s letters home gave the location of her medical unit and news of what was going on in the war. In actuality, that type of information was not allowed and was censored from the letters of those serving overseas during WWII.
But, the worst - almost insulting - writing read like a children’s book. Using the literary term Onomatopoeia , the author describes the bombs dropping with “Boom! Boom! Boom!” The machine guns firing as “ack ack ack” or “whack whack whack”. “The beating of his heart “Thud. Thud.Thud.“ Seriously?
SECOND FAIL: the dialogue. The dialogue for the nurses took center stage for awkwardness. The overuse of the word ain’t as in “ain’t he cute,” “ain’t no need to,” “ain’t it a beautiful day,” “ain’t none of his business,” made me cringe. The two nurses, Carrie and Louise, frequently used the word fixin’ as in “fixin’ to go somewhere or do something. I guess it would not have bothered me if the nurses talked that way all the time (yes it would) but to sprinkle the words around to make the characters seem more American or Southern redneck seemed gratuitous and fake from the author.
The “country” sayings never stopped. To list a few:
“better shake a leg”
“all tuckered out”
“cold as a frosted frog”
“talk the ears off a mule”
“Feeling so low she could jump off a dime”
“Still hanging around like a bad smell”
“as welcome as a skunk at a lawn party”
And, my personal favorite, as German planes were dropping bombs on the medical unit, a nurse, as she fled to her foxhole, exclaimed “Dagnabbit!”.
THIRD FAIL: the setting. The descriptions of Italy were lovely. Many famous places and works of art were mentioned. Unfortunately, the descriptions read as though they came right out of a travel guidebook. I did learn that during WWII there were certain cities designated “Open Cities” due to their famous artistic heritage. Bombs were not to be dropped on those locations. This designation was not always honored as the author wrote that the bridges in Florence were often mined.
Along with Daiko’s guide book terminology of Italy’s sites and art works, the writing of the encroaching Germans, as well as the British and the American forces, read like the author got her information from a history text book. Basically, she wrote A visual tour of World War II through beautiful Italy as battles were fought and the number of gruesome deaths calculated. The resistance fighters, who had a pivotal role in defeating the Germans in Italy, fell short to me.
I was shocked and bewildered at the four and five starred reviews this book received. I cannot fathom that the issues I have mentioned did not bother most readers. I cannot recommend this book. The writing is simplistic and the dialogue is stiff and peppered with silly colloquial idioms that make the characters seem as though they don’t know how to express themselves. The historical details are textbook ready while the battle scenes were gory and heart breaking. Kindle Unlimited needs to do better. Daiko has done better. I know I am in the minority, but this book is a mess.