So, hmmmm…. This had a cute premise but oof, the writing was thin. Everything happened insanely fast and there was no real connection other than some insta obsession.
- no third act breakup
- mature MMC (mid 40’s), FMC (30’s)
- blind MMC, ex military
- insta everything - no small moments, just bad communication and then they’re in love and getting engaged
- no OW/OM; both are instantly obsessed; she had one date w another guy; no mention of him w anyone else.
- cringy dialogue
- mid spice; low angst
So Jason went blind two years ago in some sort of military (?) accident and is having trouble accepting it. He meets Olivia when he gets his hair cut and they both fall instantly. The dialogue is so middle school awkward it was painful. Then she just shows up at his place, but then gets cold feet, and then weirdly offers him a haircut and then freaks out when they kiss and then he goes to her place and…. Anyway, they finally get over themselves, talk and get together.
Such a sweet idea for a story; love the inclusion of the blind obsessed MMC, but the writing needed a lot more finesse and the story needed a lot more depth.