Damn it, I would rather choose not to be harsh since these two installments are her debut books, but I can't help it. The writing was subpar, lots of grammar issues, syntax issues, and the dialogues were simply poorly constructed. The abrupt transitions between ideas and arguments (particularly the dispute in chapter 25) were jarring, unnatural, and characterized by a constant bouncing back and forth. Again, just like in the first book, information and certain statements were continuously repeated, as if the chapters were entirely independent of each other and not building upon one another.
The characters don't really evolve. I have never been as annoyed by a FMC as I was by Ari. There is no self-reflection, no introspection, no emotional development WHATSOEVER. She embodies ambivalence in persona. 80% of her character consists of blaming others for her own misery and actions in which she is 100% involved (Kane is about to kiss her, she closes her eyes and “gives in to the forbidden moment” but it's his fault?!). I wanted to feel sorry for her, but the way she behaved was just childish! She contradicted herself in every statement about Danny and Kane because the author insisted on introducing the love triangle with Kane. The author wanted you to doubt her feelings, yet the inner monologues always felt artificial and forced. Also, Kane is labeled as the “good” guy even though he sleeps with her best friend–despite having obvious feelings for Ari. How can this contradiction be completely overlooked by Ari?
Furthermore, the entire story was crafted with a level of amateurism that was beyond reproach. Starting the first chapter, from Kane's perspective, was a very strange idea. From the third page, it was evident that the plot would proceed in a certain direction. The deployment scenes were written as if they were happening just around the corner and not overseas. That was incredibly unrealistic and sloppy writing. The whole story was constructed in a way that each chapter carries its own drama, and one moves from one drama to another. The sweet, silent moments between the MCs, the ones that would build a bond, were completely missing! It was exhausting to read. The interaction with Danny's father was redundant and did not contribute significantly to the plot, aside from adding additional drama.
Overall, both books were promising, and I really wanted to like them, but I'm very disappointed.