This book didn't start on the right foot. I just want to tell publishers to be careful when comparing a book to the Hating Game, because it can do things to draw direct comparisons. I am not going to spend time there, though I am happy at some point to discuss. I will start with this book for its own merits.
The heroine (told in first-person POV), Henley, is in marketing. There's a lot of details around her job. Most of them come in the form of a choppy inventoried style. "I got up, dressed for work in x,y,and z, did my mascara, put on my purple lipstick. Then I sat down and peed and flushed the toilet" (This isn't a direct quote, but how I felt reading it.) I love details. However, details should serve the story,setting, emotion in some way or they are extraneous. This book needed a heavier hand in editing, and in the end, is really only a novella without the banal inner workings and cataloging of thoughts and actions of Henley.
Then there's the characters themselves. Henley isn't just prickly. She defensive and unlikable without clear cut motivations. She seemed pretty petty and mean, in my opinion. At one point, in the first chapter, we meet her neighbors: she can never remember which is which-Sophie and Sophia-but then is irritated her neighbor calls her "Hannah."
Henley is going for a promotion that at various times she was made for, not excited about, knew she was going to get, and quickly finds out her competition will be Michigan-based (she's in Seattle) work from home nemesis Graeme. Once she finds out he'll be competing she believes she has no chance due to the good ol' boys-her boss favors Graeme-yet a chapter later she is making plans about her increased paycheck.
Graeme and Henley got off on the wrong foot because he didn't mention he was on the phone in her boss's office at one point, and he seemed to take credit for her work. Since then he's maintained their boss's favor. Then end up on a cruise together, and she's consistently aggressive toward him. It's so painfully obvious he's a decent person, who really seems to like her for some unknown (at this point) reason. Even she thinks that. So motivations are lacking and all I can think "oh, she's just not likely to be a great person." Over and over again-again the narrative style is essentially being blasted with details that are not adding to the story-she tells us "oh that was pretty nice of him," all while continuing to attempt to hate him.
Which brings me to another thing. There's a not perfect gentleman on a cruise with his older friend who has taken to Henley, who is traveling at this point with her sister Walsh, who she's awful to. Her inner thoughts about Nikolai are atrocious. Not because she's not wanting to get hit on, but because he's unattractive so everything he does is also unattractive.
Throughout the cruise, Henley and Graeme are preparing their presentations. There's some weak elements here in that I don't know how to care if Henley gets the job since Graeme seems to really want it-and Henley just thinks she deserves it. Therefore, this does not create any level of tension for the plot of the story. Nonetheless, they have shared experiences, but it doesn't seem to progress their relationship in an organic way. More like the author wanted them to do something romantic together. In all this mess, Walsh begins hitting on Graeme, and Henley is also kind of horrible to her sister. But there's the secondary plots that come out of nowhere, and get resolved just as quickly that I have to think they are there to manipulate our feelings. And the workplace piece?
I'm not touching it. I have to say that this is why I sometimes struggle with contemporaries. It all had to wrap up too neatly for HEA. I thought the challenges were real, I've been there, I just thought the solution lacked a bit of awareness.
Ultimately, I could see some promise. With heavier editing and more focus, maybe this would have sung. I don't know. Without the proper touch, enemies-to-lovers can sure feel juvenile. The conflict and motivations were unconvincing, and so was the narrative. Ultimately, a disappointment.
Onward to my next arc with water-based cover and title.
1.75 stars
Thanks to netgalley & the publisher for this arc, which has not affected my review